Overall I like it. But I see one flaw: Hermione seems a bit to OOC. Hermione is smart and pretty compassionate. I dont think she'd react they way she does, here, to draco. She'd know that he's obviously not the same and would behave differently. But the way you portrayed everyone elses reactions was excellent! Poor Dracoo!
haha keep up the good work.
I'm gonna go keep reading =) =)
Author's Response: Thanks for your comments! I'm aware that Hermione is generally compassionate, but considering that Draco has bullied and persecuted her since he met her, I think she would be somewhat more suspicious and distrustful than usual. Also, she has no way of knowing when he will remember, and if he caught her with her guard down she could be in serious danger. Looking back, though, I probably did go a little over the top -- such are the hallmarks of a newbie writer. Thanks for your review!
oh my god!!!!!!! you cannot just leave us with a cliffie like that! that is insane! but so is this story--it's insanely good! i love everything about this story, so PLEASE update soon!
Author's Response: LOL! I've a feeling I won't be very popular when the next chapter is up -- if you think this cliffie is bad...
hmmm. really good plot line. I saw a couple mistakes your beta didn't catch, but please write more and update soon please!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Any chance you could let me know what those mistakes are so I can fix them?
now ive read the whole fic so far, and its AMAZING. keep up the good work
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying to overcome my natural laziness and writer's block, but I should have the next chapter typed up soon.
Wow. Love the way you wrote the last part.
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
thats french or something right?
Author's Response: Yup, it's French. It'll be explained next chapter, though if you really want to know there's translators online.
You are evil! What a cliffhanger!!! Damm my desision to learn german instead of french!! I love the 'dong' bit, it just made it so much more dramatic. I just love your writing style, the detail you go into in every single thing, its amazing! I'm completly hooked on this story and will probably checking every day for an update! Ahh Draco kissed Hermione!! Im in shock! Please please please update soon! Theres just too many things in this chapter i love, i just would say i loved ever single word, no letter of this!
Author's Response: LMAO! I'm glad you liked the bell part, I was a little unsure about it... I wonder did you spot anything odd there?
wow, why is he yelling at Hermione, did fleur or her mum disappear? and what about thos envelopes? wholl find those?
Author's Response: *taps nose* You'll see...
I went back to see what you had changed in the first chapter, and ended up reading the whole story again... I had forgotten a lot of stuff. Anyway, I really like the story; the idea behind it is very original and it's very intriguing to think that what Draco's like without his memory might be his natural personality. It'll be very interesting when he gets his memory back!
About this chapter - yes, something finally happens between Hermione and Draco! And then, what a cliffhanger! What does the French mean at the end (or are we not supposed to know?) Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! The French at the end... well, if you know it or look it up, it'll give you a hint for the next chapter, but Hermione will explain it anyway.
I'm glad this story isn't dead. It had been a while since it was updated and my hope was wearing thin. But I'm glad it came back with a great chapter. Kudos!
Author's Response: Don't worry, if I give up this story I will let you know! The next one is written but not typed or beta'd.
thanks for updating...i'm a little unsure about the fingers though
Author's Response: I know it's a bit weird, but it's necessary for a change in the ending -- you'll see later!
That's just wrong.
Author's Response: O-kay, I have no idea what bit you're talking about, but each to his own...
Author's Response: Wait, is that a flame or an exclamation of disgust at the bullying in this chapter? If it's the former, please don't do it again, but if it's the latter I totally agree with you, and apologise for my earlier remark. ;-)
I just started reading Fanfics on this site, and I really like this one. Please update soon. I understand the busy-ness thing you have, I'm in my second year of colelge and getting ready to take MCATs this summer. But fanfic is my way out of stress, and I really like your story so please update soon. I've been told I'm a hard-core study version of Hermione, so sine I don't read much outside of my studies, I know it will make my day, and probably my week when you do.
Author's Response: I'll do my best to get that chapter in soon. I'm waiting for my beta to send it back right now, and I'm working a couple of chapters ahead. Thanks for your lovely review!
I just love this story!!!the characteres,the plot...everything grabs hold and doesnt let go.so intriguing.but,dear mooncalf,why have u stopped writing?i think that im speaking for all of us that we really miss it.so please update your wonderfull story once again!! ;)
Author's Response: Don't worry! I haven't stopped. My next chapter is with my beta, and should be in queue very shortly. Thanks for your review!
Great story. :) You should probably 'install' some of Draco's old characters. After all, somethings never change (Think Gilderoy) I am thrilled to find out what happened next :P Keep updatin'!
Author's Response: I have a couple of-not-so positive things stuck in there, but you're right... he probably needs a bit of work. I'm planning to rewrite the first few chapters, so I'll keep your advice in mind. An extract from the next chapter (For Whom The Bell Tolls) is on my LJ (link is on my author's page).
this is a nice story!
it's so good/
please do update more often!
i really love it!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'll update as soon as I can! I just need to add the finishing touches and send it off to my beta.
Wow, I have to say this is an amazing story. I really do love it, and hope you'll keep it up! :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I've finally decided where it's heading, so don't worry, I won't be giving up any time soon!
i read this story entirely from my phone!
that's how hooked i was and still am.
great story! and what a gorgeous little brainwave, making draco a sirius-look-alike! awww...:) way to go, moon!
Author's Response: From your phone? Wow! I'm glad you like the story, and hopefully you'll like the next few chapters once I finally type them up.
But what happened? Mr.D sounds imperioed, but is the Mrs polyjuiced? Are the D's another family of blond pure blood supremists? I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Actually, originally I had a very innocent and boring reason for them being like that, but my wondeful reviewers have given me an idea. I have most of the nest chapter written, I just need to type it up and send it to my beta.
I just read your whole story, and I loved it! Its great to read fics like these where you take time to develope Draco and Hermione's relationship instead of rushing into it. I cant wait to find out whats up with Fluer's mom!!!
Author's Response: Double review!