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Name: koolio_jollymints (Anonymous) · Date: 09/15/07 12:02 · For: No Happy Endings Here
Ahhhhhh!!!!!! This is one of the best James/Lily stories ever!!!!!! Oh, my goodness! It is so unbelievably good! Awsome job!!!

Name: i_hEART_jAMESpOTTER (Signed) · Date: 09/10/07 2:57 · For: No Happy Endings Here
no ahppy ending? what aboutb the fact harry grows up, sees his parents with the resurection stone, defeats voldemort, marries ginny,has kids of his own? not happy...... mhm yep sure. but other than the last line, i loved it, Gj.

Name: liveonluna (Signed) · Date: 08/25/07 21:07 · For: No Happy Endings Here
*sob* such a sad ending. but i loved this story! its just so amazing. keep the great work up! =D

Name: liveonluna (Signed) · Date: 08/25/07 21:06 · For: No Happy Endings Here
*sob* such a sad ending. but i loved this story! its just so amazing. keep the great work up!

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/24/07 0:17 · For: Separated from Some, Reunited with Others
Okay, my latest review may sound harsh, but honestly, it's a suggestion in a completely constructive way. It comes from the Evil Overlord's list, and it's vital to making Evil Overlord's actually be Evil Overlord's.

# I will not imprison members of the same party in the same cell block, let alone the same cell. If they are important prisoners, I will keep the only key to the cell door on my person instead of handing out copies to every bottom-rung guard in the prison.

There are definitely ways to get away with putting prisoners in the same room, but it doesn't seem like there's a reason for putting them all in the same place. Is there only one cell? Maybe I'm unclear on the layout of the house.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/24/07 0:09 · For: Meetings of the Damned
“You will also become my personal whore, and will share my bed. Willingly or not.”

I find it hard to believe that Voldermort would want a "Mudblood." I think he would find it defiling himself to sleep with one, especially since he might create half-blood offspring, which he works against. Just a thought.

FYI - I want you to know I only review because I care.... I promise it's all in the spirit of being constructive.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/24/07 0:05 · For: Taken Hostage
“We must keep her alive. Barely. For now. We do not want to kill her yet. Dumbledore and Potter have to see her, hanging onto life by a thread, first.”

I can't remember how this plays into it, but I remember thinking he was going to make an example of her in Hogsmeade of something. I think your fic was good, but it suffered slightly from Voldermort not having a comprehensive plan going on behind the scenes. It's hard to find him an evil mastermind in this fic.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/24/07 0:01 · For: Shifted Winds, Turned Sails: A Changed Direction
The first time I read this, I think you missed a golden opportunity to make the bra enchanted with some sort of Charm that brought out insecurity or convinced the man holding it that James had slept with Fanning. I don't think Voldermort would want something more fullproof to get her out of the castle, and enchantment seems to be the way to secure it. Also, this is a magical community. It seems people would turn to magic first. Finally, I think it would make Lily a more complex character who didn't just jump to conclusions. Just a few thoughts.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/22/07 18:35 · For: Excrutio Venenum
This is a cool idea, but it's a little unconvincing Kimmy would break the Imperious curse considering Barty Crouch, an even more powerful wizard - actually both of them, had trouble breaking it. Maybe there's another way they could have found out how she got slipped the potion.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/22/07 18:32 · For: Closed Door, Open Window
Yeah, this is sweet, but it feels like you need some more chapters in-between everything. I don't really feel like you go on the journey with Lily and James. You don't really believe they're friends. It just seems incomprehensible for them to put that much bad blood behind them and then suddenly be in love.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/22/07 18:26 · For: A Very Merry Christmas
I remember reading this fic before, and this seems to be where the fic went astray. Harry was the first person to survive the killing curse. In book one they even talk about when Voldermort wanted to kill someone they pretty much ended up dead. It's also hard to believe that Lily could get away by hurting him physically.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/22/07 18:18 · For: Charlie's Demeanor
It's hard to believe that James liked her when he's so horrible to her. It's also hard to believe that Lily's completely forgotten about it and over it at this point.

Name: Charisma_tn (Signed) · Date: 08/22/07 18:13 · For: Marauders Tell All
I like this fic, but it feels like its too extreme too fast. Potter's really horrible to her, and it's hard to believe he'd hurt her all those times if he cared about her. Then it feels that they transition too quickly to being friends. It feels like it needs a more gradual shift or something. Sometimes, it feels like people overreact, like when Charlie and Lily yell monologues at each other.

Name: Tweak (Signed) · Date: 08/05/07 5:54 · For: No Happy Endings Here
Great story. It's so sad at the end, though, isn't it? But it was funny, too. My favorite part was where they said that a specialist from the Ministry came to Hogwarts to interrogate the Giant Squid. I also loved the part where James proposed and then took it back, as well... anyway, wonderful job! Keep writing?

Name: Angela_Prongs (Signed) · Date: 07/30/07 22:39 · For: Prelude: Nasty Beginnings

I started reading this story at midnight this morning and finished at 5am. I just couldn't stop. I've been putting off reviewing all day because I just don't know what to say. (Plus I fell asleep O.o)

I'm still having trouble with what to say. This is amazing. Beautiful. If only they made words to describe.... I just cannot tell you.... I have never read anything like this in my life. It's amazing and beautiful. Tears, laughter, suspense, everything.

And I really love how after they've gotten together and the words "dating" "boyfriend" and "girlfriend" can be used, you didn't forget the passion and the love. I've read stories where they have all that love and romance and passion and once they can be described by the words above, they're just like every other couple. But you didn't do that. And that is one of the best things about this story. You didn't forget.

I'm still having trouble describing, but now that most of it's out, I feel better. I've been thinking about this story all day. Just thinking and replaying it in my head and tingling. This is just so amazing and beautiful. The best words: Amazing, beautiful, majestic.

Sure, the ending didn't exactly thrill me, but that was the ending. It's what happened. And I loved it. I loved the ending. Loved it.

So congratulations times a million. You really deserve it.

Author's Response: That has to be one of the best reviews I've ever received. I'm glad you really liked my story. It means a lot to me. And though you couldn't put your commendations into the right words in your mind, they sounded perfect to me. Thank you! :)

Name: thesmart1 (Signed) · Date: 07/12/07 5:39 · For: No Happy Endings Here
That is what I absolutely hate and love about all the lily/james fanfiction. It always ends miserable- and it always makes me cry. Well, Ms. or Mr. grape_2010, you did a fabulous job at this. I liked it so much- and you managed to get a good storyline without succumibng to my predictions......hehe......great job, anyhow! Every time i read a lily/james fic, I'm inspired to write one. Now really, I have to say, I think I finally have the motivation to actually write it. Well.....so be it! Great job, I knew you were good.

Author's Response: I know what you mean about being disappointed with the way it ends. It was tempting to make up my own ending, but I just couldn't. Some readers don't like the way I ended it, but that's the way it was. I'm very glad you liked my story, and I appreciate the long reviews. Thanx!

Name: thesmart1 (Signed) · Date: 07/12/07 5:03 · For: Separated from Some, Reunited with Others
Lovin' it! I suddenly like it a lot all of the abrupt sudden! Pete's a rat! Charlie and Sirius sadly won't last! Yaay! The mirror might just work! Now this next chap: lemme guess, james and lily are torn apart, watch the other get tortured, or the mirror is smashed and its just luck they all escape. OR: The mirror thingy works, they cook up a plan, dumbledore and co. help and everyone gets away happy. :) I'm soo good eh? =)

Name: thesmart1 (Signed) · Date: 07/12/07 4:43 · For: Taken Hostage
ooh, angsty. Hm. Well, for some wacked up reason, I always hate it when things work out. I mean, Lily totally blew off James for 'cheating' and I think James is....in need of it. I dunno, but she shouldn't just take him back. Actually, I'm still stinging from the fanfic 'Someone to Watch Over Me, by MagEd' because...well, read it yourself then. But really, James probably can and will dump her- Lily is sort of just his challenge, hm? I hope they straighten it out and Heroic Snape makes an appearance. I'm growing attacged to your story, grape_2010! Good job!

Name: thesmart1 (Signed) · Date: 07/12/07 4:31 · For: Shifted Winds, Turned Sails: A Changed Direction
I'm still miffed about Lily cheating on james at severas, and now I hope that lily won't ever get back with James again. urgh, and I also hope that sirius and james will beat jessica flanning up. oh, and that lily and james won't get back together. Sadly, and far too predictably, James will come to the rescue, hold Lily in his arms, she'll take him back in a wink of the eye, and then jessica flanning will be forgotten and ignored, and no longer part of the story, and then you'll end it somehow with the birth of harry or the death of the couple. *sigh* things are far too predictable. now, if I dare hope to complicate things by adding a rescuing Severus Snape, whom betrays the Dark Lord, aids Lily in her escape, then James runs in, scowls at Sev and takes Lily back. I think I fancy that waay better. :) i like predicting.

Name: thesmart1 (Signed) · Date: 07/12/07 4:19 · For: Life Goes On
HOW-DARE-SHE!!!! HOW DARE SHE!!! HOW DARE THAT SNEAKING LITTLE M- No, I will not say it! BUT SHE DESERVES TO BE CALLED A M- ahem. THAT SNEAKING LITTLE CHEATER! HOW-DARE-SHE! She cheated James! She cheated him full on! Lily was with James, she knew it well, and then she goes and KISSES his enemy, may I add, and does it full and well! THAT FILTHY MU- No, i will NOT say it.....how COULD she do that to James?!?! She doesn't deserve such a loyal, kind guy!!! How could she! FILTHY LITTLE MUD- I refuse to say it. Darn it, I want to.....filthy little cheater....I can't believe she did that to james! *fumes* FILTHY LITTLE MUDBLOOD! ohmygosh, I said it....urgh! and I MEAN it! FULTHY LITTLE MUDBLOODY CHEATER! I hope James ditches her for it!

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