insecurity if you are out there, pleeeease update
Author's Response: I did do about a fortnight ago, honey ;-)
Lucius is definately showing his human side (not for good reasons but reasons none the less) as for Hermione I just ope she knows what to do should a war rise up.
Well, she's in the lions den now.
I don't know if Hermione is thinking at all but she better start soon if she wants to get out. (I highly doubt it)
This is getting a little too frisky for my taste but I'm hooked on the story.
This is going to get very interesting.
The beginning was a little sad but it kind of got better. Keep writing.
I absolutely love your writing!! I started with Lacrima Serpentis and now have decided to follow along in Warmth. Hopefully youll come up with other stories like these.
i dont think lucius would go for hermionie but a very well written chapter cant wait to read the rest
well i have to say this story is really not impressive at all. lucuis is such a sexy character but gets totally ruined! he is way to smart to go after a 17 year old!
Author's Response: Hermione was 18 - I outright refuse to write such a story with Hermione any younger than I am currently - and Lucius isn't a 'sexy character'. He's far from that. If you think that, you've misread both the books and my fanfic. May I suggest a re-read? Laura xxx
I enjoy this fic very much. I love Lucius. I can't help it, I'm mental. But I've looked everywhere for a Lucius/ anybody fic and there are very few. This one is one of my favorites. Please continue.
woah that was a little scary, but i felt it was quite intruiging
Damn, I think that's why half of us review -smiles meekly- Great job.
Author's Response: LOL! Thank you very much
Awesome! i would finish the other stories now, but i have school. that was the best chapter
awesome! i cant wait to read the rest of it!
Author's Response: Next chapter is coming soon! Thank you!
I thought that this was a great start. I liked how you slipped in how Hermione thought a simple "Alohomora" wouldn't work but it did. The promise was a nice touch. I loved the cliffhanger.
Author's Response: I am glad you liked it. Don't go quiet on me... let me know what you think to the next few chapters. *giggles* Thank you for the review
Hello! Back again! Right - this was a chapter of two halves for me. The first I found rather too introspective, if I'm honest. There were some extremely weighty paragraphs and whilst it was all beautifully written (because your writing is wonderful) you were in danger of losing me -- purely because all those words grouped together looked extremely daunting. (*Confesses to being very lightweight reader*) Ah ha! The second half. Now, that was another matter. Very well done. Nice description, very sensual. This story has a kind of gothic feel to it and I almost think that Hermione's language sometimes slips into that genre. (Not necessarily a bad thing.) I do still have a problem understanding why Hermione is involving herself with Lucius (and that's most likely my problem!), but that aside, you really have done an terrific job with what I would say must be one of the most difficult pairings. Very good stuff.
Author's Response: Ali! Where have you been? Well, I talked to you on IM earlier for the first time in like forever. Adults are simply too busy.
Thank you for this wonderful and extremely helpful review. Never let it be said that the longer reviews are the better ones... this reviews made me think about my writing and consider whether or not I am over doing it with long-winded paragraphs and strenuous vocab.
Gothic is a good genre. I like you so much for saying that this is gothic. I've been trying to create a dark atmosphere with this fic without it being angsty, like Lacrima, and so you've put my mind at ease with that aspect.
Thank you, once again, and I hope to speak to you soon (a.k.a prod you whether you want me to or not!)
please update sooner!!!!! i like this very much!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you. Sorry, it has been a terribly long time. Blame Lacrima's very impatient readers *glares at them* Bridget says she's 'emptying her inbox today' which means my story should be here sometime soon... hopefully... It will be in queue tomorrow, methinks.
*runs in stage left with review taking heaving breaths* I’m here! I’m here!
Sorry it took me so long to get back to this one, I’ve had other stories to review and school and work…I mean really what a nuisance. Anyway, I love this chapter and I’m going to go through and tell you why.
First off, I was really happy to get out of that house, as I’m sure Hermione was too (though at the same time maybe not). It was nice to see a bit of the countryside and ride in a Malfoy carriage. A change of scenery is definitely what the reader needs at this point.
Second, Hermione was still in character, you are a genius. The way you make her know she is doing something “wrong” yet make her feel like she is doing something right is incredible. She is the perfect eighteen-year-old teenage girl, because honestly, being that age, I would be the exact same way. No one has really been allowed to love her, and now that someone does, she is swept off of her feet (and no, Ron’s clumsy attempts to take off a bra are not romantic) and doesn’t want to go back to regular life. It is so perfect; her heart for once is finally winning over her head, because Lucius knows the keys to unlock such a feeling and desire. Hermione was flawless.
Lucius on the other hand, didn’t always do it for me this chapter; I was kind of confused where you were going with him. I was pretty sure that you wanted to keep him as “distant as possible” meaning that this is all still ploy to him…he isn’t actually falling in love with her yet. You did address this at the beginning and the end of the chapter, but in the middle it seemed like he was getting a little mushy…and no one likes a mushy!Lucius. It kind of threw for a loop, but you saved him in the end with his cold, calculated thoughts of doom and destruction. Just be careful…don’t scare me like that! :)
Quotes with commentary:
He needs to widen his spectrum of colours, does Lucius
That sentence really didn’t make sense to me; read that out loud, it doesn’t sound right. But it was hilarious nonetheless, I was thinking the same thing about the green, I was glad Hermione noticed it because I was thinking, “What is his obsession with green.” (*is a green fanatic too though*)
Lucius stared at her with mild horror as she referred to her best friend being targeted as the kill.
*Ashley’s jaw also dropped in horror* Though I was a little comforted by her explanation.
Yet, she couldn’t see the logic clearly because it was too obscured by her emotions.
This is wonderful proof about how great you are with Hermione, it’s beautiful!
Alright that is all for now, I loved this chapter, I’m looking forward to Snape and Lucius *grins*. You have great places to take this, bring me that horizon!
Author's Response: Eeeek. I've kind of left it a long time before responding. Silly, silly Laura.
Firstly, well done on the SPEW award thingy, you truly deserve it with these reviews!!!! Thank you for another lovely, SPEW-worthy review! You really do keep me going with this story...
First off, thanks for telling me that we needed a change in scenary. I was tempted to end it at the 'morning after' bit and mark the story as completed... but I didn't... it's going to carry on and we're not going to be in Malfoy Manor anymore, well not for a long time anyway. I needed a change of scenary as well, and Hermione was crying out for one. She certainly needed some fresh air to sort out her thoughts.
I can't beleive you see Hermione's character as flawless. Thank you! I guess it proves that if you try hard enough you will succeed. She can be awkward, but I'm glad I've made her much closer to canon here than I have Lacrima. Lucius was a tricky one - I didn't want him to be mushy but I had to play two sides of him. I couldn't have him being cold and distant to Hermione, because that risks her finding out that it is all a ploy, whilst at the same time I had to make him be something. Eeeek. I'll go and read back on it. It was a difficult spot... And I hope he's back on full form in next chappie.
I will take another quick look on those two sentences you pointed out. I am crap at cracking jokes..o they can be very random. And hmmm, maybe Hermione wouldn't speak of her friend in that way, although she was trying to find a way of best communicating to a Death Eater about a D.E's ways.
Thanks again. I'm such a rambler in my responses, aren't I?