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Name: xcandy_quillx (Signed) · Date: 04/13/06 13:52 · For: Where Laughter Dies
I've read this story so many times and yet I still cry each and every time. I don't think I do so because it's particularly sad or whatever, but you're just such a brilliant writer that I honestly get goosbumps whenever I come across any work of yours. You're an amazing writer, Noldo.

Name: Dory_the_Fishie (Signed) · Date: 04/07/06 14:11 · For: Where Laughter Dies
*is a Black fangurl* Naturally, I am drawn to any fic that contains either Sirius, Regulus, or Black in the summary. Often times I am disappointed by the lack of character development or of fulfilling my expectations when it comes to the Black brothers, but you have not disappointed me. To me this is a very character centric fic, which sometimes turns out to be a curse rather than a blessing, but not here. Here you very effectively used the characters and their emotions. I felt that you really got into Sirius's head well and portrayed everything he was feeling really nicely.

As always, I adore your use of parentheses. It's very unique to your style and really adds to your writing. There were a few places where I felt maybe the parentheses weren't needed, but otherwise they were fine. The whole thing flows well and your use of long sentences, once more, is wonderful.

Something that caught my attention in particular was the relationship between Sirius and Remus. Most fics focus mainly on Sirius and James, but this one dedicated a lot of time to Remus, which I loved. I liked the bit about Remus's family life and his attempted explanation of cricket. And then the Monty Python. Oh, I love the Monty Python. =) I also enjoyed that Remus had a thing for Muggle music and that that played a role in this, with the tiny bits of lyrics from Hey Jude. I think it would have been nice to continue a little more with the music aspect, but I suppose doing so may have turned this into a songfic. So I guess I get that. I just have a soft spot for music incorporated into writing. =)

In addition to the exploration of the relationship between Sirius and Remus, I also loved the relationship between Sirius and Regulus. Now, this could again just be the fangurl in me, but I love anything and everything to do with Sirius and Regulus. Especially explorations of their relationship. So kudos to a job extremely well done. I liked how you mentioned that they were similar, the same almost. That was great. Well, then again, everything was great.

And now I'm going to wrap up this review because it's getting long and if I don't end it I'm going to go on forever. But thanks for an excellent read and satisfying a Black fangurl. ;-)

Name: lupinslover (Signed) · Date: 04/02/06 21:15 · For: Where Laughter Dies
Wow, I really liked it! I haven't ever read a fic. based on Sirius leaving home, or a fic. that has even bothered to have Regulus in it. I think that you didn't need the roman numerals though, it transfered just fine for one part to the other. I liked the fact that Sirius couldn't have a messy room it was kinda funny...umm that's it for now...9/10 lupinslover

Name: immortal_evil (Signed) · Date: 04/02/06 19:04 · For: Where Laughter Dies

This fic was love. I absolutely loved the free-flowing and pre-determined movement of your writing, how it's so casual yet professional.

The characterization was so great. I've been living in the clichéd world of James/Lily for too long. You are so right about Sirius, about Regulus.

And Bellatrix, omgdizzle, I want her diamonds. *snatches diamonds off of Bellatrix's sneering face*


Name: FanficWriterNikki (Signed) · Date: 04/02/06 11:17 · For: Where Laughter Dies
That was very good. I haven't seen any other fics that focus on Sirius leaving home, but this one showed the event very well. I really liked how you included the relationship between Sirius and Regulus where they didn't just hate each other. The characterization of both Sirius and Regulus was excellent. There's nothing I really did not like about this fic. Great job!

Name: Blossomlily (Signed) · Date: 03/15/06 23:37 · For: Where Laughter Dies
That was fabulous.. I'm truly in love with your work, especially with the wonderful use of present tense. I can't tell you enough how good that was. I particularly loved that excerpt about cricket because I myself am devoted to it, and I had a stitch in my sides, reading Sirius and James's ignorance of it. You've got me totally addicted to your work and I would read and review every one of your stories right now if I didn't have a super important exam to prepare for. I'll be back though! :-) ~bL

Author's Response: :) Cricket is my guilty pleasure, especially watching the Indian team play. Much love for them.

Thank you! :D

Name: Kerian (Signed) · Date: 03/14/06 20:30 · For: Where Laughter Dies
I really liked how you added the little life lessons that he learned from the other boys, and the way the italics captured realities. I also really enjoyed the concept of Bellatrix glittering with all the diamonds, and the ongoing comparison of red and green. Well done!

Name: rita_skeeter (Signed) · Date: 02/04/06 16:39 · For: Where Laughter Dies
A fantastic read! You've captured Sirius thoughts and emotions so brilliantly, and finished it in a dramatic way too. This was also a very brave writing style (the present tense) which worked extraordinarily well. I particularly liked the comparoisons between his life and the lives of his fellow Marauders. Excellent. 10/10

Name: notabanana (Signed) · Date: 12/27/05 19:26 · For: Where Laughter Dies
Hmmmm...that wasn't too dark. I liked it...a LOT. You have an amazing writing style--very unifque. I am in love with your parentheses. Yes, once again I loved everything about one of your stories.

Name: lilyevans91 (Signed) · Date: 12/14/05 8:46 · For: Where Laughter Dies
wow, this is really sad, but really good. it's thought provocative and interesting, and it really makes you feel sorry for sirius, and even a bit sympathetic for regulus! great job!

Name: icantbebotheredwiththis (Signed) · Date: 12/11/05 12:09 · For: Where Laughter Dies
It's fantastic.

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 12/10/05 23:14 · For: Where Laughter Dies
I almost cried when Sirius thought of the Potter and Lupin homes, and when he thinks about the relationship between himself and Regulus. That is a big deal for me. Your stories are darker than I usually read, but so very good. I love them all!

Author's Response: Thank you!

I've often been informed that my stories are a little too dark for comfort. I suppose it has something to do with my grim determination not to see the good side of things. :D

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 12/10/05 22:59 · For: Where Laughter Dies
I almost cried when Sirius thought of the Potter and Lupin homes, and when he thinks about the relationship between himself and Regulus. That is a big deal for me. Your stories are darker than I usually read, but so very good. I love them all!

Name: MithrilQuill (Signed) · Date: 12/09/05 19:02 · For: Where Laughter Dies
Amazing!!! I loved the Sirius-Regulus interactions and how you characterized Regulus. I really wished Regulus had gone with Sirius when he asked him....*sighs*....and I love the way you showed how Sirius realizes that he still likes his family, that he wants to be able to stay, but can't, and that he sort of admits to himself that he did ignore his brother and that he will continue to torture him and his friends.....anyways great Job once again and keep writing...=)

Author's Response: Thanks!

I'm always iffy about writing Regulus, so good to hear that.

The idea of things working out differently between Regulus and Sirius is annoyingly appealing. I shall have to resist the overwhelming urge to do so.

Writing, writing. Have finally found self a beta reader, which has good and bad implications - good in that the cornery bits will be smoothed over, bad in that update frequency will decrease. :)

Name: rockinfaerie (Signed) · Date: 12/09/05 18:52 · For: Where Laughter Dies
That was brilliant. You really captured Sirius' feelings of isolation within his own family - the fact that he was the little bit of red among the green and silver. The parts where he recalled better times he and Regulus had had with his mother were very effective too, as it shows that his current sentiments for her were not always present. And Regulus is just how I had imagined him - much quieter than Sirius, no close friends. You captured Sirius' feelings towards him very well - how James and Remus and Peter were his brothers in fact, and Regulus only in name. It was also very sad, their parting, as it made me think what could have been, had Regulus been in Gryffindor or if Sirius had acted differently towards him. It was very well developed and described. The fact that it was in present tense allowed for more immersion into his feelings, which was great. Therefore I give you a huge 10!

Author's Response: First off, wow - thank you for the review! I couldn't place your name at first, but then clicked through and went 'Ooh, *you* wrote 'The Compton Diary'! I love that fic!'
Honestly, I do. I'm just totally useless at attempting to construct coherent reviews, so I lurked around it.

Now, the review - thank you! Most of the things you noticed and mentioned were parts that I'd worked quite hard on, and hoped desperately for someone to notice - which you did. Whee.

(As a side-comment, the idea of a different spin on things at this point is a very appealing AU. I have to resist that now.)

And thank you for the ten (ee!) and the comment on the present tense - personally I believe that it adds a feeling of urgency and closeness to events, and am all pro it when attempting to write an emotionally charged piece.

Name: Sayan_P (Signed) · Date: 12/09/05 12:00 · For: Where Laughter Dies
Hi!! Woa!!! Now, this was Siriusly good! a NO, that isn't a joke, it's totally true! You just capture Sirius, all of his bitter yet funny nature, his childish ways of giving his family the hint that he 'hate' them, but you also put the little kid who just wishes that he had a normal family and just wants love from them. This is a great oneshot and it goes right to my favorites!!!! Keep writing, 'cause I'll be sure to check them out!

Author's Response: Thank you! I love the character of Sirius, and am pleased to hear that he works well here.

I'll certainly keep writing as long as people keep reading!

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