OMG I LOVE THIS STORY!!! You've got Sirius in perfect character so far, along with James!!! Keep with this story, it's amazing! P.S-where can I become part of the Sirius Black fan club???
Wow that was just so funny...I really liked it...but he sounded too stuck up but it's okay he is only 19...i liked every part of it...10/10..update soon please..u are in my favs...
Hilarious! How he's so stuck up like that and yet he can be so stupid...wow that was funny. Write more soon!
That is ingeniously funny. Actually it was brilliant. I don't think I wasn't not (sorry for the double negative) laughing the entire time!
That is ingeniously funny. Actually it was brilliant. I don't think I wasn't not (sorry for the double negative) laughing the entire time!
great job Hallie Black! really enjoyed it! very well written and very funny, keep up the good work. new chapter soon!
*Pumps arm into air* Yes! I can never, ever, have enough Sirius Black. That was brilliant! It was funny, and clever, and I hope you keep writing!
I thought this was gr8! I'll definatly recommend it 2 all of my friends and colleges. My only critism would be that I think you mention "okay?" a bit too much but that's only something minor. Keep up the good work! Please put up chapter 2 because I've been waiting for ages!!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAHAHAHAAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was bloody brilliant! If you haven't already (and I KNOW you haven't reviewed), read DON'T EVER BUG US AGAIN!. I am spread ing the gospel of this story everywhere I review (even though I didn't write it), because it's JUST. THAT. GOOD. The reviews are really funny too. ANYHOO, I loved the thing about the fanclub and getting his birthday made a holiday by black mail, LOL. TTFN!
oh gawd! that was funny!! *is still holding ribs from laughing so hard* Sounds just like sirius! he sounds a little bit... hmmm.... egotistic but he's nineteen! i can easily see him as being that way! KEEP WRITING!!!
“Wait a moment… how the devil did you know I was recounting the story of my life?” I mean, I was doing it in my mind, you know. “You’re a Legilimens, aren’t you? Oh, how cruel of you not to say anything before! I feel so – so vulnerable, now! All this time you’ve been spying on my thoughts! But then… why didn’t you get angry when you saw me thinking about Lily in that sexy lace lingerie I’d seen in that store next to…” I trailed off, staring at the look on my friend’s face. “You were talking out loud to yourself again, you dolt, I wasn’t doing any mind-reading or—” He paused, looking suddenly rather greenish. “What’s that you said about my girlfriend and sexy lingerie?!” Why don’t I ever keep my mouth shut? Why? “Me? Your girlfriend? Sexy lingerie? Prongs, I think you’re a bit confused, aren’t you? I never said anything like that…” He was still glaring at me. “Right. Right. I’m sure as hell you didn’t.” “So, um, what brought you up here to overhear my thoughts?” I asked, trying to change the subject. I succeeded. He relaxed visibly. “Lily wanted to know what happened to the turkey we were supposed to have for dinner,” he explained, emphasizing the last word. One thing I didn’t tell you is that right now, considering the fact that I’m 19 years old and don’t have much of an income, I share an apartment with James and his girlfriend. So that’s why Lily would be caring about some turkey for our dinner. “Turkey?” I repeated, feigning a surprised look. “We have turkey down in the fridge? I had no idea.” “We had turkey down in the fridge, but we don’t have it anymore because someone ate it.” James stared at me pointedly. I shrugged. “Must have been a stray cat or something.” “More likely a stray dog, wouldn’t you agree?” he asked. “Yeah, definitely,” I answered. “Yeah, I’m sure it must have been a stray dog.” “Possibly very big and shaggy and black and stupid,” continued James just as conversationally. “Certainly. Actually, now that you mention it, I think I saw a dog like that roaming around the house. Big, shaggy, black…” I trailed off, thinking. “Hold on a moment! You’re talking about me, aren’t you?!” James raised an eyebrow. “Am I?” I rolled my eyes. “Of course you are. But I seem to have told you that I didn’t even know we had turkey.” I HAD to quote! I'm sorry but this conversation made me laugh so much and I cannot wait for next chapter! It was so hilarious! I can just imagine Sirius sayng it! Keep up the absolutely EXCELLENT work! It's terrific! I'm not sure whether you have to code reviews or not, so if it messes up, just go with me, ok? LOL.
Author's Response: Wow! That must have been the longest review EVER!!! THANKS for your support! ; ) And don't worry: chapter two is on its way to approvement (or so I hope!)
Great start, please continue! 10/10!