Reviews For Fifteen Minutes
Reviewer: ZomgShaylex
Date: 02/14/09 22:20
Chapter: Life Over Death

Wow.
I loved the poem by itself, but the one-shot is even better.
Man you can write.
You have some serious skills.
The detail to mannerisms, the diction, and the believability of it all are perfect.

Reviewer: Sick_Angel
Date: 12/19/06 6:42
Chapter: Life Over Death

God that was beauttiful, nice work.
(I can't picture Pansy with long hair, in the movies her hair was usually short and black)

Reviewer: capella_black
Date: 10/05/06 15:03
Chapter: Life Over Death

WOW. That was incredible. Not only a deep and poignant message, but beautifully written and entirely believable. The pacing and repetitions did a wonderful job of conveying the mood, and I think you paid just the right amount of attention to the right details... small physical gestures and objects, mingled with deep thoughts... really sucks the reader in.... One of the best one-shots I've ever read.

--cb

Reviewer: twistedtinkerbell
Date: 07/28/06 11:33
Chapter: Life Over Death

oh it made me want to cry. it is so deep , i love it!

Reviewer: hearyoume
Date: 07/21/06 17:18
Chapter: Life Over Death

Um... I'm pretty much speechless. Wow. Powerful. Tragic. Breathtaking yet... heart breaking.
*Applauds*
I've read many fics (and written a couple myself) which include Draco turning his back on the life that was chosen for him and refusing to serve Voldemort any longer - and then turning to "the good side". But this, I have to say, is probably the most realistic version of what he'd be thinking when he finally snaps. It is certainly nice to think that Draco would be capable of becoming one of the good guys, and I don't think it's entirely impossible, but once you really consider his character and think about everything he's done, this is probably the best depiction I've ever read of what his breaking point would be.
*Adds to favorites* All in all, amazingly well done. I wish I could write a better review, but for some reason I'm having a heard time putting my thoughts into words. I guess your story blew me away so much that I can no longer form coherent sentences (haha, just kidding) :D

Reviewer: emzi_06
Date: 07/21/06 12:39
Chapter: Life Over Death

Woah! This is amazing! It nearly made me cry :O I love all your storys, you truely have a gift! x

Reviewer: LalyW
Date: 07/12/06 16:10
Chapter: Life Over Death

I liked it.Very touching,indeed.

Reviewer: some_kinda_superstar
Date: 06/25/06 0:09
Chapter: Life Over Death

wow! this is a truly amazing story. i love it!

Reviewer: HEADBUSTA911
Date: 05/19/06 11:15
Chapter: Life Over Death

Beautifully written made me shed a tear or two. Draco made the right choice, harry would have murdered him anyway, harry has wayyyyy more skill.

Reviewer: iamwhoiam
Date: 04/23/06 18:10
Chapter: Life Over Death

Whoa. I'm stunned. Really, and truly stunned. This was amazing, a true display of a lost soul's emotions. Stunned. Yeah, I am stunned, this is that good.

Reviewer: iamwhoiam
Date: 04/23/06 18:07
Chapter: Life Over Death

Whoa. I'm stunned. Really, and truly stunned. This was amazing, a true display of a lost soul's emotions. Stunned. Yeah, I am stunned, this is that good.

Reviewer: Tinka Blinka
Date: 04/21/06 21:25
Chapter: Life Over Death

awesome

Reviewer: drace7
Date: 04/15/06 13:33
Chapter: Life Over Death

i thought it was a good stry

Reviewer: Silver Apocalypse
Date: 04/05/06 7:26
Chapter: Life Over Death

Omg, that was bloody brilliant...as usual. I love the way you convey Draco's emotions and the tough decision he has to make. I'm actually surprised to see him trying to warn Pansy to get out of the war/ Death Eater corner while she still could. It really brought out another side to the Draco we all love! 10/10

Reviewer: TheoriesOnly
Date: 02/09/06 19:28
Chapter: Life Over Death

Oh my gosh, that was purely brilliant. I can't even leave a review that would come close to justifying your story... it was just amazing. I say infinity/10, and I'm not going to say any more in this review, for fear of ruining your other worldly story.

Reviewer: Astrea
Date: 01/26/06 0:29
Chapter: Life Over Death

“Draco Malfoy stood at the foot of his large canopy bed, staring unblinkingly at the naked, sleeping girl entangled between his white sheets.” You waste no time getting into justifying the R rating do you? Hee hee. Very interesting way to start. For some reason I liked the unblinkingly the best of all the sentence. He isn’t just staring at her, he no longer sees her lying there. He is beyond that. Well… at least that is the sense I got from it. It sets it up for what is going to happen later on.

“His chest rose and collapsed, rose and collapsed; far too heavy.” I like that you repeated the motion of his chest. Normally this would not be recommended. But in this case it really works and helps the reader to feel it and make it so much more real.

One little problem I have with the story is that he is living with his parents. He is barely out of Hogwarts, and they let him have Pansy over to sleep with him? I don’t call me old fashioned, but I think that their family is too concerned with appearances and tradition to allow such a thing. But it is a minor point in some ways. In other ways, it is how you make your setting work.

“And it was the closest demonstration to love he’d ever witnessed.” So are you saying his mother doesn’t love him? She made an Unbreakable Vow with Snape because she worries about him. Is that not a sign of love? I am not saying this is wrong, I just merely want an opinion, I would qualify it as love, but you may not.

“The word on his tongue felt like speaking a foreign language for the first time; awkward, flat.” Wow! I love this description. It really captures what you were trying to say. I understand the abstract concept better in that one sentence than if you had carried on for pages and pages trying to describe it. It would have eluded you.

“And the last of it stapled itself within his heart, so hesitant to be destroyed, so very hesitant… so resilient.” Wow. Once again, you wrapped something up in words that otherwise would have been impossible. You really strike a chord and hit the nail on the head.

“leaving his spirit frostbitten and scorched.” I don’t know, but it seems like they are complete opposites. But once again, it works.

“leaving his spirit frostbitten and scorched.” Maybe this is me just nit picking, but wouldn’t he call him his father, rather than Lucius? You have to remember you are telling the story from Draco’s POV, so you have to relate not only to his character, but how his character relates to other character’s within the story.

I like that you count down the time left. To me it pulled me away from Draco’s sentiments and put things back into perspective. I don’t know how to explain it, but it is almost as if just when you begin to learn something about him, you get pulled back out of his head in a way.

I like the way you had him yelling at Pansy. Somewhere deep inside of me, I almost hope that she did begin to question, that she did notice his despair, that maybe there is still hope for him once he is gone.

Small detail “And, feeling it’s weight in his hands, the aching burn in his chest loosened.” It should be its. Otherwise it would say feeling it is weight. That always gives me trouble too.

Throughout it all your underlying theme of the power of choice is very evident. I don’t agree with suicide, but you wrote it so achingly real, that when I read it, I wasn’t the one making the decision, it was Draco himself.

Well, overall, I liked it. I don’t agree with all of it. But you really made it work within your story. It is very powerful and most of all I liked those two phrases that I pointed out. Keep writing like that and you are really on to something. Happy Writing!

Reviewer: TantePotter
Date: 01/03/06 7:04
Chapter: Life Over Death

Oh my god this was really good! I agree with Sir Kay, the characters were really in character :D Poor Draco though, it's sad that he had to take his own life... I give it a 10/10

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I know, my heart goes out to Draco in this particular fic as well. But, he did have it coming. :) Thanks again, dear!

Reviewer: Sir Kay
Date: 01/03/06 5:52
Chapter: Life Over Death

Absolutly Brilliant. Very well written. The characters seemed to be very IC. It kept me glued to the story the entire time. Keep writing, you definately have the talent!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! What high praise! I appreciate your confidence in me, Sir Kay. And thank you for reviewing. :)

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