Reviewer: hpgirl_91
Date: 10/03/06 20:26
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

LOL! I loved it! It was short story but good and fluffy. Very funny, and had good pacing. Great job on this story!

Reviewer: sxc
Date: 09/24/06 8:29
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

great story! do a seuel lol xxx

Reviewer: sxc
Date: 09/24/06 8:29
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

great story! do a seuel lol xxx

Reviewer: hpfan4eva
Date: 06/18/06 16:11
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

lovely fic great ending

Reviewer: i love prongs
Date: 05/02/06 12:41
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

very funny and i am so glad lily and james r now lilyandjames

Reviewer: TRYING2HARD
Date: 04/10/06 21:36
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

that waz a very good story i really liked it - are you going to write another story?

Reviewer: TRYING2HARD
Date: 04/10/06 21:35
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

that waz a very good story i really liked it - are you going to write another story?

Reviewer: james_fever
Date: 04/05/06 13:05
Chapter: Denial and Detention

WONDERFUL JOB!!! I LOVE IT. caaaaaaaaan't wait for your next chapter. your in my favourites. bye

Reviewer: HeRmYgInS
Date: 04/05/06 8:29
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

brilliant! i love the ending! haha...great job.

Reviewer: fishsticks
Date: 03/07/06 11:05
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

WONDERFULLY WRITTEN! Very witty and a pleasure to read. I do hope you write more stories, I like your writing style!

Reviewer: nenya
Date: 03/02/06 14:23
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

Absolutly brillient!

Reviewer: lily_writes
Date: 03/01/06 20:02
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

That was hilarious! Loved the ending though.

Reviewer: cry_of_the_augurey
Date: 02/26/06 22:10
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

Hee-he! That chapter was great. But a sequel would be nice. 10/10

Reviewer: Quiditch fan
Date: 02/26/06 17:03
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

great ending, it was very original and superb...definitley write some more stories!

Reviewer: cyber_bunny
Date: 02/26/06 12:03
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

kewl. 8/10

Reviewer: iluvprongsie
Date: 02/26/06 5:58
Chapter: And It All Hits The Fan

tat waz awesome! using Sirius was a Gr8 idea! 10 on 10 for sure hon!

Reviewer: GinnyThe5thMarauder
Date: 02/22/06 18:22
Chapter: Water Fights and Kisses

That was really good, can't wait for more. It'll be awesome to see what James does to Sirius for kissing Lily...

Reviewer: marauder chick 1992
Date: 02/21/06 20:58
Chapter: Denial and Detention

OMG!! i love your story! so how much trouble is Sirius gonna be in? LOL please update soon!

Reviewer: midnight_me
Date: 02/20/06 19:56
Chapter: Denial and Detention

Nice start, but a few small errors:

Professor McGonagall had actually complimented him on an essay well written (something that did not happen very often in the world of Sirius Black)

McGonagoll mentions in book three, that James and Sirius had a lot of talent in Transfiguration. Many writers make the mistake of writing Sirius as stupid or lazy, but he is actually described as being quite clever in his school days.

I thought James was a bit ooc. I don't think he would be all that irritated with Sirius just for hexing Snape, even if Sirius lost fifty points. James hated Snape, so he probably wouldn't blame Sirius for hexing him.

Nice idea having Sirius find the book with the Polyjuice Potion in the restricted section, while doing detention. Very nice idea, and not cliched at all. I thought you could've added a little more from Snape. We don't hear about him at all, even though we know he's doing the detention with Sirius.

Overall, not a bad start for a first fanfic. You'll really have something once you improve a bit. I'd suggest heading over to the forums if you haven't already. Posting questions and reading posts had helped me and many others tremendously. Good luck with this, and all future fics! 6/10

Reviewer: cyber_bunny
Date: 02/19/06 12:46
Chapter: Water Fights and Kisses

Kol. 10/10

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