Made me laugh a lot. Especially the jumping out the window.
this was HILARIOUS!! i think lily would have called snape severus, though. awesome job!
Author's Response: You are almost certainly right, but this is pre-Deathly Hallows, so you must excuse me! :) But thanks for reviewing, amazed you found this in the depths of the MNFF archives...
omg i laughed soooo much that my sides hurt if i even move so since im typing im in total pain. well i lov ethe part were they jump out of the window and then ward of lily with garlic and then how they stole the idea but they really did put the pus in there. well im ur number 1 fan and i love ur storiez.
Author's Response: XD Thank you so much! It's been such a long time since I wrote this, so I'm impressed when anyone manages to find it, let alone bother to review - but I still really appreciate it, thanks!
Wow, I stumbled across this at the forums- and I must say, great job! All of your fics I have read (so far) have been lovely, BTW. I like how you used the idea of snippets, and knowing the information only after someone mentions it. It must be very fun to write! Although I was a bit annoyed at how you formatted it (as in "Lily:" "James:", making it seem more like an online chat than actual note-passing; I'm sure you could've done it classier). I found it as kind of an average day between the Marauders and Lily- the way you did that (make it average) was very nice.
The characterization was nice, although I thought the Marauders were overreacting when they jumped out the window- although it did provide for comic relief, which is what you need to have in a humor fic. I was impressed at your characterization of Alice- she was not widely known in canon (or rather, mentioned at all) but I thought you conveyed her, even in this short piece of literature, very well. I got the midst of her character from the fic, which is exactly what you need to do. Sirius was spot-on! I couldn't of imagine him better, even in canon. Remus was pulled off very well too, and so was Peter (although he wasn't featured much; but I'm sure that was the point.) Lily was mayyybbbeee a bit too dictatorial (or evil) IMO, but I guess when someone does that to you, you have a tendency to get revenge.
All-in-all, nice (albeit short) fanfiction!
Author's Response: Wow, this is so detailed! I love it. =D I agree about the formatting, but in my defence this is about four years old and my first published fic! It was definitely intended to be just an average day in the lives of the Marauders, so I'm glad you liked that! Anyway, thanks for the review, it's always nice when you don't hear anything of a fic for ages to suddenly get some feedback again. =)
this fic is awsome! i think you should write more like this:)
Author's Response: Thanks!
It's lot's of good. Lots, and lots andlots. This demands a sequel.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! No sequel I'm afraid, but that's really sweet! :D
That was hilarious!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
I can't stop laughing and I was already chuckling from Trees but not Forests. But this one made me hysterical.
I have a feeling that llamas are your favorite animal. I burst out laughing when I read that part where Remus is talking about Sirius lughing in his sleep. I'm quite glad that no one else is in the room with me or my sanity would have been in doubt.
Other places which would make my brother doubt my sanity were when Sirius set James's hair on fire. That also seems to be one of your favorites. Sirius did the same thing in the Black Knight.
And the part when Sirius, James and Peter jumped out of History of Magic and started running across the grounds. That was the best. I was imagining the scene in my mind and it was priceless. Way to make Binns stop talking. Imagine if it were McGonagall or even better, Umbridge. EVEN better, Harry and Ron in Potions with Snape. Briliiant! Pure genius.
And this was your first fic. Even more astounding. Really, it doesn't seem like your first. Even though it was in the form of notes, there was a real flow.
Oh yeah, and the racoons a garlic were great too.
Author's Response: Well, technically it was my first PUBLISHED fic. There are four or five early ones which will never ever be shown to anyone because they are so appallingly bad. I only keep them because I'm one of those sad people who keeps absolutely everything for its nostalgic value, even old cinema and train tickets. They are basically watered down and badly written/punctuated versions of the fics I was reading for "inspiration" at the time (although I basically just took their storylines and gave the original characters new names). But anyway. I can't believe you noticed the hair being set on fire! I thought that was a running theme only I had ever noticed ... yeah, for some reason the image just stuck with me as being hilarious, so I just kind of kept adding it into things. I'm really not sure what to say about the llamas though ... =) Thanks again!
I really like this fic. It's super funny. I was really fun to read.
Author's Response: Thanks!
you know, there are some fics that put me in lots of little laughing fits. this was 1 of them. great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm very pleased you enjoyed it.
I loved it , so cool! I totally think you should write a sequal!
Author's Response: Hmm, nice idea I guess but not really going to happen any time soon unfortunately ... I think it works better on its own.
OMG! I LOVED this story! I read the stories about Janey first and thought that these would pale in comparrison. But Once again i was wrong-i love his! You portrayed the characters, their dialouge (i suk @ spellin, andtheir actions perfectly! I adore Sirius, and when you throw Alice and Frank Longbottom in their, it was just pure genious! Great idea, and PLZ keep writin...yer great @ it! :D
Author's Response: =D Thanks so much! I really enjoy it. Personally I'm always kind of surprised when people still like this, it's so old now! It was like my first fic ever to be accepted. Thanks again for all you reviews!
if lily had played the prank in the morning then they wouldven otbeen able to sleep all night because they knew they would die... no trying to be critical just giving an idea for a sequel... (hint hint)
Author's Response: That's true, but I'm sorry, I'm going to have to shoot down the sequel idea ... I do have lots of other fics though, if you want to read them. Thanks for reviewing. =)
that was A-MAZE-ING!!! lol... i couldn't stop laughing...
Author's Response: =D I'm glad to hear it. Thanks for reviewing!
Oh this was so funny, I can just imagine their expressions while passing the notes. I think my favourite line was It’s not my fault if he can’t keep his patronisingly perfect nose out of other people’s note swapping. And raccoons? reminds me of Joey in friends for some reason. Did Sirius get fixated on raccoons because of "THE GAME" ? Sorry different fic, but how great if we link them. I think Remus was being slightly naughty when he let slip that Sirius was the actual instigator of the prank on Lily, his oops didn't sound very genuine. And Lily is a little too smart for Snape's good too.
Author's Response: Yes, that's probably true, but she WAS angry with them after they did it. It's possible Remus was being a little naughty, you're right. When I wrote this (about two years ago) he wasn't, but now I've gotten better at this writing/characterisation thing, it really is very possible. =D
i think i have reviewed this story(im quite sure i have actually) but i will again coz its really good.
its really great and i think you really hammered your charecters and they are all great. i especially love your remus. he is just so, well... remusy(if thats a word)
i also love the way sirius is quite random. very funny and great story indeed!
another think id like to say is that the great think about this story is that even though it only shows the notes passed, it is still very clear what happened in between the times where there werent notes passed and the reader really has a clear understanding on what is going on. that is a really great accomplishment.
congrats on a wonderful and funny story!
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Sirius IS quite random, and I'm glad it flowed nicely. It's really old. It was, like, my first ever fic. I'm glad people can still enjoy it!
lol! that was great! i love how it was just all notes
Author's Response: Thanks! It was a lot of fun.
I loved how you explained the plot perfectly only using notes passed between the characters.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
its great, i really loved it. i cant wait to read more of your fanfics
Author's Response: Thanks, I hope you enjoy them!
Excellent plot! loved it. =D
and, congratulations for the 100th review!! =D
Author's Response: Cod, I know. On a little one-shot, too! What's that all about? Not that I'm not gratefull. But boy did I not expect that. Thanks so much!