Poor Hermione. I really like how you've matched up Tonks and Hermione. I think they are just oppostie enough that an exchange like this could very possibly happen. This was well written, and the imagery was excellent. Go Hufflepuff!
Author's Response: Thank you. Cheers!
I'm no good at writing constructive reviews. But I think it was really great! I also found it interesting how Tonks was trying to use the techniques of Lupin to get throught to Hermione. 10/10
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I'm no good at writing constructive reviews. But I think it was really great! I also found it interesting how Tonks was trying to use the techniques of Lupin to get throught to Hermione. 10/10
It's a bit tedious to be in Hermione's head isn't it? She's right though, Ron does have the emotional range of a teaspoon. As for the story, it seemed odd for Tonks to do the redeeming. I almost wanted to ask 'shouldn't she and Lupin be together for new years eve?' Anyhow, your writing, word usage, and grammer were great!
Author's Response: I knew that would come around. Well, I suppose I was trying to impose the idea that even after the war, when people should be as close as they were during it, people are distant, a feeling of unfinished buisiness, if you will. I was going for the more subdued feeling. As always, things don't work out as they should. I'll try to specify next time. I suppose I could have included that in the opening paragraphs. As for Tonks doing the redeeming, it seemed unlikely enough to be highly likely. Anyway, I very much appreciate the constructive review. Cheers~
Well, what can I say? It was definitely cute. *chuckles* I would never have thought of Tonks doing the redeeming, particularly for Hermione. So for choosing a rare choice, I applaud you. It was pulled off well.One thing I bristled at was when Tonks started talking as Remus would. It was odd to find her talking like the Professor, but since you acknowledged that this was her trying to act as Remus might (to put Hermione at ease, perhaps?), it works. Without that explanation of Tonks trying to get inside Remus' psychology for dealing with people, I might have considered it OOC.
Again, a very cute story. I liked it. Good work, and good luck.
~Lydia.
Author's Response: Yes, I was a bit concerned about the reaction to the use of Tonks using Remus' techniques, but I thought it would work out. And yes, it was supposed to make Hermione feel as if everything was in order, because that's how she thinks, I guess. I'll try to be a bit clearer next time. Thank you so much for the constructive review! You have no idea how much I appreciate those. Cheers~
