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Name: AReader (Signed) · Date: 08/22/10 0:14 · For: Dear Narcissa and Bellatrix...
You got all the houses wrong. Andromeda was a Slytherin, and Ted was a Hufflepuff. And Sirius couldn't be ten years younger than her.

Name: Mind Games (Signed) · Date: 04/22/07 23:23 · For: Dear Narcissa and Bellatrix...
What really made me want to read this story was the theme you used. I’ve read a few letter stories, and I think they can be a good way to really show the thoughts and emotions of a character. It’s fascinating to see one written by Andromeda. We do not know how Andromeda really feels about her sisters, so it was interesting to read your take on it. And what better way to do it than a letter? You gave us the direct thoughts Andromeda has about her sisters through using a letter, which was a really good way of getting inside her head.

This is a great look at how Bellatrix came to be the way she is. You show right where it started, the day she stopped playing with the dolls. You gave some good reasons for why Bellatrix became what she is. She was always encouraged to be that way, to act superior because of her blood type. You mentioned how her parents praised her for it, and Andromeda was too frightened to try hard enough to put a stop to it. We’ve always wondered why she is so insane, so it’s really interesting to read a story that gives possible reasons for the way she acts. Great idea!

I have some constructive criticism and nitpicks…

Bellatrix was nine, I think, I was eight and Narcissa was only six when we stopped playing with dolls.

This goes against canon. Bellatrix was two years older than Andromeda, so she would have been ten when Andromeda was eight. You also mention how Andromeda started Hogwarts the year after Bellatrix, which would also go against canon.

Although I had only met the Potters once, because they had been in school about ten years after I graduated, Alice, who was a member of the Order of the Pheonix, knew them well.

This also goes against canon. Andromeda was only six or seven years older than the Potters, so they would not have been in school ten years after she graduated. You also misspelled ‘Phoenix’ here and several other places.

I thought you could have referred to Narcissa a little more in the letter. You don’t seem to mention her a whole lot, and I would have liked to see you think of a good reason for why she turned out the way she did. You could have focused a little more on Narcissa and how things went wrong between her and Andromeda. Also, in some places when you do refer to Narcissa and Bellatrix, what you say really only applies to Bellatrix, such as being evil and hated by most of the wizarding world.

You displayed Andromeda’s thoughts and emotions very well. I like how she questions her sisters and herself about what happened and how things could have been different. You showed where Andromeda fell away from her family and why she decided to break free from them. You gave us plenty of insight on the relationship between the three Black sisters and it was sad to see how they used to get along when they were young, but things changed when Bellatrix became older. I also liked every character trait you gave Andromeda. You added to her personality very nicely, and I could see why she didn’t fit into her family. This was a great one-shot about someone that grew up around one of the most atrocious characters in the series. Great work!

Katty – Knight of the Turnip Table

Name: mistressmarauder7 (Signed) · Date: 02/23/06 14:42 · For: Dear Narcissa and Bellatrix...
Dude, What I read was good but I began to run out of time and amused myself by scrolling up and down. Who the hell would write a letter that long?

Author's Response: Thanks Mistressmarauder7 (Kat, we've gotta get you a shortened form of that) For the people who don't notice, mistressmarauder7 AKA Kat is one of my BFFs and therefore can write such a mean review. Once again, Kat, thanks.... NOT! And I would write a letter that long, you've seen some of my emails!

Name: Dara (Signed) · Date: 01/17/06 20:04 · For: Dear Narcissa and Bellatrix...
What an achievement! I loved every bit of it! But tell me, are Bellatrix and Narcissa going to reply, or is this one shot? You know, I've never thought of the story of the three sisters the way you wrote it. This story really gets to you. I'll give it a (drumroll) ten!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Dara! This is only one shot, I thought I put that at the bottom... Anyway, thanks so much for the review! The idea sort of popped in my head randomly, although it was sort of spurred on by my other fic, which had Andromeda as a back-round character. I'm glad you liked it, I never really thought of it as very good! Thanks for the review! ~Lilypudding~

Name: Leahr (Signed) · Date: 01/17/06 15:01 · For: Dear Narcissa and Bellatrix...
oh, brilliant! well written, good grammar, nice plot and great characters! The way they all act and Andromeda's feelings are all so perfect! one thing- the paragraph when she gets sorted, you say Sirius was sorted 11 years later and then you say he was the only Black she knew in Gryffindor. I really, really liked this- very well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Leahr! Great catch with the Sirius thing! I originally planned for Sirius, the Marauders, and Lily to be in Andromeda's year, but the moderator rejected it... I've gotta fix that! I'm glad you liked it, I worked really hard it. I really appreciate your review! Thank you so much!

Name: stardust (Signed) · Date: 01/09/06 22:29 · For: Dear Narcissa and Bellatrix...
Came to read your other fic... you've outdone yourself! I thought this was brilliant.

"I would give our dolls a past, present and future... I was the silent and quiet writer." That gave me goosebumps, really! You really understand your character and can convey those emotions so well! The letter has a great flow to it, and it builds as it goes along until you come to the question behind it all at the very end. It's easy to get in to and feel for.

Anyway, great job once again! Keep up the good work! You have such promise as an authoress. Oh, in response to the other review, it never occurred to me to take issue with Andromeda's age in "Perfect?"; I've always thought of her as a bit older, and I saw you changed her age in this, but it didn't seem out of place in the other one... far stranger things have flown in fanfiction! :D

BTW, that is such an adorable name for your dog!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, Stardust! I don't know what to say- I am so flattered. Its funny how I wrote this fic- I wrote it in two or three settings, I think, and always when I was really emotional or mad. It was rejected SO many times, but to get this reviw is worth it. I like you enjoy the writing part- I never thought of that part as exceptionally good. I like seeing which parts stand out. I really like doing letter fics... The age thing, believe me, is a real problem. I've gotten reviews for "Perfect" saying literally "why is andromeda there... she doesn't belong" Originally, Andromeda was the same age as Lily, like in "Perfect?" but the mod rejected it saying the times were off. I personally liked it better that way, it had a lot of more emotion. Thanks for saying it flowed, I had to chop a whole section about Lily out and I felt it didn't flow exactly after that. Thanks so much for the review!

Name: GinnyRox (Anonymous) · Date: 01/03/06 22:48 · For: Dear Narcissa and Bellatrix...
This may sound funny , but in a way Andromeda reminds me of myself, I'm kind of shy and don't express myself enough.I really like the way how you you charcterized her and it sounds so realistic! I really like your stories! I give this story a ten!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, GinnyRox! I'm really flattered by it- no one has ever told me they're like my character. That was the highest praise you can give me. I'm glad you felt for her, because that was the aim of the story. Thanks so so much! Words can't describe how happy your reviews are making me! :)!

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