Reviews For Five Hints
Reviewer: Helluin
Date: 02/09/06 1:38
Chapter: The Last One

Cute story. The clues were pretty good; I didn't get the one about the hospital wing or Myrtle's bathroom. If you need a beta, I'd be glad to help. I'm pretty good at that grammar stuff.

Reviewer: hpfan012
Date: 02/06/06 17:25
Chapter: The Last One

aww that was soooo cute!! the clues are harder than they were last time!! i couldnt figure some of them out :-(. but this story was very good and i wish it wasnt done!!! 10/10

Reviewer: juniorauthor
Date: 02/04/06 17:32
Chapter: The Last One

Excellent. I really liked this story; escpecially the ending...haha.... Some minor mistakes, some grammatical, some cannon, but hey. No one's perfect, and this is fanfiction! I wish this were longer...! *poout* Ah well. Kudos.

Reviewer: I Love Severus Snape
Date: 02/04/06 13:41
Chapter: The Last One

The riddles were very clever! 'Tis a fun little story, I enjoyed reading it. Short, sweet and original.

Now, I'll provide some constructive crit...

1.Scanning the covers, he found 5 books about Polyjuice and started to open them randomly.
2.He didn't had time to take 5 strides that he heard menaces and dares coming out of the portrait.
In both numbers one and two, '5' would be spelled out as 'five,' according to the English language rules. Also, in number two, 'had' would be changed to 'have' -- you just got your past/present tense mixed up.

Also, madam Pomfrey is a pronoun, therefore the "M" in "Madame" is capitalised, too.

"Where there more than one person?"
"Where" is used incorrectly. An example of the correct way would be, "Where is she?" However, in this case it would be "Was there more than one person?"

Those are just a few things I noticed. I saw other spelling and grammer mistakes near the end that a Beta would be glad to fix. However, all in all, I really like it! Keep writing, and don't get discouraged by my critique; it's the first steps to learning and improving.

Author's Response: Thank you for the helpful tips... I'm currently searching a beta before submitting my next story so hopefully it will be better. And yes, verb tenses are defenitly a headache...

Reviewer: Ginny_Weasley_316
Date: 02/02/06 21:24
Chapter: The Last One

dido to the previous one. It took me forever to get the clues worked out. some small mistakes but hey we are imperfect keep up the good writing

Reviewer: Hermione82manypickles
Date: 02/02/06 11:52
Chapter: The Last One

awwwww! thats so cute! 10/10!

Reviewer: Knowitall
Date: 01/30/06 1:11
Chapter: The First Clue

Great story! The clues were a bit obvious, but that's fine. I can't wait till the 2nd part's acceppted!

Reviewer: juniorauthor
Date: 01/28/06 10:40
Chapter: The First Clue

Oh, I like this story alot! It's so original! Its on my favorite list, so I can check and see when the updates are lickety-split! Kudos! Oh, the hints. They're pretty simple, but worded well and cleverly, I think. Again, kudos!

Reviewer: iLoveRupert142
Date: 01/25/06 12:22
Chapter: The First Clue

i really like this story. just because it's so original. & not the same plot as every other R/H story. 10/10 :]

Reviewer: hpfan012
Date: 01/15/06 15:50
Chapter: The First Clue

okay idk how you thought of this....but it was BRILLIANT!!!!! okay i loved the fact that you did the clues...they were a bit easy because even i could figure them out but hey...they should be easy enough to figure out!!! i am adding this to my long list of favorite stories...and i am waiting patiently for the next chapter!! an easy 10/10!! :-)

Reviewer: CensorshipIsSlavery
Date: 01/15/06 5:07
Chapter: The First Clue

The clues are a little on the easy side, but they'd have to be for Ron to figure them out! Well written and a great plot. =)

Reviewer: Ginny_Weasley_316
Date: 01/12/06 21:32
Chapter: The First Clue

Love it update soon>:D

Reviewer: FreeWinky
Date: 01/12/06 0:07
Chapter: The First Clue

Wow, this is awesome! Ilove your mixture of mystery, romance and a little bit of fluff. Bottomline, I love it and am eagerly waiting for the update.

Reviewer: LillysOfTheValley
Date: 01/11/06 16:28
Chapter: The First Clue

THis is fun ...lol AND i think the clues are a bit too easy, but it is interesting...very captivating and it provokes curiosity...ha ha i used a big word..lol Anyway update soon and u'll go on my faves lisst~ CIAO BELLA! Love lilly! XOXOXOXOX

Reviewer: LillysOfTheValley
Date: 01/11/06 16:28
Chapter: The First Clue

THis is fun ...lol AND i think the clues are a bit too easy, but it is interesting...very captivating and it provokes curiosity...ha ha i used a big word..lol Anyway update soon and u'll go on my faves lisst~ CIAO BELLA! Love lilly! XOXOXOXOX

Reviewer: DoxieQueen
Date: 01/10/06 19:12
Chapter: The First Clue

OoO... sounds like fun!

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