Reviewer: Blackpenny
Date: 02/21/06 15:28
Chapter: Marked

Oh. God. I can't believe I didn't see that coming. Surprising and inevitable - quite the trick you have there.

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: CL394281
Date: 02/21/06 9:36
Chapter: The Letter

Wow. This is simply the best Harry Potter fanfic I've ever read. Period. I don't often tread outside the humorous or light-side of the fanfic world (whether HP or not) these days, having found far too many "serious" fics just...tiresome. Absolutely amazing work you've done so far and I simply can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Ooh! A new reviewer, and a happy one! I'm glad you don't find the "serious' fic tiresome -- it certainly has its lighter moments amidst the gloom and doom. Now you have me pondering the metaphysics of tiresomeness, as there is a distinct chance I used up all the surplus overwrought angst in earlier writings and can now dole it out at a more sensible rate. Hmm... *feels possible literary essay coming on*

Thanks for reviewing! More is coming soon!

Reviewer: jlpforpotter
Date: 02/18/06 13:11
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

So it seems that Dumbledore was quite right to groom Severus for the job of double-agent. Finally, it seems, Snape will have to take a stand to protect the few people he truely cares about. Excellent story by the way! I've been hooked ever since the reference to 'Vernon' in one of the early chapters!

Author's Response: Ooooh! You know, you're the very first person to remark on Vernon. I'm so delighted now. It seemed to me that if anyone really needed to be turned yellow at some point in his life...

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Blackpenny
Date: 02/18/06 9:47
Chapter: The Letter

I can't stop speculating about future chapters - a sign of a truly compelling story. Why couldn't Snape find an honest job, I wonder? Could it be.... Satan? I mean, Tom Riddle? Perhaps Riddle had his well connected minions cut off employment opportunities, then sent in Narcissa with her seductive offer. My alternate thesis is that the wizarding world is so small that half of it wouldn't hire him because of his muggle heritage and the other wouldn't because of his dark reputation. I like the first idea better.

Author's Response: I like the first idea better as well, but a touch of the second makes the first a lot less work, no? (And nice Church-Lady ref, BTW.) Thanks again for reviewing!

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 02/17/06 20:46
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

Another very interesting chapter that gives us a lot of insight into the most notorious death eaters, and im eager to see just how Snape thought of joining and if he planned to be an agent for Dumbledore from the beginning. As good as always which is hardly a surprise! I hope that he heads straight for Lily when he makes up his mind, and a little confrontation with James would be a nice way to show how they've grown up. Great work!!

Author's Response: Thank you! Mmm, more speculation! *goes off to polish plot twist*

Reviewer: sobriquette
Date: 02/16/06 19:28
Chapter: The Letter

Thanks for the great story, this is the first fanfiction I'll read to the end. Thanks especially for the charmed ceiling in Slytherin dungeon, and for reminding us us that 'that horrible boy' was not necessarily James Potter. I know that was a while ago, but I really loved those two bits. Now I think Snape decides to become a double agent BEFORE he caves in to the Death Eaters. Snape already knows too much about Lily's future not to hate her son, so I think the hating Harry part comes naturally now. I also think that the spell for writing notes in class could come in handy again. Can you tell I can hardly wait for your next chapter?

Author's Response: Ooh! A new reviewer! And a speculating one! I loved the charmed-ceiling and Petunia scenes too, as it happens. I solemnly promise to update soon, and meanwhile will suggest "Eileen Loves Toby" as speculation-fodder if you haven't read it already.

Reviewer: JeWb
Date: 02/16/06 16:05
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

Sounds very interesting, I take it that's why you put in Snapes little debate about free will and what you have to do. Well, not trying to crowd this up or anything, just a talkative person.

Author's Response: The free-will question is a favorite of mine, which probably put it in the thesis and the fic, but yes, the reading for one bunnied the conversation in the other. Daniel Dennett, "Elbow Room," as I recall. As you may have noticed, I don't mind a little chatter in my reviews. Thanks!

Reviewer: Kiwi_Chick
Date: 02/16/06 4:32
Chapter: Narcissa's Offer

Love the new chapters. I love the way you show the contrast between "recruiting" for the Order of the Phoenix and the Death Eaters! Before I read your story I had nothing but dislike for Snape, But you have made me like him and care what happens to him!! How dare you lol! I feel sorry for him at the moment getting bashed, it makes me HATE Bellatrix sooo much more!! Keep them coming!! P.S Thanks for bringing Dobby into it, he's one of my fav characters!!!!!

Author's Response: How dare I indeed! *chuckle* Glad to hear you like him at present, and hate Bellatrix. Me, too. The recruitiing strategies do make things difficult for the good guys, don't they? It's the problem with being on the side of free will and free expression. The brute-force and indoctrination side has a much easier time with gaining more members. Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: woodwoman
Date: 02/15/06 13:45
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

Great chapter, and another quick update. I can't explain why I'm so drawn to this story, but you've done a great job describing Snape's situation in a dry, witty way. The guarded emotion is touching and I really enjoy the fact that it doesn't seem far-fetched at all. I know I've said all this before, but I don't think it'll hurt for you to hear it again. Keep up the good work and another shining 10/10!

Author's Response: Ooh, ow, no more, no more -- you're quite right, I rather enjoy hearing it again. Thank you for reviewing, and with 10s no less! "Dry" and "guarded" seem to suit him, don't they?

Reviewer: xenophiliac
Date: 02/14/06 19:52
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

Wow, took a break from your usual snape's lethargy chapters. Adding in the disappearances was eye-opening to the real world for snape and its something he should have watched out for. Didn't Dumbledore warn him that would happen? I'd say Snape was being punished, though, too, because of his hopes upon arrival to use a comfortable setting for potion making, even if it was to help the dark arts. He's got to give in sometime.

Author's Response: Lethargy? Well, sorta, I guess. Freelancing and book-writing in solitude, standing aside from major philosophical issues, was probably a pretty comfortable situation for him -- but we all know he's not allowed to stay comfortable for any length of time. Karma will not permit. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Gingerbread Man
Date: 02/14/06 19:23
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

So that's how they get him. Foolish of them, how could they think that torture would inspire real loyalty? Anyway, it's sad, but it's better than if he had joined Voldemort more . . . willingly.

Author's Response: I'm not sure they're after real loyalty; Lucius has always been willing to settle for compliance, no matter with what bad grace. Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: Blackpenny
Date: 02/14/06 19:06
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

Ah, poor Severus thinking he could go to first base with the Devil and not get screwed. Thank you for writing quickly like a mad thing! It's always nice to log in and find something new and worth reading up so often.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! It prompts me to put up new chapters when I ought to be writing a thesis -- oh, well, nobody'd read the thesis anyway. "New and worth reading" is deeply appreciated.

Reviewer: JeWb
Date: 02/14/06 17:38
Chapter: A Lesson In Deportment

Hey, another great chapter. Though we all know Snape will cave in, it's just a matter of how much he'll take before he does so. Snape does always seem to find himself in 'sticky' situations, doesn't he? Hrmmm, much to ponder on, update ASAP ^_^,


Author's Response: Updating soon -- the secret is to write the whole fic first, then start posting... Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: JeWb
Date: 02/14/06 13:35
Chapter: Narcissa's Offer

Hey, great story, wanted to read all of the chapters before I reviewed. Before reading this I was skeptical, not much of a Snape fan. Just love to hate him. But seeing his life from another point of view has changed my, though slightly, feelings for him. This would work well with Rowlings writing, as to why Dumbledore is so sure Snape isn't evil. He would never knowingly hurt Lily. I always considered Snape's school life how you described it, though not so much the torture from his fellow house-mates. Figured mostly everyone would be afraid of him to try anything, besides the Marauders of course. So Snape will become a Death Eater soon I take it? Update ASAP ^_^.

Author's Response: Hi! I haven't seen you here before! I'm working on converting lots of people to the Snape-Sympathizers, as you probably already gathered. The more professors you spend time with, the more you understand the man... Updating soon! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: woodwoman
Date: 02/14/06 2:24
Chapter: Narcissa's Offer

I love that you made Snape into Vindictus Viridian. Such a fitting name pair: Severus and Vindictus... I like it. The thought of he and Narcissa is slightly disturbing, as is the thought of what Lucius would do to Snape if he found them out. Yet, with your wit and careful, cool tone you make it seem... not natural, but not unexpected... I don't know the word. Good. I love this and thank goodness for the quicker than quick update! I feel like I just read the last chapter! Well, looks like another 10/10 from me, and perhaps you'll make a Snape-liker out of me yet.

Author's Response: "Inevitable" is the word I try to keep in mind with this story -- and yet unpredictable. How's that? If you're not a Snape-liker and you're still reading, I'm deeply deeply flattered! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Blackpenny
Date: 02/13/06 19:28
Chapter: Narcissa's Offer

It's a rather understated compliment, perhaps, but I love how this story makes sense. In other hands a Severus-Narcissa pairing could be painfully awful, but here it's natural. Lily is out of reach on so many levels. Narcissa is doing exactly what bored, underestimated trophy wives do. Severus is lonely, curious... and 18. I am by no means sympathetic to adultery, even in fiction but I admire your handling of the theme. How typical of Severus to allow it to continue until Narcissa decides to pull away. I assume that Mrs. Malfoy has decided to sprog now and doesn't want to chance any black-eyed cuckoos coming home to roost. Poor Severus - it seems his fate is to be used.

Author's Response: Actually that's a very nice understated compliment. And I'm chuckling at the roosting of black-eyed cuckoos, as well. Thank you for reading and reviewing, and for understanding the 18-year-old.

Reviewer: xenophiliac
Date: 02/13/06 16:42
Chapter: Narcissa's Offer

Wow, I wasn't finished with my other review when I noticed this chapter was up. So I as right, Narcissa and Lucius somewhat show up, but what are they doing and how are they going to convert Snape to the Dark Side? And now Narcissa is flaunting herself. Do her comments make Lucius gay too? LOL The plots moving quickly....

Author's Response: As above -- *chants* no spoilers, no spoilers...

Thanks again for reading, reviewing, and wondering -- the last lets me know you're engaged!

Reviewer: xenophiliac
Date: 02/13/06 14:58
Chapter: A Luncheon

Snape hasn't got a future he knows about yet, what's gonna happen to him? He would never do anything to hurt Lily intentionally so is he going to be threatened using her as bait...Sorry. Do Lucius/Narcissa/Wilkes come back into the story? Comment: I find it blue how Lily is now moving on with her life but Snape continues to wander around.

Author's Response: Thanks for keeping up and reviewing! And you're quite right -- I'm going to answer all these questions by posting more chapters. Otherwise we'll have to ask the mods to add an ITEOE-spoiler warning label to the range of possibilities, and I can't picture them liking the idea much... I find the wandering a little blue too, but his ambitions are mismatched with his opportunities at present, and the two haven't locked together yet. Thought for the day -- did they ever?

Reviewer: woodwoman
Date: 02/13/06 0:10
Chapter: A Luncheon

Hooray, another chapter! I'm hooked. Can't get away from your wit -- the conversations between Snape (still can't bring myself to call him Severus) and Lily are always my favorite. And the Death Eaters still haven't come knocking on his door? What is going on? Very interested to see how you will explain his joining-up with the darker side and his ultimate betrayal (if, at best, unbeknownst betrayal) of Lily. I'll keep reading, for sure!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Funny that you can't call him Severus -- I just can't call him Snape anymore. They aren't knocking just yet, but there might be something a little darker than usual about the overwhelming silence in response to his job inquiries.

Reviewer: Blackpenny
Date: 02/12/06 16:17
Chapter: A Luncheon

Whee! Another chapter, and what a plot-thickening chapter it is. I love the subtle way you have Lily and Severus drifting apart - not because of actual estrangement but because of time and diverging interests. Severus is down to porridge and tea while Lily has a full life with a house and a job. Lily is fighting the good fight with a passion, Severus is the eternal observer. What will finally cause him to join the Death Eaters, I wonder? The promise of research funding maybe? I can't see Severus (your's or Rowling') joining the Death Eaters with eyes open, but could he be tricked? I can't wait to find out.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! We're getting into the bit where I can't reply much without spoiling something, but I appreciate the comment on the drift apart due to life in general.

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