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Name: Hallowthorn (Signed) · Date: 04/27/17 17:03 · For: Chapter Thirty-One
I'd love to know how it ends!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 16:43 · For: Chapter Thirty-One
Loved the story and I am most eagerly awaiting your next post, no matter how long between posts. I just can't stand not knowing how a story ends!

Author's Response:

Thanks very much for all your reviews! I will try and update asap :)

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 16:22 · For: Chapter Twenty-Eight
Awww, flowers for Caitlin, I couldn't think of anything sweeter!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 16:11 · For: Chapter Twenty-Six
I'm definitely sticking with you but it really is getting hard to pull myself away from the story to write a review. As always I think it was awesome…blah,blah…will Sirius and Caitlin grow up and realise that they're made for each other already?!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 16:01 · For: Chapter Twenty-Five
Not at all disappointed, just so eager to get to the next chapter that I'm almost in too much of a hurry to leave a review, but here it is: That chapter was amazing! Caitlin has finally come to her senses just as Sirius finally gives up! We'll see how this is resolved…

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 15:52 · For: Chapter Twenty-Four
Ooooh! Time for some slow dancing, how romantic!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 15:43 · For: Chapter Twenty-Three
France, how fantastic! By now you would've been home for ages but I hope you had fun over there. Back to the story, ANOTHER GIRL! You must be finding it hard to produce a name per girl whom Sirius dates. I just hope he will finally see that no amount of dates will stop him from loving Caitlin.

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 15:34 · For: Chapter Twenty-Two
I loved it. Another girl, there's always another girl! Poor Sirius, having girls forced upon him 24-7, although I must admit, the timing was really quite inconvenient! Sirius didn't even get to the date without being rejected!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 15:27 · For: Chapter Twenty-One
Wow! Talk about embarrassing, nude in the change rooms! And I can't believe how both of them got caught unclothed at once! I'm glad Sirius went to se Enchantra first because now that's two things off his mind: Enchantra and Regulus (now he's under Enchantra's watchful eyes). Now Sirius can be consumed by his one biggest task; getting Caitlin back.

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 15:08 · For: Chapter Twenty
Great! The story is coming along very nicely. Is Sirius going to apologise/explain to Caitlin or Enchantra first? Can't wait to find out…

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 2:33 · For: Chapter 13
Yep. Love it. Just don't tell me Sirius is so stupid as to actually meet Florence at Greenhouse Three! He can't still be trying to attain his heartbreaker reputation! Sirius, if you can hear me, don't meet Florence tonight! Stay with Caitlin or she'll never forgive you, thinking you had been lying about your relationship with Florence all along! DO NOT GO TO GREENHOUSE THREE TONIGHT!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 2:21 · For: Chapter 12
Wow, imagine turning up in the grate in Dumbledore's office drunk with half of the group passed out! I'm sure he'd merely chuckle and sigh 'Kids!' before sending them to bed.

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 1:42 · For: Chapter Ten
No, I didn't find that chapter TOO mushy, although I did almost get up and locate my nearest bucket. How can you think of such a thing? A mother dying in such a sad and traumatic way, Caitlin must be really scarred. What freaks me out more is the fact that she wouldn't have been the one to start the blaze... very mysterious…

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 1:29 · For: Chapter Eight
Snape wearing a women's attire, complete with stilettos, is completely hilarious and totally not what I expected when the boys mentioned girl's clothes. To add to the comical nature of the prank, you added singing, dancing and Lucius Malfoy (even if he is too old for the story), making it a classic Marauder prank!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, I was a little unsure of it! When I started writing this fic, we didn't know when Lucius was at Hogwarts, so that's why he's in this.

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 1:20 · For: Chapter Seven
Can't wait to get all the gossip from the big date-of-the-century! Wwwwhhhhaaaaatttt? James asked TANYA out on a date! Please tell me this is one of his wonderful plans to make Lily jealous and fall head over heals, I don't think I'd survive the night if James were actually CRUSHING ON TANYA!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 0:14 · For: Chapter Four
With the Marauders by his side how could Remus have sustained such severe injuries? I see Sirius still hasn't managed to do the thing he is famous for- get the girl- but his time will come. His time will come, right?!

Author's Response: You'll have to wait and see!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 0:05 · For: Chapter Three
That is sooooo sweet! Sirius is finally actually falling for someone, but it would be to my greatest relief that the vulgar language subsided after the one incident in the 20th paragraph from the bottom.

Author's Response: Sorry about that. There is a warning on the fic that there is some strong language, but as far as I can remember there's not loads.

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/01/11 23:55 · For: Chapter Two
The story line is great, although I'm having trouble pulling it together in my mind due to how small the chapters are, and how many there are, not that the size has anything to do with the quality of the content!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/01/11 23:46 · For: Chapter One
Sorry about the 'constructive criticism' involving the 'yeah's. I guess you were channeling the extensive and complex vocabulary of the teenage boys! This chapter was good too but I'd like to see the following in the upcoming chapters: lots of mischief, the Marauders bagging Snivellus and, If they have time, relationships forming, growing and, only occasionally, being put to the test!

Author's Response: No worries! Hopefully I've managed to put some mischief in the later chapters. I struggle a bit writing pranks, but hopefully you'll like them!

Name: PerfectInTheEyesOfErised (Signed) · Date: 10/01/11 23:24 · For: Prologue
I honestly think the story has gotten off to a fantastic start. I'm glad you don't bite because I would just like to add that the story might be extra effective if the word 'yeah' was used more sparingly! P.S. I am definitely reading on because, in my opinion, any story involving (let alone starring) Sirius Black (and the other Marauders too, of course…) is worth my time and undivided attention! It is on that high note that I conclude my review and proceed to chapter 2.

Author's Response: Hi! Always nice to see a new reader. Glad you're enjoying it. Have just had a quick look back at my prologue and you're right! I didn't notice how much I'd used 'yeah'. Sorry about that!

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