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Name: hpfreak101 (Signed) · Date: 10/05/07 17:02 · For: Perfect Day
The writing wasn't tops, and i found it quite rushed. Keep writing, though!

Name: loveme (Signed) · Date: 07/30/07 7:28 · For: Perfect Day

Name: Gryffindor Lion (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 12:57 · For: Perfect Day
sound very perfact.

Name: truelight (Signed) · Date: 04/26/07 22:40 · For: Perfect Day
this is good i hope this is the way the real author seen how the par got together.

Name: hedwigandme (Signed) · Date: 11/26/06 12:48 · For: Perfect Day
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I can't wait to see what you write next!!!!!!

Name: roman_soldier (Signed) · Date: 07/09/06 18:09 · For: Perfect Day
It was cute, but short. I think you might have put the dialogue in at the beginning, instead of just describing it all. It's also hard to believe for me that she just "wakes up" one day and decides she likes the boy she's despised for six years, and then kisses him on the spot. But then, I've always been a little cynical. :-)

Name: goobersam9 (Signed) · Date: 07/01/06 19:39 · For: Perfect Day

Name: glamorgrl111 (Signed) · Date: 06/17/06 15:05 · For: Perfect Day
plzplz plz write more
- glamorgrl111
u r and amazing writer i love wour story

Name: Hpfanofmarauders (Anonymous) · Date: 06/11/06 9:12 · For: Perfect Day
AWWWWW!! You should have developed it more! Still cute, though :)!

Name: LaneTechFreshie (Signed) · Date: 06/05/06 21:21 · For: Perfect Day
That was sweet. Short, but sweet. Hehe.

Name: loonymoony8 (Signed) · Date: 11/07/05 18:21 · For: Perfect Day
Awww...that's so sweet. I like your story, I wish you would continue it. It's very good! Keep writing, you'll get better as you go along! 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks! I have no idea what I would do to continue it, honestly. I just wrote this before I went to bed one night and it actually turned out pretty descent. I'm working on another fic that got refused by mugglenet but I'm fixing it and resubmitting it soon...

Name: Dory_the_Fishie (Signed) · Date: 11/07/05 15:43 · For: Perfect Day
This is pretty good. But I do think that there is room for improvement. One thing that I thought I should point out is this: "I honestly believed he had stopped liking me, but then today happened. Then..." You have two 'thens'. You don't need both, as you are repeating yourself. I also don't think that Lily and James could have gotten together overnight. It probably took a while for Lily to warm up to him. This has the potential to be very good, maybe if you just worked on it a little more. I hope my review has not discouraged you, I only mean to be helpful.

Author's Response: Thanks, I didn't even notice the two thens. And don't worry it doesn't discourage me, it's very helpful when people point out my mistakes.

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