Reviewer: Kyaerin
Date: 06/02/11 11:34
Chapter: Chapter Four

oh my goddddd

Reviewer: hermioneg415190
Date: 11/25/07 2:08
Chapter: Chapter Four

just one word great

Author's Response: \0/

Reviewer: ginnywitch23
Date: 09/17/07 14:55
Chapter: Chapter Four

Very good.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: ginnywitch23
Date: 09/17/07 14:54
Chapter: Chapter Four

Very good.

Reviewer: ginevra715
Date: 06/11/07 23:09
Chapter: Drinking and Drowning

ohhhh my this is hilarious

Author's Response: Much lighter than some of my other stuff, no? Fluff is very important once in a while and drunken fluff is a necessity in any fanfiction diet. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: _Levicorpus_
Date: 03/25/07 19:49
Chapter: Chapter Four

This story is beautifully crafted. I especially enjoyed how fantastically you wrote Sirius' inner monolouge and remus' speech was beautiful as well.
If only there were more writers like you around.... sheesh.

Author's Response: Sirius's inner monologue was just pure fun to write and verbalizing Remus's inner anguish was an equal challenge. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm flattered by the comment. Thank you!

Reviewer: asifloveisit
Date: 03/03/07 22:24
Chapter: Chapter Four

i like it. job well done!

Reviewer: arnold the pygmypuff
Date: 01/30/07 20:06
Chapter: Chapter Four

I like! Very much! It's probably the best Sirius/Remus I've seen... Please keep writing!

Author's Response: This story is finished, but I've got plenty of other R/S posted here if you'd like to check them out. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: meatofevil
Date: 12/01/06 23:12
Chapter: Chapter Four

;p I know what they mean by... upstairs

Author's Response: Actually, you are entirely wrong! There was nothing going on upstairs after the story stopped. I promise. I have it from a very good source. Sirius was much too drunk for anything like that to have happed. ;p

Reviewer: lisadawnelle
Date: 07/06/06 18:47
Chapter: Chapter Four

great story, I must say iI just sat down and read all the chapters at once. I think the best part when sirus was drunk. I laughed so hard. I have been there and seen others there. It is always a bad sign when you lose count of how much you drank.

Author's Response: LOL. Isn't it just! Thanks for reading!

Author's Response: LOL. Isn't it just! Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Vindictus Viridian
Date: 01/26/06 16:51
Chapter: Drinking and Drowning

You know perfectly well what I think, of course, and where I would put commas that you would not. So you may put that tongue back in your mouth, dear. Great job, and congrats on the win!!!

Author's Response: And now you sound like my mother, thus proving the point you made a few weeks ago. Are you happy now? *smirk* Congrats on being a finalist!

Reviewer: nobodyhome
Date: 01/22/06 5:28
Chapter: Chapter Four

wow... I just finished reading 'The Puppies' and this story rocks even more than i thought it would! Could bathtub Sirius be the greatest comedy invention of all time? I think so :) I liked the juxtaposition of comedy and sadness, thought both characters were very canon and it was another fab story - keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Well, it won the challenge for a reason *gloat, gloat* Glad you liked it. Sirius in the bathtub is one of my favorite things. *dreamy*

Reviewer: iliveinaworldofcandy
Date: 01/11/06 5:46
Chapter: Chapter Four

Aww, this chapter brought tears to my eyes!! Seriously, I thought the whole story was really good, funny and thought-provoking. I especially loved Sirius' drunken talking! I love Wolfstar, and I think this story made a very beleivable setting for their relationship. Two thumbs up!

Author's Response: Yay! Glad you liked it; glad-er that you reviewed! *stares sternly at hundreds of others who read and didn't* (Have you read the rest of it?)

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 12/20/05 19:24
Chapter: Chapter Four

Brilliant! That is one amazing emotional roller-coaster ride. Having Remus storm back into the room to open the chapter is fantastic; it made me laugh. Of course, the laughter didn't last long once I started reading those poems. They were both wonderful! Which leads to the scene in the kitchen. Just at the point where I thought there couldn't be any more emotional upheaval, you throw in the argument between Remus and Sirius. It is during their argument that I noticed what seemed to be some missing punctuation in this line by Remus: ' “Love was never a question for you Since the day I met you, you either loved someone or you hated them. There was never any middle ground And so you went off to kill Peter as soon as you knew And I did–I did nothing!” he choked out.' I have bolded the two words, in three separate places, between which it seems there is a period missing. Aside from that one piece of dialogue with the missing punctuation, the argument between the two is heart-wrenching. I felt bad for both men. It was such a relief to me when I read your ending; both of them really deserve some peace, which is what you give them in the end. Bravo!

Sorry for posting my review twice, but I noticed I seemed to have forgotten to close one of my bolds. So, here is the corrected version of my review. Sorry again.



Author's Response: *squeelove for ever patient reviewer* I shall make all corrections a)when I remember and b)I have the patience. The chances of both these thigns happening at the same time are quite slim, but you should watch out for them. *tease*

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 12/20/05 19:21
Chapter: Chapter Four

Brilliant! That is one amazing emotional roller-coaster ride. Having Remus storm back into the room to open the chapter is fantastic; it made me laugh. Of course, the laughter didn't last long once I started reading those poems. They were both wonderful! Which leads to the scene in the kitchen. Just at the point where I thought there couldn't be any more emotional upheaval, you throw in the argument between Remus and Sirius. It is during their argument that I noticed what seemed to be some missing punctuation in this line by Remus: ' “Love was never a question for you Since the day I met you, you either loved someone or you hated them. There was never any middle ground And so you went off to kill Peter as soon as you knew And I did–I did nothing!” he choked out.' I have bolded the two words, in three separate places, between which it seems there is a period missing. Aside from that one piece of dialogue with the missing punctuation, the argument between the two is heart-wrenching. I felt bad for both men. It was such a relief to me when I read your ending; both of them really deserve some peace, which is what you give them in the end. Bravo!

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 12/20/05 18:31
Chapter: Chapter Three

Wow. I can't help but feel sorry for Remus in this chapter. Although Sirius is rather pitiable, even when he emerges from his hangover, Remus is the one that is getting the raw deal. You do a great job of portraying Remus from the beginning of this chapter to the end. He starts out calm, trying to reason with Sirius, but the more Sirius persists in wallowing in self-pity, the more Remus gets upset. However, there were three large chunks of Remus' dialogue that each seemed to have something odd in them.

1. ' “You did what you thought you had to do and you had James and Lily’s permission to switch! There’s no way of knowing that Voldemort wouldn’t have gone after them later on If you think about it, you’ve kept Voldermort from the wizarding world for the last thirteen years; you’re practically a hero!” ' Okay, here goes. In my opinion, I think there should be a comma after 'do' in the first line of this dialogue. You'll probably stick your tongue out for that one, but I thought I should mention it anyway. Nevertheless, I have bolded two words between which should probably be a period, especially since you have capitalized the 'i' in 'it.' Lastly, I bolded your second mention of He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named because you added an extra 'r' and made it 'Voldermort' instead of 'Voldemort.'

2. ' “And, while I regret James and Lily’s death every single day,” Remus went on passionately, “it is an unarguable fact that Harry’s circumstances has provided him with abilities he wouldn’t have had or needed if he had grown up with two parents. And besides, it isn’t your fault that Harry’s an orphan, it’s Peter’s!” ' This one is fairly simple. I believe 'has,' which I have bolded, should be 'have' since Remus is talking about Harry's 'circumstances.'

3. ' “You did what you thought was best for them And,” he continued, his eyes boring into Sirius’s intensely, “it is not your fault that I’m poor. Though you did not have to reference the fact so bluntly,” he added grudgingly.' This last one is just another simple case of a period which I think has been left out between the two words that I have bolded.

I promise not to leave another review like this one where I put my bit of nit-picking in paragraphs, but I thought I should since the quotations of your dialogue were so long. (Also, you are supposed to get a small laugh out of it as I was being a bit of a brat in response to you sticking out your tongue.) Anyhow, I enjoyed this chapter just as much as I have enjoyed the majority of your chapters. The writing is really good and the storyline thus far as been phenomenally funny with just the right bit of sentimentality. Ending this chapter with Remus storming out of the room and slamming the door is an excellent mental picture. It's about time he got fed up enough with Sirius to do something like that. Bravo Remus! I'm off to find out what has happened after the door slamming.



Author's Response: Darling, at this point, I'd be disappointed if you didnt' nit-pick. Lol. And I got a TREMENDOUS laugh out of it. Everyone has just told me to shut-up. ;P

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 12/20/05 17:35
Chapter: Chapter Two

Can I just say that I felt myself get cold reading about all that ice cold water that poor Sirius was being soaked in? No wonder he thought Remus was trying to do him in. Of course, this whole chapter is pretty hysterical because of how drunk Sirius is, not to mention his many thoughts about 'bits' and 'parts.' I was laughing through the majority of this chapter. At least Sirius is a happy drunk. Now on to more serious subject matter. As much as you may stick out your tongue at me, I have to agree with V.V. about that sentence needing another comma. I also noticed a spot where I'm pretty sure you're missing a period: 'He was sitting naked in the empty tub for a moment before it was suddenly filled with lovely hot water, easing him He felt nearly every muscle in his body melt in the delicious warmth.' It seems that there should be a period after 'him,' which I have bolded to make it easier to find. Also, continuing my apparent love affair with commas, I think you should add a comma in this sentence: ' “I promise,” Sirius said solemnly and Remus left the bathroom.' In my opinion, there should be a comma after 'solemnly' before 'and.' Now that I have done my little bit of nit-picking, I am bracing myself to see a tongue being stuck out at me. All in all, and nit-picking aside, I really enjoyed this chapter. Beginning with Sirius waking up in a bath tub full of cold water is funny to everyone but him. But, your ending has to be my favorite part because of how touching it is. It really shows how caring Remus can be and how in need of it Sirius is. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story, especially the two new chapters you have already posted.

Author's Response: I am glad you laughed. I probably had much too much fun writing it. I am also *squee* thrilled that you got to it once it was done and so did not read only two chapters and forget about it as about two hundred other people seem to have done. (Shame on all of you.) I shall consider the corrections when I am not waiting on tenterhooks for a certain two hour finale to begin.... Oh, and if you read 'The Puppies!" the bit about the socks will be explained....

Reviewer: Vindictus Viridian
Date: 12/16/05 17:26
Chapter: Chapter Two

The attack of the mysterious Beta... I still like the logic of your drunken Sirius, trying to work out whether Remus is trying to kill him, freeze his bits off, or do some other utterly mysterious thing to him. Let's see, it is the reviewer's job to offer at least one nitpick. Ah. This will do. I stubbornly maintain that "He stared around at the unfamiliar bathroom, his first time in it and left to his own thoughts again, slowly became wretched once more," needs at least one more comma. So there.

Author's Response: Tell me what you think of my tongue. I'm sticking it out at you right now....

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 12/16/05 16:39
Chapter: Drinking and Drowning

What a great way to lighten up such a sad, lamentable beginning. You turn Sirius' wretchedness into hilarity, but only be giving him someone to lean on. I thought it was great the way you brought Remus into the story and had Sirius confuse him for a ghost from his memory; that reaction really speaks volumes about the frame of mind Sirius is in. Of course, putting Remus in the story also allows Sirius to break out of his misery by forcing him back to reality, which is humourous for the readers because of his level of drunkenness. The only thing I noticed is probably a typo in this sentence: ' “Yes Sirius, five is a lot.” ' I believe there should be a comma between 'Yes' and 'Sirius.' Other than that this chapter was a very smooth and entertaining read.

Author's Response: *dances* So glad you found this one and reviewed; especially in such detail. I've never gotten the hang of leaving one myself. I hope you stick with it to the end because it really is about to get very complicated between them (as Vindictus Viridian can attest to. *sticks out tongue again*) But what is this love affair that everyone seems to have with commas. I seem to have missed out on that one. Oh well. Same to you as V V on the comma. Lol.

Reviewer: Wise Owl
Date: 12/02/05 19:44
Chapter: Drinking and Drowning

The story is a bit here, there, and everywhere...which is just how Sirius must be feeling. He seems to be slowly spiraling into insanity and clearly living in the past. This was well-written if a bit confusing at times.

Author's Response: *mystical voice* It is a reflection of Sirius's drunken state. It is clearly metaphorical and--' Well, that's what my beta would say anyway, Lol. It'll make sense as it goes on, don't worry. Expect lots of laughs in the next chapter...Thanks for reading!

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