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Name: theempresslol (Signed) · Date: 01/02/11 19:42 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww! This was so sweet. I love Seamus/Lavender. Do you have any more stories about them?

Name: Babieblonde5629 (Signed) · Date: 04/04/07 15:52 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
that is so sweet. i bet they're gonna have fun in the dorm all alone

Author's Response: Probably. They'll build up the fire and snuggle close and talk about the way things are going to be after the war. :)

Name: DogLover4Life (Signed) · Date: 01/07/07 13:30 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
*sniff sniff* It was sad, short and sweet. You start out with Seamus being all alone. And we learn how Neville used his Gryffindor courage and about how Seamus even missed Harry and Ron even though they weren't close. Then he bumps into Lavender and we see this side of her we've never seen before. Except for with the fake snow and her crying.. Anyway, you portrayed all of the emotions beautifully and it ended like magic.

Author's Response: I love that you review everything. It makes me feel like a bad person that I, er, forget things. Like secret things. But you won't ever see this, so I can just ramble on about them. I'm glad you sort of liked this story. Thank you for review! *D*

Name: inthewrongera (Signed) · Date: 09/15/06 23:43 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
Really cute!!!!!! i LOVE what he said right before he kissed her! that was adorable! haha good job!

Author's Response: Haha, that's what was said to me around the same time, and I was so amused by it I put it into the story! Thanks so much for your review! Have a nice day. *D*

Name: Valentinia (Signed) · Date: 07/03/06 19:42 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
Sweet. Fluffy, but with a tinge of darkishness (okay, everyone knows what I mean... I didn't want to say "darkness" that would make even less sense) in the background. I enjoyed this story very much.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it; no one really reads this story, it seems, and that's just fine with me. It's my least favorite, actually. But thank you for your review.

Name: the nutty imp (Signed) · Date: 02/11/06 8:52 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
I like the sad atmosphere you started this off with :) Dark and entirely not Chrismassy --- OK itís downright depressing. How you showed that simple things can lift up people spirit despite everything that went on. Start thing dark and end it sweet Ö I can learn a lot for you in terms of writing romance. The hesitation and the climax is done well despite the short length.

Author's Response: Are you trying to pass me off as another SPEW Review? :) :) Ha ha, Miel, I'm glad you seemed to like it better this time! Interesting that you think I can write good romance <.< I've never really thought I was that great . . . Well, anyway, thanks for your review! *D*

Author's Response: Oh. Okay, I get it now. It was just Gryffindor pride that prompted a new review. Well, thanks anyway.

Name: the nutty imp (Signed) · Date: 01/06/06 6:41 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
Hey CA! Am finally here!

Seamus and Lavender ... looks like you've decided to go for rare pairing and this does work.

Although the events are clear. I feel that the emotions are lacking especially on the part of Neville's sacrifice. Maybe you intended it that way ... how so many deaths had occurred that one grows numb after a while. Thus my only suggestion is that it ought to be stated somewhat. How despite his age Seamus was pretty jaded mow due to all the death and destruction on the war. It does make a nice contrast to Lavender's state.

It's an entirely sweet piece on how two people found one another in the midst of all the dark happenings around them. I like the imagery how both found pin points of light from one another in that dark backdrop. ^_^

Good Luck on this Entry and Belated Happy New Year! ^_^

Author's Response: Wow . . . I never thought of that . . . I'm afraid Neville's sacrifice, while a poignant end, was just a way to get Seamus alone in his dorm *dies of shame* Thanks for the review; I know it's not my best work, and that makes me a little ashamed, but I'm glad you liked parts of it at least. Have a nice day! *D*

Name: x2pttrclue32 (Signed) · Date: 12/05/05 23:18 · For: The Last Chapter of this Tale
First off, I would like to say that I liked the tone of the story (I'm a big fan of well established tone and mood). It was sad and depressing at the beginning, but then the mood went up a bit. I also liked the pairing here...Seamus/Lavender, eh? ;) I've never read any S/L, but I ahve to say it was interesting, and I enjoyed it.

One thing that I would suggest to you is that you should spend more time building up tension and building up your plot. A lot of it seemed rushed. I think you could make this already great story into a much better one if you stretched out the plot a bit. Also, there were a few places where things were getting disconnected. Try to make them flow better next time. ;)

Overall, I really liked this story...and the pairing. ;)

Author's Response: Thanks for the nice review; I'm well aware that this story has faults, I'm afraid I submitted a rather rough draft instead of working to make it better. Depending on when the Contest ends in relation to my finals, I might edit it with improvements. Thanks again! Have a nice day . . . *D*

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