omg ahhhhhhhhh i want more!!!!!!!!!!!!! so amazing im at a loss of words!!!
aaaww! this really is a great story.
Yay, I love it. Short and sweet.
Harry loves Ginny, Ginny loves Harry and I love the Story.
SB
it's good, but then how do ron and hermione get together? you should do a sequal about that.
hehe cute i like it you should right a sequel about Ron and Hermione
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Nice one! I would write a R/HAR and H/G sequel where they do see the shed though.
Author's Response: Oh, there had been a lot of pairings visiting the shed in my imagination. Just getting the time to sit down and write them out keeps them from here.
I loved this! I think you took the plot nice and slowly, but you didn't draw it out so much that it was boring. I love the way you worded things, and all in all it was a fantastic piece.
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This is a great one-shot! I enjoyed reading it a lot. Keep up the good work!
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This is a great one-shot! I enjoyed reading it a lot. Keep up the good work!
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Very, Very Cute. I loved it! Keep going!
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I don't think it should be THE END. I really like your writing. PLEASE make another chapter!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you. That is in consideration, but I have a few other projects I need to get in order first. Thank you for the review!
Hi there!
This was really cute! I love reading stories like this, where Harry and Ginny share a sweet romantic moment before the big kiss in Book Six. I like the way you set them up to snog in the shed - it makes perfect sense for them to try to get Ron and Hermione together! I didn't expect them to end up kissing, though. ;) I thought you did a nice job of shaping Harry's thoughts through the piece to get him to the point where he suddenly saw Ginny differently; you seem to have a good grasp of his character. It was all just very sweet and romantic - a lovely H/G moment! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: :) Thank you Gina! One shot romances are hard, because you need to set up the situation without the pair sucking face within the first paragraph. But of course, eveyone want them to get to the snogging bit!
That was so sweet! I love the romance. Harry/Ginny fics are my fav, but R/Hr AND H/G fics are definitely up there. You should put stuff like that kind of romance into Healing Harry.
Author's Response: I thank you for reading HH and looking at my other work. Healing Harry will have it's romantic/fully side back I'm sure. Each story has it's indiviual voice. If you like fluffy, keep digging around my fics, there's a few more good fluffy ones in there!
Hehehehehehehehehehehehehe! AHAHA! That was pretty good.
8/10
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I normally don't read canon romances, but this one intrigued me to no end, partially because it was a secret santa (I'm a lover of story swaps) and partially because the title was just...whoa. Smut_friday can do that to you ;)He felt like the house was sitting on a powder keg and they would be the ones to light the already too short fuse.
Hehe I loved this sentence. It accurately put in words the mood of the household without really saying it in plain, boring sentences without adjectives. I always had imagined the twins as a sort of catalyst that seemed to make short tempers even shorter. However, your way of putting it is just lovely.Thankfully Bill and Mr. Weasley spent their days at work. And Mrs. Weasley spent many afternoons running errands in Diagon Alley or at Grimmauld Place preparing for Order meetings.
That paragraph didn't seem to stand very well on its own nor did it seem to fit the flow of the story. Perhaps combine it with the previous paragraph and making the sentences more concise? Thankfully Mr. Weasley and Bill spent their days at work while Mrs. Weasley took care of chores and Order business outside the crowded home. That might not do it, but something along those lines? The paragraph didn't need to be separated into two sentences is what I'm trying to say (how ironic, isn't it, that I'm being wordy about saying be concise?)Leaving the Burrow would mean getting up and moving, and the heat quelled those fancies quickly.
I liked this sentence as well! I thought it was a very tactfully placed sentence. I can imagine the lethargy that must inflict the trio and Ginny, especially in hot, stuffy weather. The way you captured that was very lovely; you had put it in a way I never would've thought of.Consequently he was left with nothing else to ponder. A great relief actually.
Oh, I can't imagine. I'm glad Harry has some time for himself though. Not time for him to think about someone else, but time to just...not think. I don't think I've ever had a moment like that before. But it's peaceful to read such a description. I can almost experience what Harry is experiencing here.“I think a good snog would be best,” Ginny blurted.
I almost spat out my water when I read that. What a sudden comment! If this is a pre-HBP, I can't imagine Ginny (who's usually calm and reserved) to ever blurt something like that out. 'Course, after continuing the story, I realized she was just talking about Ron and Hermione. This was a good laugh. We know what's on Harry's mind now xDHarry enjoyed listening to Ginny laugh, it was clear and light, like a song. Harry wondered to himself if Ginny had always laughed like this, he couldn’t remember.
These two sentences actually should exist as four (or two if you replace the commas with semi-colons). It's a small pet peeve of mine, but I was taught under the impression that commas weren't allowed to separate sentences without a conjunction. Of course, I've seen many professional authors, including Rowling, violate this rule, so it may just depend on your own lessons.Did he really want to get in the middle of this? Harry looked at Ginny.
It was odd to see a break in subject here. For half a paragraph, Harry was thinking about Hermione and Ron, and suddenly he switches to Ginny. It would've been good to have a paragraph break here at least. Or added on to the paragraph after this one.Oh lovesick Harry! And he doesn't even know it. I always love seeing how green Harry can be (Cho, anyone?). Harry's emotional roller coaster must be crazy now; I'm sure dealing with Voldemort is nowhere near as stressful as loving Ginny. I like how you explained Ginny and Harry's relationship as of the beginning of the story. Instead of thinking of Ginny as his best friend's sister, she went through a transition stage not many authors bother to explain: she's closer to Harry as a friend and, as you say, a confidante.
The imagery you use for the shack is just lovely! Who knew, indeed, that Harry Potter can be so romantic! And who knew Uncle Vernon's chores can actually lead to something useful...
Ginny no longer had any older brothers, his heart no longer ached for Sirius and Voldemort was vanquished.
That is my favorite sentence in this story by far. So perfect - everything that worried Harry, everything he was too tired to worry about, vanishes completely with just Ginny's presence.Ron and Hermione never did see the shed.
I'm proud to say I giggled out loud when I read that sentence. Beautiful ending to a beautifully simple AND complex story. Thanks, SPEW buddy!-Beth
Author's Response: Bless you Beth! I had just complained to Lys that reviews should have a 50 character limit too, and then I came across this gem! I'm so pleased you liked it (indeed, Smut Friday corrupts the brain, but in such a good way!) Thank you so much for the tips, I will have to go back and revise a bit. I have a tendancy to ramble (obviously) and am famous for my run-on sentences. So the fact that you would point them out is not surprising. The surprising fact is probably that they were all once one even longer sencence! I am just so so so pleased! *HUGGLES* Thank you so much!
Aww, so cute, I love it!!!
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omg! that is reeeeeeeeeeally cute! I love it. keep up the good work.
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Very nice. I bet Arthur Weasley's shed is a very interesting place--but aren't there a lot of spiders?
TOMROHT
Author's Response: Ahhh, well spiders don't bug Harry. But maybe that will come into play when Ron and Hermione have their turn... Whenever that happens! Thanks!
