it is really good make a difi one tht has them acctuallt kissing x.x.x

wow soooo sweet!!! awww that made me feel all fuzzy inside lol seriously it did good 4 u!!! great story

This was soooooo sad but soooooo good i think there will be LADS of typo errors in this because i can't see I'm crying so much

that was probably the best h/hr one shot I have ever read. it was so sweet and sad. great job!

Beautiful. Just simply beautiful. This is one of the first Harry/Hermione fics I've read on MuggleNet and I'm very glad this was the second.

LBD! It's me, Sadie! I've just responded to your latest review on A.S. and decided it was finally time to read some of your work. And let me say, I am so happy I did.

First of all, I am just-- honored by this dedication. *Blushes* Thank you, it's... overwhelming to have this story in my name. Secondly-- wow. I was thoroughly impressed. I anticipated it would be good, but never did I imagine how touching and moving it would be. Talk about emotion? You have it down beautifully. “I love you…” -- “Please don’t,” he whispered. Geeze! That one tore right at my heart strings, I don't mind telling you. “Swear to me you won’t die." So did that one. I admit, I was rather close to tears. And the way we're left, so unsure as to whether or not Harry dies? Painful! But in such a good, wonderful way. That is emotion. You brought all of it, the entire group dynamic, to life; and made me feel it, so intensely, in ways other writers have yet to do.

I loved how there was Harry/Hermione anxiety. The way Harry was pushing aside his feelings, but demonstrating them all at once, was expertly crafted. The slight tension, the confusion, then the resolution-- too few are incapable of combining all of that in one story, let alone one chapter. Your ability to express and exploit those things, and relay the complexity of the Harry/Hermione dynamic, is further proof of your skill.

Above anything, however, I loved your descriptions. They were clever and original, and I must say I'm a bit jealous I didn't think of some of them first! Here's an example: A strange buzzing, like that of a thousand angry bees, filled his head where his thoughts should’ve been. It's not just the wording, it's the syntax and the structure. It flows. Oh, and this part: I’m not letting anything happen to the people I…” he tried to find words as strong as what he was feeling at this moment, looking at her, “…I care about,” he decided lamely-- it was nowhere near the mounting sensation in his chest. Brilliant! That goes along with the emotion aspect. It was perfectly realistic and believable. Anyway, back to description: As her lips gently met his, the feelings that had been dammed up in his chest burst loose, filling him with a comfort unfathomably deep. For that moment he let go of everything- the anger, the misery, the burden of being trapped inside himself- and just felt. Wow. You see what I mean? So incredibly powerful.

There were some dialogue lines, that if I had seen them out of context, I would have loathed. But somehow, you took cliché ideas, such as "I love you more than life," and made me melt under their weight. That, my dear, is the true mark of a talented writer: someone who can take used and tired phrases/ideals, and turn them into something new and beautiful. I strongly feel you did that here, with this story.

I adore your style of writing. The descriptions, emotions, character interactions, and every little detail, I loved. I feel confident that if you put enough effort into one, you could write a spectacular full-length story. And if you ever choose to do so, know that I'll be first in line to read it.

awww, how sweet! I

The last line is cheesy

Author's Response: *shrugs* I know, but it was my first attempt. I like Inside the Minds much better, but I just can't find time to work on it.

wow, i love it, so poetic, beautiful, i wish i had that kind of love, even a guy as great as Harry that liked me would be great *sigh*....one can only dream.......

I like it.... needs more chapters thought...