Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/23/10 10:38
Chapter: Perfect

AWWWW! Hehe. Pretty.
Well done- I think you really did get better as the story moved on. Have you thought about doing anything else?
OXO

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/23/10 10:35
Chapter: The Seventh Floor and Close to Heaven

*BIG SMILE*
Hehe. Nice.

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/23/10 10:29
Chapter: I Am Not Yours

"Giglia finito" Tee hee. Tee hee hee. That's funny. Tee hee.

:D Nicely done!

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/22/10 11:07
Chapter: A Fight and a Fright

"“I’m sorry, your owl has just been intercepted. Please call him back and try again."' HAHAHAHA! Love it!
There are a few too many Americanisms, but those don't necessarily matter.
And I can't believe James let her actually fall! Pathetic. ;D
"Duck!" Again, great.
Thanks for the shout out.

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/22/10 11:02
Chapter: Evsdrona

Oooooh.... I was even more in love with James after listening to that first speech. Sigh.
Oh dear James. What a goofball. ;D

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/22/10 10:59
Chapter: The Christmas Waltz

Oh dear Lily. I wouldn't trust Sirius with such a secret. Sigh. Silly Lily.
But I do like that dynamic- the idea that Lily can't let James have her... Nicely done. ;D
Oh, you really gave McG a great personality- like, I totally believe that it's her!

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/22/10 8:51
Chapter: Just Friends

Oh, random little note: the formatting on this chapter is skewed: there are too many spaces between lines- stupid formatting. It's not too difficult to read, but if you ever feel like it.... ;D

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 11/22/10 8:44
Chapter: Just Friends

EVA! Hi. ;D
I just did some minor editing over on my story, and I needed something good to read. ;D
So I came over to your story.
I think it moves a bit fast; the second half of the chapter- the breakfast part- when does it take place? It is the next day, or....months later, like you wrote in the first line. Whoops. Totally didn't see that. *facepalm* Well, then it make sense.
I think, if you ever wanted to get back into writing, story you could definitely flesh it out a bit more. But it is still a good chapter. ;D
Miss talking to ya.

Reviewer: MizzWeasley
Date: 06/03/08 15:03
Chapter: Perfect

Heyyyy loved the story, im sure everyones picked up on this but jst a slight bit of constructive criticism - im pretty sure james played chaser in the books, seeker in the film, but an amazing story, so good iv read it twice!!

:) keep up the great work!

xxx

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/28/08 0:04
Chapter: Perfect

lol nice ending. good story too!

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/27/08 23:49
Chapter: The Seventh Floor and Close to Heaven

yay! they finally kissed! but james is a chaser, not a seeker.

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/27/08 23:41
Chapter: Late-Night Parties and Flash Cards

im getting a little confused with all of lily's friends, but good chapter all the same!

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/27/08 23:36
Chapter: I Am Not Yours

i dont think that dumbledore would be mad that remus told his friends he's a werewolf.

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/27/08 23:18
Chapter: A Fight and a Fright

wouldnt remus remember if it was a full moon?

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/27/08 23:12
Chapter: Evsdrona

umm... good chapter! although i dont think that any of james's friends would make the "he's crazy" sign.

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/27/08 23:07
Chapter: The Christmas Waltz

thats so sweet that lily's parents dance every christmas!

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/27/08 23:02
Chapter: Just Friends

hmm... i always thought that lily would be in denial abotu likeing james, but it works. good story so far!

Reviewer: RowenaHeart
Date: 02/29/08 11:14
Chapter: Perfect

Ok, I take back what I said after chapter 1. You managed to weave a pretty good story out of a skeptical beginning. That takes talent!

Reviewer: RowenaHeart
Date: 02/29/08 10:46
Chapter: Just Friends

NONONONONO!!!!! THAT IS SO UNREASONABLE! HONESTLY, LILY WOULD NEVER DO THAT! SHE HAS PRIDE, YOU KNOW! JEEZ, HOW ON EARTH DO YOU MAKE THIS GO ON FOR 8 STINKIN CHAPTERS?!

Reviewer: aries1996
Date: 11/07/07 14:36
Chapter: The Christmas Waltz

HEHEHEHEHEHEHE!!!
THEY WERE STILL DANCING!!
I BET EVERYONE HEARD THEM!!!!
LOL

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