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Name: hpgirl_91 (Signed) · Date: 10/03/06 20:26 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
LOL! I loved it! It was short story but good and fluffy. Very funny, and had good pacing. Great job on this story!


Name: sxc (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 8:29 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
great story! do a seuel lol xxx


Name: sxc (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 8:29 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
great story! do a seuel lol xxx


Name: hpfan4eva (Signed) · Date: 06/18/06 16:11 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
lovely fic great ending


Name: i love prongs (Signed) · Date: 05/02/06 12:41 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
very funny and i am so glad lily and james r now lilyandjames


Name: TRYING2HARD (Signed) · Date: 04/10/06 21:36 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
that waz a very good story i really liked it - are you going to write another story?


Name: TRYING2HARD (Signed) · Date: 04/10/06 21:35 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
that waz a very good story i really liked it - are you going to write another story?


Name: james_fever (Signed) · Date: 04/05/06 13:05 · For: Denial and Detention
WONDERFUL JOB!!! I LOVE IT. caaaaaaaaan't wait for your next chapter. your in my favourites. bye


Name: HeRmYgInS (Signed) · Date: 04/05/06 8:29 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
brilliant! i love the ending! haha...great job.


Name: fishsticks (Signed) · Date: 03/07/06 11:05 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
WONDERFULLY WRITTEN! Very witty and a pleasure to read. I do hope you write more stories, I like your writing style!


Name: nenya (Anonymous) · Date: 03/02/06 14:23 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
Absolutly brillient!


Name: lily_writes (Signed) · Date: 03/01/06 20:02 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
That was hilarious! Loved the ending though.


Name: cry_of_the_augurey (Signed) · Date: 02/26/06 22:10 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
Hee-he! That chapter was great. But a sequel would be nice. 10/10


Name: Quiditch fan (Signed) · Date: 02/26/06 17:03 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
great ending, it was very original and superb...definitley write some more stories!


Name: cyber_bunny (Signed) · Date: 02/26/06 12:03 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
kewl. 8/10


Name: iluvprongsie (Signed) · Date: 02/26/06 5:58 · For: And It All Hits The Fan
tat waz awesome! using Sirius was a Gr8 idea! 10 on 10 for sure hon!


Name: GinnyThe5thMarauder (Signed) · Date: 02/22/06 18:22 · For: Water Fights and Kisses
That was really good, can't wait for more. It'll be awesome to see what James does to Sirius for kissing Lily...


Name: marauder chick 1992 (Signed) · Date: 02/21/06 20:58 · For: Denial and Detention
OMG!! i love your story! so how much trouble is Sirius gonna be in? LOL please update soon!


Name: midnight_me (Signed) · Date: 02/20/06 19:56 · For: Denial and Detention
Nice start, but a few small errors:

Professor McGonagall had actually complimented him on an essay well written (something that did not happen very often in the world of Sirius Black)

McGonagoll mentions in book three, that James and Sirius had a lot of talent in Transfiguration. Many writers make the mistake of writing Sirius as stupid or lazy, but he is actually described as being quite clever in his school days.

I thought James was a bit ooc. I don't think he would be all that irritated with Sirius just for hexing Snape, even if Sirius lost fifty points. James hated Snape, so he probably wouldn't blame Sirius for hexing him.

Nice idea having Sirius find the book with the Polyjuice Potion in the restricted section, while doing detention. Very nice idea, and not cliched at all. I thought you could've added a little more from Snape. We don't hear about him at all, even though we know he's doing the detention with Sirius.

Overall, not a bad start for a first fanfic. You'll really have something once you improve a bit. I'd suggest heading over to the forums if you haven't already. Posting questions and reading posts had helped me and many others tremendously. Good luck with this, and all future fics! 6/10


Name: cyber_bunny (Signed) · Date: 02/19/06 12:46 · For: Water Fights and Kisses
Kol. 10/10


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