Reviews For You and I
Reviewer: Onbegrepen
Date: 12/06/06 14:02
Chapter: The Dream

This was truly beautiful, the imagery you created was wondeful.
This is a lovely poem, keep writing, you are a brilliant poet!


Author's Response: Thank you very much for those wonderful words :-)

Date: 11/25/06 3:09
Chapter: The Dream

Ohhhh, that was so beautiful, but the end was so sad! I loved the last stanza, it was really powerful.

Author's Response: Thank you very much.

Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 10/20/06 11:52
Chapter: The Dream

Wow! This is the first HP poem that I've ever read; came across it in the QSQ noms for best poem! (Well done by the way!)

I really like the repetition used in this. It's very effective and the descriptions are both emotional and idyllic. A fab poem!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you took the time to read the QSQ nominees.

Reviewer: GreyLady
Date: 09/16/06 16:35
Chapter: The Dream

Gah. I meant to also say that it would be better to end the summary after that alteration I suggested. I'm sorry!

Author's Response: :-)

Reviewer: GreyLady
Date: 09/16/06 16:34
Chapter: The Dream

I loved it! *sniff* The rhyming worked phenomenally and didn't ever become too much. I loved the imagery, especially the stanza about the butterfly; that was gorgeous. I have one thing that I don't like, though: the summary. Silly, isn't it? But it completely turned me off, so I'm glad I read this anyway. After "It's November 19 19997 and Ginny Weasley has woken up from a distubing dream," I think it would work better to add something like "I dreamt of Harry..." in italics, because then the reader would know it's Harry/Ginny, and also get a taste of the poem. Just a suggestion. :) But great flow, great poem.

Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad you liked it.

I like your suggestion for the summary but the way I write them is sort of part of my style. I rarely mention names in poems and I tend to tell some of the story in the summary instead.

Reviewer: sweetdevil
Date: 07/31/06 15:06
Chapter: The Dream

Oh , it's ao sad! But it's still wonderful!! Keep it up Foxy Wolf.

Author's Response: Thank you

Reviewer: RedheadedWeasley
Date: 07/17/06 18:33
Chapter: The Dream

Christina, I loved this poem. It was fabulous, really. Just like your bannermaking skills! I really liked how you had the repeating line at the beginning of each stanza. It really connects everything together, but each line is so very different from the other. Great job!

Usually I don't like rhyme schemes in poems because they can get very sing-songy and that is something that just annoys me. I get into a rhythm with poems and I hate it when it gets to be like a nursery rhyme. You didn't do that and I commend you on that. This scheme was nothing like a nursery rhyme. The flow was even and steady paced without getting sing-songy. Most of the time I had to look back to see if there was actually a rhyme scheme.

This poem really kind of spoke to me on a personal level which makes it even better. When you can bring the reader in with their own experiences, it endears them even more to the piece. This poem was very well done, I only wish it was longer!

Author's Response: Thanks for the very kind words and for the absolute fantastic review *blushes*

I'm so glad you liked this poem since it is my special darling. The poem was inspired by Harry and Ginny but as I wrote it I found out that more and more of me and my own personal experiences was sinking in to it. I even made a drawing of Ginny with butterfly wings and now I have it on my leg as a tattoo :-)

Reviewer: AurorGirl101
Date: 03/25/06 11:17
Chapter: The Dream

this is really sweet. i liked it alot.

Author's Response: Thank you very much.

Reviewer: PhysicalGraffiti
Date: 01/04/06 16:29
Chapter: The Dream

Oh, I really loved this! Firstly, I should explain that I'm a delusional shipper, so for me to compliment this poem is high praise indeed. ;)

The flow was perfect. I loved how each dream followed into the next, exploring their relationship in an almost chronological manner. It really held the poem together and added such intensity at the end. I felt almost as if I were reading the H/G progression in the books, only in poem format. Yet it remained subtle and somewhat obscure, which is absolutely wonderful. Blatant, bland poetry is just that-- bland.

You even managed to be descriptive, which is so difficult to accomplish in poetry. The "wings of indigo" was a lovely, captivating touch. Also, the line(s) about wishing you could swim so you could reach Harry, who was standing just on the other side, so close but out of reach... brilliant. I think that hit me hardest, and in that moment, I actually felt for Ginny Weasley. (I'm not at all a Ginny fan.) You took a cliche idea and turned it into something new and heartfelt. Well done.

I was really pleased to come across this poem today. It spoke volumes in such short length, and even managed to get a H/Hr shipper to momentarily accept H/G. I hope you'll continue writing poetry, because good, modern poets are oh-so-rare these days.

Author's Response: Wow; this is by far the best review I have ever recieved. I'm really glad you liked the poem, especially since you're a H/Hr shipper, then it's really saying something. It's reviews like this that makes it all worthwile. Thank you.

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