Ron and Hermione are my favorite ship, it's so silly how they argue and can't admit their feelings. *sigh* it makes them so much more interesting.... And you did a lovely job, your writing style is easy and charming, much like JKR's, and the story is so perfectly plausible for their characters! I do enjoy reading your works, write more please!
Oh my gosh! That was the sweetest story. Fantastically written, I am a true fan of Ron and Hermione. How many of us have gone through what those two are going through. Being a teen we are shadowed by our own insecurities and fears of rejection. So we bottle it up, these two remind me of a time in my own teen years and I smile sadly at the memories. Great job.
it was really good. i was reading the other reviews and you said on one that you might do a sequal. Please do!
Dear dollie, This is Ash and I personally talk about your story all the time with my other little friends who are on the same shipping as me. My dear friend whom I share this accound with cannt stand Ron and Hermione together....she like Draco better...But she loves this story for I made her sit and read it....now all we have to do is get your silly little updating issues out of the way..then I will die knowing your story was finished with a wonderful ending (it already is wonderful..but I would love more to feed off of.) -AshxTabulous
Can you feel the tension? I can. Anyway this story is sooo good please update soon!! I love it. I cant bear to give it anything else than ten out of ten!
Author's Response: That's the end I'm afraid. There is no more. Might be a sequel if the muse is nice to me!
As Ron would say...'Bloody brilliant!'
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
I have read quite a few R/H fan fics and this story would have to be in my top 3! Keep up the good work, looking forward to any more that you write.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Now I'm just waiting for the pile of boxes from moving to magically disappear and give me some time to write!
this is one of the first fan fics i ever read cause a friend suggested it and it was amazing.....i loved it plz finish it soon
Author's Response: I'm sorry, but that's all for that story for now. I'm glad you liked it, and I hope it has encouraged you to read and review some more - there's some great stuff out there. I am considering a sequel which includes the pair, but I have just moved house and we're still up to our ears in boxes. You'll see it here first.
That was a lovely story. As your other reviewers have said, really nicely paced and not forced. It was a very touching insight into Hermioe’s feelings, and you also succeeded in giving us an understanding of how Ron was feeling, even though this was firmly in Hr’s POV. I also enjoyed the way that you managed to keep the humour and banter between them, as after all, that is what makes them Ron and Hermione, isn't it!?
I have a tiny bit of concrit for you -- hope you don't mind! Occasionally you have very long paragraphs that seem slightly daunting. To give you an example, I think the following would look slightly more inviting and get your meaning over a little better, if you spaced it out a little bit, maybe as follows:
“Boring old Hermione!” Ron said incredulously. “Hermione, you’re my best friend. Yes, I spent a lot of last year with Lavender, but I couldn’t talk to her like I can talk to you. Like I told Harry at Christmas, it was mainly snogging, and that gets boring after a while. I love the fact that I can talk to you. You’re smart and kind and you stick up for what you think is right. Sure we can argue like crazy and you nag me and Harry silly, but that’s only because you want what’s best for us. I’d rather have one of you than a thousand Lavenders.”
Hermione gasped. He did like her.”
“I was really hurt when you said I could only save goals because of Harry’s luck potion[,” Ron continued. “]But I over-reacted. See, what you didn’t know was that Harry and I had caught Ginny and Dean kissing one night and I over-reacted. Ginny was furious with me. She accused me of a lot of things, including the fact that I was the only one of us that hadn’t kissed anyone, because Harry had kissed Cho and you’d kissed Krum.” He paused. “That wound me up, the thought that you’d kissed Krum. Then you made that comment about my goal-saving and I just thought, she obviously doesn’t care for me, I’ll find someone who does.”
This section came across well, because it gave the impression of Ron gabbling out his explanation – almost as if once he started, he couldn’t stop. (Your dialogue is really well done, for both of them.) However, without the break in the middle, Hermione’s reaction seemed a little bit lost. Also, you can consider using italics to emphasis words (sparingly!) like this :
Hermione gasped. He did like her.”
Please forgive this over long review – once I start, I can’t seem to stop. An enjoyable story with a very ‘canon’ Ron and Hermione. Thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks for this review; it's so nice when people have really thought about what they want to say. I have amended the part as suggested. It was originally with separate paragraphs when I wrote it. I can only think that I missed it when formatting it for submission. I have added the italics - thanks for the suggestion!
Author's Response: oops - haven't had a chance to amend the story as suggested due to moving house just before christmas, but I will do it, I promise!
Author's Response: Have finally managed to amend my story as per your kind suggestions - sorry it took so long!
Hey I agree with everyone else that this story was really excellent. Great job on the grammar haha. And I also loved the way you didn't rush them, like someone else said...I don't think Ron and Hermione "love" each other romantically yet. They will work themselves up to that point, but it's not there right now...But yeah, great on the awkwardness. I did sort of feel that when they got to talking about the events of the past year, the dialogue wasn't flowing as well as before, but the entire story was excellent other than that one section. I look forward to the H/G sequel!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review; I'm glad you liked the story. I figured they'd taken 6 years to get together, they wouldn't be rushing anywhere anytime soon. I thought that they would be fairly awkward talking about what had happened during year 6; it was a point where it could all so easily have gone wrong for them and they could have ended up having another blazing row about it. As for the sequel, it depends on the HP muse dropping ideas on my head!
I still can't believe this story ending. It flowed so perfectly that I could barely find a fault at all! You left me feeling like I could jump for joy at these two. Thanks for a 'bloody brilliant' story, and if you could, please write a sequel! Perfect ten! -Kate Mari
Author's Response: It's so nice to hear that people like this story. I loved writing it and would love to write a sequel. Just depends on whether the ideas drop in or not!
Awesome story! Keep it up!
Author's Response: I'm afraid that's the end of the story, boys and girls. But I'm glad you like it. If inspiration stikes there will be a sequel, but I'm not forcing it; there's nothing worse than a forced story, or one that meanders along and doesn't really know where it's going.
I love Ginny! She is pushy at the right moments! And yay! Ron and Hermione kissing! Very good chapter!
Author's Response: I think she was rather exasperated with both of them and just wanted them to stop dancing around each other! I'm so glad you liked my little story.
hey this is absolutely bloody brilliant. of course you're on of my fav writer here! update soon..kk? ;p
Author's Response: Thanks for making me a favourite author. Will I still be a favourite author if I say that that was the last chapter and I hadn't planned any more? I hope so >;o). Lots of readers on the other site that has this story wanted more so I may write a sequel if the ideas work.
I am very new to both this site AND fanfic, but kudos on this story! It's very well-written, and most importantly, seems to hold true to the characters. Would totally read more chapters that are forthcoming
Author's Response: This was originally written to finish at the point where Ron and Hermione got together, but so many people who have read it seem to want more, I might just have to do a sequel!
I so agree with magic lover........absolutely BLOODY BRILLIANT. So funny and so original. (I'm soooooooo glad there wasn't another cliffhanger) I've added your story to my favourites, by the way. Please, please, please write some more. LOVE your stories xxxxxxxxxxx
Author's Response: Aawww, didn't you like my cliffhanger? I wasn't planning to write any more, but if you're really, really nice....
Hey... now THAT was bloody brilliant!! i love the story.. but its not over yet right?!?...
Author's Response: 'Fraid it is for now. I may write a sequel if you're very, very good >:o)
That last chapter has to be by far my favorite out of all. I love how you didn't rush their conversation and make it all "Oh I love you Ron", "I love you Hermione" like I've seen some authors do. It was just a perfect blend of sweet and awkwardness(I think the person below me said the same). I have one question though..are you going to continue on with this fanfic? I'd love it if you did!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the story. This chapter was my favourite as well, closely followed by chapter 4. I figured they took their time getting round to it, so they wouldn't rush it at the end *lol* The story ended here, but there might be a sequel once I've moved house.
I've been following this story and I really love it. The pacing is really nice and I like the fact that you show a more open Ron and a more vulnerable Hermione. Their talk was well done with just enough awkwardness. I know you were talking about doing further chapters to include Harry and Ginny, but I think this is a perfect spot to end this story and then maybe pick up with the other two in a sequel. The way you ended it just seems very organic and pushing the story further just seems like it might be forcing. Just my humble opinion. Whatever you decide to do, I'll be keeping tabs :)
Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked the story. I really enjoyed writing it. I think I'd decided to stop this story here as it just felt right, and just do a sequel. It seemed to come to a natural end when I wrote it.
Oooh, cute story! I read these four chapters in one sitting just now. 'Twas neat. That's nice to hear Ron actually talking about his feelings. It doesn't usually seem to to happen too much in the books, but I suppose it's plausable after all that stuff in the HBP. Poor Ginny though! Are we going to find out anything more about Ginny's issues? Or Harry's? Or is it just going to sorta end next chapter with just Ron and Hermione? Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response: The next chapter was originally going to be the last, but so many people on the other site I posted it on wanted more I will probably do so and bring in Harry and Ginny more. Can't do it at the moment as I am in the middle of moving out of one house to stay with some friends for a couple of weeks before moving into my brand new house, but I will try to do some more soon. Glad you have enjoyed it so far and hope that the next chapter is validated soon, so that you don't have to wait too long to read the next chapter. >=o)