Reviewer: suckr4romance
Date: 04/23/06 20:09
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Interesting... I never saw Lily as feeling undeserving of James, but you captured it well. If this is a companion piece to your story...then I guess I should've read that first. I saw the banner for this story on your MNFF forums signature, clicked on it, and read it. Good work.

Author's Response: I'm glad you clicked on it! This isn't really a companion piece. More like a branch off a tree...A branch that can grow on its own xD Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: Capricorn
Date: 04/23/06 16:12
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Now, don't you listen to those silly reviewers, this story doesn't need an epilouge, it needs to be left alone in its near perfection. The last line is the best, but the phoenix falls too part was good as well. Ten!, even though we can rate the stories anymore.

Author's Response: LOL no I wasn't planning on an epilogue either. Glad you liked the last line. That was my favorite part too. Thanks!

Reviewer: obsessedwithron
Date: 04/19/06 13:25
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Awww...Now how 'bout an epilogue!!!

Author's Response: LOL no epilogue sorry xD Perhaps another one-shot in the (late) future. Thanks for your compliment though!

Reviewer: Polaris
Date: 04/11/06 10:57
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

I really like how you portrayed Lily's emotions. very effective. But you could also have added somehting about her friends' reactions to what she was saying, that she wasn't really like that or somehtign then she would just fall into an even deeper pit of despair. It happens like that all the time. Then it would be even sweeter when James comes and saves her from falling into it forever. *my two cents* James could also say that his flaw was that he was too arrogant or somehting liek Lily told him in book 5. All-in-all I really liked this story. Its differnt form what you usually read about Lily and James. Good Job! :)

Author's Response: I like your two cents. Thanks! I thought her friends' reactions would be irrelevant for this one-shot. Maybe in another. But you're right about James's flaws. They're important enough to note *smacks self* Thanks!

Reviewer: Lady Jade
Date: 04/07/06 10:57
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

"But you, my Carrot Top, are pretty damn close." That was so cute! I love this one-shot...I could swear I'd read it before, but I guess I didn't review. Anyway, I love your writing, it's very entertaining :). Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks! I like that quote too =)

Reviewer: chudley_cannons_keeper
Date: 03/23/06 20:34
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

As soon as you said something about a sound behind her, I had a feeling James was there. I also like how she contradicts herself. At first she says she's not going to fall for him, and then she does. My only question: what were her friends' reactions? Did they remain quiet, cry with her, or, the ever-annoying "awwwww!" It seemed almost as if they disappeared during her monologue. Over all, good job!

Author's Response: lol They did disappear during her monologue. They knew about James's scheme to get Lily alone and ready to discuss their relationship. Their plan was to get Lily to start talking about him, and then sneak him up the stairs to hear her feelings (the way she'd tell her friends). Thanks for your review and compliment!

Reviewer: fantasygirl7
Date: 02/26/06 21:15
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

That was soo cute. I love how she just poured out her soul and you made James so understanding. Good Job

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: kaammini_the_kreacher
Date: 02/26/06 13:52
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Sweet! It flowed well!

Author's Response: Thanks! Fluidity was what I was aiming for!

Reviewer: wendelin the wierd
Date: 02/09/06 2:48
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Usually whenever i read a story i go like.. ok... this person has apparantly written this story for the sake of writing a story. What's the point?. But i read your story and i was just plain blown, i men it was good, i just had to read your other stories, but comparing this story with the other stories by you i realised that even over here. I mean come on you have written much better. I have read almost all J/L fics and it usually happens that she pours out all her feelings to James be it that she know it was him or doesn't. In your other stories i was literally blown away by your originality. They were amazing. Anyway do not be discouraged by what i have written above.... it is extremely painfully clear that you show a lot of potential and you can write very well. I expect to see a lot more fics written by you!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad to see I add a bit of variety to your usual J/L, which is what I was aiming for. My other story wasn't up to par, so I quit it. Hopefully I'll have more luck with one-shots. Thanks again!

Reviewer: fire_temper
Date: 01/15/06 8:18
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

aaawwwwwwwww.... so cute!!!! MORE MORE!!!!!!!! i like seing lily in so much depth...usually we see james. i like both, but you do need a variety. loved the reference to the pidgeon and pheonix.....MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!!(rather demanding,aren't i? ;D )

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try to spit these one-shots out as much as I can xD I'm glad you liked the phoenix and the pigeon though I thought that was kind of bland. Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: Sirius Krummy Fan
Date: 12/11/05 22:34
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Amazing!!! Absolutely amazing! The pigeon and the phoenix, i really like it. You captured Lily's thoughts in a sweet understanding way! Good Job...10/10 OF COURSE!

Author's Response: Thanks =) I'm glad you liked the way I expanded on her thoughts, though we weren't able to see James in as much depth.

Reviewer: apotterfan247
Date: 12/11/05 2:39
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Absolutely Brilliant!!!!!

Author's Response: haha thanks a bunch =)

Reviewer: FanficWriterNikki
Date: 12/10/05 20:45
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

I loved that so much. One line I really loved: I dread the moment I say 'yes' to him, though it's the one thing I always wanted to say. It just explains everything. I really liked how you used a phoenix and a pigeon to compare them. Great job 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you =) The phoenix and pidgeon thing didn't work as well as I thought it should - since it was one-shot, I had a hard time showing that. But thanks nonetheless.

Reviewer: rita_skeeter
Date: 12/10/05 17:02
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

I really loved this story! You write Lily extremely well. An original storyline and a lovely romantic air. Well done! 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you =) There wasn't a huge plotline, after all it was planned for my other fic, but I agree with the air thing. Hehe thanks.

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 12/10/05 14:03
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

Twenty-five? gracious!!! Well, this chapter is beautifully precious. I love how you've captured their spirits. Everything was so easy to picture clearly! I loved the pidgeon analogy. Poor Lily. It was so sweet. And I've only just found out his favorite color, for heaven's sake." She smiled wispily. "Scarlet. What a lovely name. Nothing like 'red' or 'orange.' Scarlet. My favorite quote because colors can tell us so much about people! Excellent job, MM, and I can't wait for more of these!

Author's Response: Thank you Hermione. The color was added only later when I realized I didn't have enough characters to submit. But I'm glad it worked out so wonderfully in the end. And yes, there will be more to come when you and the rest of the ship inspire me more :D

Reviewer: PottyGirl
Date: 12/10/05 11:23
Chapter: The Pigeon and the Phoenix

I love it! Short and Sweet! Just the way I like it! Awesome!

Author's Response: Thank you muchos =) Hopefully it wasn't too fluffy.

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