what a male chuvinism accepting story! girls are damsels and men go out to fight!
that was....weird, i dont know if i missed the point to it or something?
but i suggest rereading it and editing it, there are lots of spelling mistakes, missed words and missing commas
that was....weird, i dont know if i missed the point to it or something?
but i suggest rereading it and editing it, there are lots of spelling mistakes, missed words and missing commas
Its good, but you could have expanded more on the conversaitions and stuff.
Okay, it seems kind of incomplete. Like, that seemed as if it should be one chapter of a story, not an entire one-shot. Hopefully the sequel will make that up.
It was good, but it would have been better if there was more to it, like more chapters. I didn't like how it just kind of ended. Please add me to it cause I like the story line and the direction that it's going in.
I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!IT WAS EXTRONADRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It was kinda short I think that it should either have a seaquel or you should add to it.
dumm deee dumm... going to go check on your other stories! toodles!
what an un eventful story! good plot line though, I would have like to see you carry it on.
Author's Response: It's carried on in "Hermione's Trials", which is posted on fan fiction. net
Cute. Can't wiat for the next one, you are writing a sequel, right? hopefully...=) very cute! i love it. keep going!!!
Author's Response: i have a sequel written, but mugglenetfanfiction won't accept it =(....so check it out on harrypotterfanfiction.com....same penname. ~Tina101
I really like it. I agree with the others, you could go far with this one. Question, Is there more to the necklace than meets the eye? Can't wait for more. :)
Author's Response: No, the necklace is just a necklace....a gift. Hermione's Trials is a sequel to this one, so it does go farther.
Yeah, I agree. You really could go far with this one. I am glad there is going to be a sequel. I can't wait to read it! 10/10!
this is really gd! i know its a 1 shot but you could take this further! 10! lisa xxx
Author's Response: "Hermione's Trials" is the sequel to this one, trust me....it goes farther. I'm thinking of adding an epilogue to Hermione's Trials....my beta doesn't know that yet...lol
