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Name: Howie (Signed) · Date: 01/04/06 12:02 · For: Flying Without Wings
Seriously? It was good. Good, not great. I mean, I'm sure all the H/Hr shippers will love it, especially since you threw in that note at the beginning about the "Proudly Delusional H/Hr Shippers Club." But coming from the perspective of someone who doesn't ship H/Hr, I didn't find it convincing. I like your writing, and the way you describe what Harry's thinking, but the conversations between Harry and Hermione fell flat for me. They felt fake. And my advice would be to work on your dialogue. Make me believe it, and I think that you'll become an excellent writer.

Author's Response: Well, thanks, but I wasn't out to convince anyone. I wrote this one-shot purely out of my desire to play with these characters' emotions, and try my luck at balancing romance and angst as well. And I'm sure you, as someone who doesn't ship H/Hr, didn't find it much convincing as I would have if I read fics pertaining to other ships. But anyway, thank you, and I'll make sure to check, re-check, and triple check my dialogue next time.

Name: livingbreathingdream (Signed) · Date: 01/04/06 10:53 · For: Flying Without Wings
*wipes tears from eyes* touching. i'm at a loss for words, so i'll just leave you with that. *blows nose loudly* look forward to seeing more of your work soon.

Author's Response: *blushes* Thanks so much!

Name: Darth Potter (Signed) · Date: 01/04/06 2:07 · For: Flying Without Wings
wow, that was just, wow. it was very well written and just so...real. i don't think i've read anything else of yours, but this is truly amazing writing. keep it up, i'm lovin' it.

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I do have a rare pair fic up in Hermione/OC... :D

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