What a heartbreaking and sad story. I read this story for a discussion in my Dark/Angst class, where I had to depict the theme from a story by a professor.
I chose the theme to be 'seperation', and basically it's effects, even though Ethan's love for his family was also a key concept. But I found it to be almost the same, because it was his love for his wife and mother that caused the sadness/longing due to the seperation.
The letters were very real sounding, and Ethan himself seems like a brave man who was on a quest to help defeat the Dark Lord, even if it meant being away from his loved ones. That is commendable, and shows that he was a great man (as I said in my analyzation in my class).
This story can easily be related to any real war, a Muggle war, because it is so truley written. It is sad to know this happens all the time because of wars, but the feelings you've written through Ethan were belieable and heart-wrenching. His advice/words to his wife and mother were particularly sad, to me, and yet so wise. It surprises me how he could be so wise and truthful and blunt to them, knowing that he would die soon.
Overall, a fantastic piece, that I really enjoyed reading.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked this story. I based it off of the feelings and problems generated by real war. I have a few friends in the miltary, one of whom is engaged, and used their experiances as well as my own feelings to try to make the piece as believable as possible. I'm constantly amazed by the courage of people both on the battlefield, and those at home.
OMG, that really almost made me cry, it was so sad! Great job though, it was a geat idea and you wrote it so well! It is a great collection of letters. Perfect 10/10 to you, and I salute you and your writing skills. ronaldweasley. PS I am not kidding when I say that I salute you. I really solemnly do.
Author's Response: Thank you for your praise (and your salutes, although I assure you they are not necessary). I have rather strong feelings about war at times, and I am glad that I was able to convey them so aptly. Thank you again.
Kristin - this story moved me to tears. It was very, very well-written and realistic. I could feel the very emotions Ethan expressed. In a way, I could almost see him writing it, see Beth and his mother reading it. The words he chose are so... fitting, filled with feeling. You've made us readers experience the black atmosphere of war-time. Brilliant.
There is almost nothing to nit-pick. I enjoyed every single line. At the very end, I have to point out a small typo - I am sorry that war has torn from you first husband, than son... - that would have to be 'then'. I give this 10/10. *goes off to have a good cry*
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your comlpiments. I get tierd of hearing about blind patriotism and I just felt that I really had a story to tell. It almost made me cry too because I knew I was going to kill him and I liked him more and more as I wrote... War sucks.
Well written and compelling and though tragic, the short story is very uplifting. You have portrayed your character's thoughts well and brought him to life vividly. Thank you for your great talent.
Author's Response: Thank you for your compliments, I really appreciate them!
Your story was a nearly perfect one. I suspect you've read or heard about the letters that Ken Burns used in producing his Civil War mini series. Like those letters from a real man to a real wife during a real war, your story illustrated an important truth: War Sucks. People get hurt, and it's all so nearly pointless -- but if we don't fight for life, liberty, and truth, the slimey gits will take over. Every age has its sociopaths who want power at everyone else's expense.
Author's Response: Thank you for your ideas. I have not read the Ken Burns stories, I will have to go look those up sometime. I appreciate the recomendation, and completely agree with you about the problems of war.