Yes, I reckon these sort of things must have been happening (the end and the murdering of other people's pets for that matter), and teachers being none the wiser or not wanting to be... Just like in real life.
This certainly looks and sounds more realistic in terms of meeting and the rest of their relationship...
Poor Snape. Why couldn't he room with someone of his own year? At least that way he makes a t least one friend for the year. Ah wel, your story, your rules
I think and hope that this is one of those stories in which it becomes clear that what these four young'ns did wasn't just 'messing about', but some serious bullying. Ah well, just a story right? Right.
This sounds all so sad for Severus, my heart really goes out to him. But then again in hindsight (the best sight) his bitternis had to stem from somewhere deep. And it did, from his love for Lily...
Wow, this was amazing. It must have taken so much time and hard work to research and make sure your story was weaving in properly to cannon; create a whole new compelling story line that not only fit, but added more depth and dimension to the original story and the characters than even the books were able to do; and to make the whole thing interesting and exciting to read, despite the reader knowing what is going to happen in the end. The characterization was so realistic, you made it look easy--all the characters sounded exactly like themselves; and the pacing of the plot was so interesting, I could barely pause to contemplate what I had read because I wanted to keep reading--(which is of course a hallmark of the HP books, themselves).
At first, I wondered why you started with an alternate universe, then realized that you had written this before the seventh book even came out, which makes this even more amazing. Out of curiosity, what did you think of book-Snape versus your-Snape?
Finally, I know I touched on this earlier, but it's worth mentioning again. Your Snape felt so much more like a real person to me than the one in the books, and his self-awareness is so heartbreakingly accurate, except for the one time he says: "If I had allowed myself to love her". He did love her, he just never allowed himself to be happy. That part makes you feel so sorry for him.
I could go on and on (I just spent two days worth of free time reading this, and enjoyed every second of it.)...but I hope you write more novels and post them up, this was a pleasure, and a privilege to read.
Thank you. :)
interesting concept- that the slytherins don't sleep by year, and that the prefects choose their places... is there any reason for this?
must... keep... on reading..... will properly review once i can stop. but i must say, WONDERFUL chapter... i can already see you are an exceptional writer
So, he has no taste for repetition, and yet the constant failure of his continual efforts at planning, as you pointed out once, do look suspiciously like it, which must have made it doubly irksome.
Yes, I'm re-reading. Well, I have to read something...
This is masterful writing...the control of his voice, the internal consistency of his character, from first to last...It's just lovely.
You have filled in sooo many of the gaps in the story that JK Rowling has invited us to fill with our own imaginations, and have done so in a manner that does no damage to the characters involved. Your Lily is a girl worth dying for...she's creative and fun and smart, but a bit at a loss with Sev's brokenness, tho' she tries. Your Severus is quite simply one of the best takes on this character I've ever seen, unflinching when examining his scars, his essential darkness, but also showing the pride and courage that are, at base, him. And James, for example, is every bit the thoughtless boy who could grow into a decent man...so believeable. Many authors find that leap most difficult to make.
I think I've read a thousand fanfics in the past 5 years. This is easily in my top 10. I think I will bookmark it for those days I just want to sit and have a good cry. It is as cathartic as the best tragedies!!
You are truly a gifted writer, and I wish you much success with your original fic. all the best, editmom
I have to admit, Snape was one of my least favorite characters in the Harry Potter Series. However the brilliant job you have done giving him a full backstory makes him relatable. thank you for your efforts. :)
uwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh! *sobs* omg this story made me want to cry so much!!!! actually, i did at a few scenes....*breaks down into tears again*
i ADORED this fic...this is one of the lovliest fics EVER. i loved it from the summary to the end! Ii really really wish you would continue writing snape throughout harry's school year. sighs....snape has very unhealthy coping tactics that pomfrey or some kinda healer should help him try to get over...
This has to be the most stunning representation of not only Severus Snape but also his relationship with Lily and the Slytherin hierarchy. I have been reading this story for the past six hours, and will most likely find time to do so again in the future.
Author's Response: Six hours? Wow. I'm glad this story aged well, since so much of it was based on the guesses and hints available in HBP. Thanks for the review!
Poor Severus, I do think that, as we all know, Harry would not see things quite the way Lily did, at least not where Snape is concerned. Not until the very end, anyway.
This has been a fantastic ride through the life and mind of Severus Snape. In a few hours, I depart for a screening of The Half-Blood Prince movie and I have a feeling that the events are going to hit me much harder after having read this story. Thank you for a wonderful tale.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you found it satisfying -- and wonder how the movie looked to you.
I now see where the Professors rating comes in for this fic. I wanted to cry. But excellent job. I am so engrossed in Severus Snape that I literally can not stop reading.
Excellent insight in this chapter. Snape proved that even the most innocuous-seeming spells can be used in a dark way. It isn't the spells you use, but they way they are used. Excellent. This, again, ties into Rowling and everything she has Dumbledore say about choices and what not.
This is a truly intelligently written piece of fiction and I love all the little things you have incorporated from the books.
Dolohov's Whip, eh? So that's what he used against Hermione in the Department of Mysteries. Love it.
"...I cannot in honesty hold someone's father against him." Apparently, this isn't a statement Snape abides by later in his life in regards to Harry. This chapter truly made me love this fic. There is so much intertwined with Rowling's books. But the line that made me literally gasp: " This seems to be the day for sons; you're to have one too, also quite like his father, alas. I hereby command that you produce daughters just like yourself as well. And it seems you should beware of Dark wizards telling fortunes." Amazing. My roommate ran in the room to ask what was wrong and I had to sheepishly tell him that I was reading a fanfic and that Snape had predicted Lily's fate in her tea leaves long before the prophecy was ever made. Excellent work.
I absolutely love how you've incorporated the beginnings of what we learn about Snape as the Half-Blood Prince from that book as well as Deathly Hallows. Excellent job of portraying the teenaged Snape. I am enjoying this fic the more I read it. I can't wait to finish.
I've just started reading this fic and I quite like it. I love your characterization of Lucius Malfoy and I can see where all his "advice" has made Snape into the man we see in Rowling's stories. Great job. I will definitely continue to read.
Bloody brilliante, spent almost my whole free time between work reading this :)