Reviews For The New Surprise
Reviewer: Idiot_IN_Ravenclaw
Date: 12/14/06 20:51
Chapter: Christmas memories

the chapters are really long it's mad awesome

Reviewer: Idiot_IN_Ravenclaw
Date: 12/14/06 20:31
Chapter: Strange beginnings

the story is really good so far

Reviewer: h3art0f1nk
Date: 12/12/06 22:22
Chapter: The Funeral

When are you going to post the next chapter?!

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 12/05/06 15:13
Chapter: Strange beginnings

hey, how old are you (you really dont have to answer) cause imma assume somewhere between 19-30

and seriously, i dont care if i get:

Author's response: um i dont wanna answer that...

but im just curious.

Author's Response: im 15 going on 16

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 12/02/06 17:14
Chapter: Strange beginnings

why does it mean re-writing? When mine got deleted i just changed a few lines and sent it back.

Author's Response: because ive got a new idea i should have it posted when the queue re-opens in january 3rd

Reviewer: happilyhufflepuff
Date: 12/01/06 18:57
Chapter: Strange beginnings

wha...what happened to Escape!?! I want to know!!!!!!!!!! this will makes me cry! not really... but I am really upset! I mean how can I not be?...I was the first reviewer on Escape:-(

Author's Response: aww thanks! it must have gotten deleted....grrrrrrrr...............i'll have to re-write it......

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/27/06 16:55
Chapter: Strange beginnings

ESCAPE IS GONE! *cries*

Author's Response: i know :-( this means re-writing for me..........

Reviewer: h3art0f1nk
Date: 11/27/06 0:35
Chapter: The Funeral

OMG. Where did "Escape" go?!

Author's Response: i have no idea! in the hands of the mods....

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/25/06 14:04
Chapter: Strange beginnings

Oh and i kinda sorta have to know

line-
queue


Author's Response: yeah

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/25/06 14:03
Chapter: Strange beginnings

And its quite sad that this is all i know...

apartment-
flat
and
argument-
row



Author's Response: argument/row i use argument as well...

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/25/06 14:01
Chapter: Strange beginnings

AHHHHHH IM SO CONFUSED!

Author's Response: why? lol ;)

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/25/06 13:59
Chapter: Strange beginnings

Um, is it sad that im on a website that is telling me how to replace american terms with brittish terms...?

Author's Response: er...no ive heard of sadder websites :)

Reviewer: Bertybottaholic
Date: 11/24/06 7:45
Chapter: The Funeral

I have to write another review!!! I'm sorry, but I feel that you should have had her sing the song, 'My heart will go on' from 'Titanic'. The song you had her sing is good though!I'm just saying, you know....

Author's Response: oh i know, i do love that song (and that movie actually) but y'know....

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/22/06 16:53
Chapter: Strange beginnings

I AM ABOUT TO DIE! OMG I LOVE MY COUSIN SO MUCH. SHE SENT ME THE LINK TO THE HBO PREVIEW FOR OOTP AND I LOVE HER. I WANT MOVIE NOW!

Author's Response: i saw it too!! july, yay!!!

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/22/06 16:51
Chapter: Strange beginnings

SHUDDUP. it isnt my fault im a review obsessed maniac. And yeah, i did make it. It took a few minutes but i made it.

Author's Response: i didnt say you were! *peace*?

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/20/06 22:54
Chapter: Strange beginnings

AHH IM GETTING REALLY ANXIOUS (sp?) RIGHT NOW CAUSE I ONLY HAVE NINE MORE REVIEWS TO MAKE IT TO THE TOP TENS!

Author's Response: Hope you get there! (after all you've left about 100 reviews in this!)

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/18/06 15:33
Chapter: Strange beginnings

Yes, lucky you. Were on hiatus right now until, until *sob* february!

Author's Response: I know!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's sooo...grrr...dgsgwa....dfgiuytweuytyj\sbnxn\cxz\vd....

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 11/10/06 16:22
Chapter: The Funeral

As THE biggest Remus Lupin fan, I'm very, very sad to see him go. They way you portrayed him, helping out Ginny all those times, just seems to fit so well. Tonks' words and sentiments seemed to fit perfectly.

I know this story is mostly focused around Ginny, but I felt like Harry should have reacted more. Remus was his mentor, and I feel like he would have reacted more- or completely sink into himself. I guess you're trying to show Harry as a mature adult, but I just felt like he was a bit flat. For example, he cooked a large happy meal the morning after Amy's kidnapping, unless you think he's throwing himself into work to get his mind off things. But he seemed so organized, so matter-of-fact about everything, as if he didn't know Remus and just passing on the information.

The emotions you portrayed in Ginny though were really well done. Her confusion, sorrow, and exaustion. Her indecision on what to tell Lisle was excellent to, it goes to show that even parent's don't have all the answers all the time.

Some of your continuity is slightly off again. You mention that there's toast on the tray like 3 time and a few minor grammar errors. You use the word "had" a lot, when it could be removed to tighten up the setence flow a little more. You ought to have a beta look through with a fine tooth comb to catch the little things. Overall it was a very well chapter but a second pair of eyes are always helpful.

Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive critism. :-) yeah it was a tough decision to make remus go but it seemed to 'fit' so thats why i did it. About Harry and cooking the meal, I think that was supposed to show how he wanted them all to be like a family again, amidst all the pain and sorrow to come. I'll go over some of my grammar mistakes, thanks for pointing them out. Overall thanks for reading and reviewing!!

Reviewer: h3art0f1nk
Date: 11/09/06 17:49
Chapter: The Funeral

Oh, my goodness, when are you going to update!?! YOU MUST UPDATE! This story is way too good to be left... unupdated!

Author's Response: I just did!! *marvels at self* thanks!!

Reviewer: HM909
Date: 11/05/06 12:38
Chapter: The Funeral

Now that is a book for the shelf. I love it. My Aunt died recently and that is exactly how you feel. I hope you will reply to this.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, and I'm so sorry about your aunt. I hope you feel better soon :-)

You must login (register) to review.
Information
Find out everything you need to know about the site right here.


We have stories and authors in this archive.

:

RSS
Choose Theme:
SOCIAL MEDIA
     
MOST RECENT
Research and Development by Northumbrian 3rd-5th Years
The Mirrorphone, the latest advance in Wizarding communications. Now, of course...
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 2 by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor 1st-2nd Years
The Weird Sisters are back for an encore. Ten more tracks from your MNFF authors.
on this side of heaven by Nagini Riddle 1st-2nd Years
Ariana Dumbledore is struck by a stray curse, and she suddenly finds herself...
FEATURED
Oread, Walking by Seren
Cedric was just as odd as Hermione, because he liked to walk. Cedric/Hermione
The Effect of Gamma Rays on Two Terrifically Trapped Gryffindors. by Fenixaze 3rd-5th Years
From the "Stuck where for the weekend?" Challenge on Portkey.org ... Our two...
Drunk on Him by armagod679 Professors
For me, he was an obsession, a burning obsession, one that I could never let...
A Broken Hallelujah by epiphany212 Professors
You have always loved the chase. The pursuit of Quaffles and dragons have carried...
In the Hufflepuff Way by 1000timesingoldenink 3rd-5th Years
Did anybody really appreciate Hannah's mum?Because Mrs. Abbott was a heroine...
And Now... by Oregonian 3rd-5th Years
Moments after the death of Voldemort, Harry gazes at the corpse of the Dark...
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 1 by minnabird 1st-2nd Years
Welcome back to another rousing round of rambunctious rock!However, a new act...
CATEGORIES