Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 11/29/07 13:35
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

What if's are always fascinating, this one more than most. I wonder, if Neville had been the one cursed by the scar, would he have done as well as Harry, better than him, or would he have failed? Guess we'll never know. Would Harry's parents not have been tortured into madness? And who betrayed Frank and Alice, if anyone? Maybe Voldemort, believing there to be a traitor in his ranks laid a false trail so Lily and James were sent into hiding and the path to the Longbottoms was left wide open. Sorry, going off at a tangent, but this fic really set the cogs turning. I love fics that make me think.

Reviewer: jenny b
Date: 10/13/07 9:48
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

This was really good!

I love how you've made Neville lose his innocence with the burden that's been placed upon him. Neville is usually portrayed in fanfiction as a bit of an idiot, which I think is mostly due to the characterisation of him in the movies.

You've captured Neville's feelings about Harry really well, because I think even in canon he really seems to respect him and look up to him.

Harry's opinion on how he is very lucky is very IC for Harry, because as Dumbledore always says to him, he is one in a million to not be tempted by anything and to stay on the right path.

Finally, I like how Neville's grandmother is so proud of him. It reminded me of when they were on the train in HBP, how Neville says she'd do anything to have Harry as a grandson. You really did it justice.

An excellent story!

Reviewer: R_Ravenclaw
Date: 05/16/07 16:50
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Wow, very powerful. Good job.

Reviewer: nalaniekeala
Date: 02/08/07 12:03
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Good story! I love reading stories about it being Neville and not Harry that was the Chosen One.

Reviewer: FuNnYcIdE
Date: 01/25/07 14:22
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Quite amazing! Exceddingly well-written and very sympathetic. I'm glad you didn't make Neville completely and utterly pathetic like so many writers choose to do as well!!

Keep On Writing;)

Reviewer: Xxdeath_eaterxX
Date: 11/20/06 23:00
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Im not usually into alternite universe, but that was really cool. and weird. WOOOOT!

Reviewer: sinfonia_concertante
Date: 08/17/06 15:43
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Very well written. Interesting to see things from Neville's perspective had he been "The Chosen One."

Reviewer: missmarauder2
Date: 08/01/06 23:33
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

very good story, i like how you made it so that harry still doesn't take things for granted, as he doesn't now. this is a very good story and a very good look on how neville longbottom AND harry potter's lives could be if their roles were switched. it really made me think about voldemort's choice and realize that harry is THE one, he is the boy who lived. he was the right choice. because even now, i still find it hard to imagine neville being the boy who lived; surprisingly, i never even ask whatif, and i'm still not. hell, to tell you the truth i don't care. but this is a very good possible oppisite universe. GOOD JOB!

Author's Response: Thanks very much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Sweetpal
Date: 08/01/06 1:41
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

I like this very much but I was wondering if you could maybe write in a good long story people like and if it's they should read and review more I know I would!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks but I think I'll just keep this as a one-shot... I never was one much for longer stories.

Reviewer: Sweetpal
Date: 08/01/06 1:37
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Not to be rude or anything but I do hate short stories maybe you should make Neville the boy who live into a good long story maybe then people will actully Read and Review more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I am turly sorry for saying it but I had to.

Reviewer: Emily_the_Poet
Date: 07/07/06 18:50
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Interesting twist on an old tale. Neville hits the what could have beens right on the nose. I really enjoyed it, but it didn't really sound like Neville. It semed to elegant to be Neville.

Author's Response: Yeah, I thought Neville would change as a person if his life took such a dramatic twist. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 04/29/06 13:59
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

wow. i personally think that AUs where neville was the "chosen one" are really cool and this one tops all the others i've read so far!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's really sweet. I've always been facinated with Neville, so I thought getting into his mind would be fun, and I was right! I never liked Harry, so that's why I decided to make Neville the "Chosen one".

Reviewer: HJaneWeasley
Date: 01/24/06 11:08
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Two thumbs up...the punctuation and all can be thrust aside....the feelings and emotions are OOC for Neville the way JKR wrote about him, but if he was the Chosen One, then all of his circumstances and views on life would have changed. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review! =] 'Tis appreciated.

Reviewer: Tia Blu
Date: 11/10/05 19:35
Chapter: Restless Thoughts Frolick Through My Head

Wow, that was really well written and very well thought out. Neville's feelings are very real, and you portray them with the lack of innocence that Harry usually has. You also manage to tie the whole thing losely to the thought that it really could have been Neville, and how different- should that one choice Voldemort made be different- both he and Harry's lives would be. It is both dark and angsty and innocent and hopeful. A very nice combination You missed a little capitalization, but all else looks well grammatically to my eyes. I'll just stop rambling now. ;D 10/10

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! You're too kind. I actually wrote this on spur of the moment... the idea came to me late at night a week before it was written and it was running through my mind constantly. I kept telling myself "I can't pull that one off properly and have it anywhere close to decent, who am I kidding?" But then I did write it, the last few hours before it was due. And about the capitalization... my bad, I'm a bit of a procrastinator. I didn't have time to get a Beta. I thank you very much, you've brightened my day!

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