Reviewer: pheonixflame
Date: 12/28/06 0:20
Chapter: One-Shot

How sad!

But very well written, I think. It's just like Remus to try to find the hidden explanation. And I think you portrayed Mrs. Pettigrew's thoughts and actions very, very well. It was like reading her diary.

I especially liked the random diary entry in there. Lots of emotion, and it seems like something one would actually have found in a journal.

Very nice. :]

Reviewer: pheonixflame
Date: 12/28/06 0:17
Chapter: One-Shot

How sad!

But very well written, I think. It's just like Remus to try to find the hidden explanation. And I think you portrayed Mrs. Pettigrew's thoughts and actions very, very well. It was like reading her diary.

I especially liked the random diary entry in there. Lots of emotion, and it seems like something one would actually have found in a journal.

Very nice. :]

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 09/04/06 16:16
Chapter: One-Shot

As others have said before me, I love how the papers and the ministry are shown just the way they are: trying to get a good story and make themselves look good. It's great how bits of "the truth" are mixed in with the news article, showing the contrast of feelings - whether "right" or "wrong" doesn't really matter, just that they are human - and inhumanity (is that a word?). The interview with Peter's mother is great. I really felt sorry for her! And for Remus, at the end. He's so observant... *sigh*

Reviewer: HarryPotter is my LIFE
Date: 05/22/06 14:49
Chapter: One-Shot

I thought this was really well written, especially Remus' part at the end. It's just like him, wanting to believe that Sirius was innocent when everyone is saying otherwise. I also liked the interview with the muggle who saw what really happened. Finally, a missing moment no longer missing.

Reviewer: Hero London
Date: 03/10/06 15:32
Chapter: One-Shot

Compelling...but sad! Sirius is one of my favorite characters, and Wormtail one that I love to loathe. Very well written, the personalities and characterization are right on target. I've gained greater connection to the characters! Thank you!

Reviewer: Lovely Fatima
Date: 01/24/06 19:44
Chapter: One-Shot

I decided to read your fic after clicking on your banner. I have to say that I'm glad that I did. While I have a tendency to prefer longer, chaptered fiction, this one-shot was extremely enjoyable to read. In many ways, the manipulative nature of those in power (i.e. the Ministry and the reporters) reminded me of characters from Arthur Miller's play, The Crucible. I felt the same disturbed frusration as when I read the 'crying out' scene.

I felt your use of a variety of first-hand sources helped illustrate the propagandist nature of the news articles quite well. The strongest contrast, I believe, came from the Muggle testimony. Even though the man clearly saw Pettigrew cast his spell, the desire of the Ministry and others to hold Sirius up as a scapegoat prevailed.

There were a few nitpicky things I saw: mixups between "there" and "their", but no truly egregious errors. Perhaps my favourite part of the story was the silent commentary running through Mrs. Pettigrew's mind during the interview. This created a good deal of depth in a character who is primarily two-dimensional (or altogether non-existant) in most Marauder-era fics. Overall, I must say I'm happy to have taken a chance on your fic. Well done. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed my fic. I always mix up 'their' and 'there', it's so annoying. I know what the difference is, but when I'm typing fast, I just forget everything. I'll just go and have a look at that now.

Reviewer: Antares Corvus
Date: 12/28/05 19:28
Chapter: One-Shot

This was fascinating. I truly enjoyed the way it had the truth and the media propaganda combined. Prudence Pettigrew was interesting, a likable and yet ignorant woman. I also loved that you seemed to characterize Lupin so well, being torn, thinking it had to be the truth, but knowing that it wasn't like Sirius at all. I thought it was an amazingly well-written piece. A much deserved ten.

Author's Response: I'm really, really surprised that I'm getting these lovely reviews. The only other fanfic that I've written was one of those awful, rambling humours fics where everyone is OOC. It makes me cringe at the thought of it! You have all inspired me to write some sort of sequel, but the idea hasn't really formed properly yet, so watch this space! (and thanks again!)

Reviewer: MithrilQuill
Date: 11/12/05 23:48
Chapter: One-Shot

This was, frankly, one of the most well-written fanfictions I've read...honestly. I loved the way you did the paper excerpts, esppecially how you added in the part about it being foolish, like they saw it as their duty to warn people that this was by no means what they were supposed to do....

Also I just loved the interview with the muggle. I even wish it lasted longer, because I found the way he was so clueless, but gave the more insightfull, HP fanatic readers alot of information...the last part where they ended the conversation with him when he said it was Peter who did the wand waving was really funny, in an ironic sort of way, "the charms have addled his brain you can obliviate him now"....very nice....

That brings up the whole reporter thing. I really think you characterized the reporters very well. The insensitivity was quite realistic, and I liked the way Mrs. Pettigrew was characterized also. This really isn't what I expected her to be like, and she was a bit too clueless about Peters betrayal, but it's a valid characterization and you did it so well I can't criticise it....

The part with the diary in the middle had me wondering though. Who was it? Was it Remus? I thought so, but the whole line of thinking and the whole way he spoke really was quite different, so I'm still wondering...McGonagall? Sorry if it's obvious, maybe I'm just a bit sleepy....

Anyways it was a wonderfully-written fic, and I look forward to reading more of your work....sorry about the long rant, I just felt the fic deserved it.....=)... Would you consider picking it up and continuing from say, Lupin and McGonagalls Points of View to show later events? I think it would be a fun read from my part.....Anyways I'll really stop now....

Author's Response: Thanks ever so much for your wonderful review. I could pretend that I knew exactly who wrote the diary but then I would be lying. There are obviously many wizards we don't know, and he was one of them. I'm pretty sure it was male and wasn't Remus though.

Reviewer: joanna
Date: 11/11/05 14:21
Chapter: One-Shot

Hi! I've read it and I like it. You are very talented, I liket especially the way you write the newspaper clippings. They are very good.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot joanna. The newpaper clipping were the bits I wasn't so sure about, so I'm glad you liked them I wouldn't exactly say I was talented, but I'm glad my humble attempts and fanfiction pleased you. P.S. Thanks for the lovely banner.

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