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Reviews For Remorse and Purfpi

Name: stormy_lovegood (Signed) · Date: 06/16/06 23:24 · For: One-shot
Ooooh... likey. Me likey lots.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: hawaiianhulagal (Signed) · Date: 12/16/05 2:23 · For: One-shot
*looks below* YUP That pretty much sums it up! Two Thumbs UP!

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Name: Unpersonified (Anonymous) · Date: 12/15/05 16:29 · For: One-shot

Excellent job. An intense character study, albeit without much action, is a very appropriate exemplification of the redemption of Draco Malfoy.

You have a simple structure and usage of words that makes your story delightfully easy to grasp. I especially liked how you repeated Dumbledore's words 'You are not a killer, Draco...' this essence of this statement is what brings Draco to ponder about his wretched state.

Your grammar and punctuation is almost impeccable, with only a few minor flaws. For example, in your fifth paragraph, the word should be 'careless pedestrians', not 'careless passengers'. Don't worry, though, someone else reading would barely notice, unless they have an 'overwrought with thoroughness' mind like mine...

Anyway, to conclude, your fanfic, I repeat again, is a well-written piece of work. You did well expressing how goodness is always present if you seek it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the thorough review! I'm happy you liked it and especially how you grasped the fact that Dumbledore's words are the a part of the reason that Draco sought change. Anyway, thanks again!

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