Reviewer: elle_EVANS
Date: 07/27/06 22:05
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

i love ur writing style and this story is excellent!!
is it lucious malfoy? hehe

keep it coming!

Reviewer: LRS078
Date: 07/19/06 6:22
Chapter: Prologue

"Falcor" from the movie "NeverEnding Story" right?

Reviewer: funky_feline
Date: 07/18/06 14:46
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

i think your fanfic is amazing and it still leaves the audience wanting more even when you think you've sussed it out theres somethins else too.
i like the story alot it takes away some of my craving for book 7.

my only criticism is whens the next one going to be! :) hope its soonish

Reviewer: DumbleFanNo1
Date: 07/18/06 10:03
Chapter: Chapter 3 - A Legacy Unknown

Good chapter, I was afraid that it wasn't going anywhere until the end.

Reviewer: DumbleFanNo1
Date: 07/17/06 20:23
Chapter: Prologue

liked the chapter. bit short, but good all the same.

Reviewer: Poppy
Date: 07/13/06 12:07
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

Great Story!! - It is an incredibly unique spin on JK's world. I can't wait to see more.

Reviewer: Fishermage91
Date: 07/07/06 17:48
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

Good Story, but it just sort of ends. Is there going to be more?

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/18/06 2:28
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

Excellent book- I thought it would be something like that.
Heheheh- and Fred and George are branching out. Excellent!

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/18/06 2:10
Chapter: Chapter 9 - Chosen By Fate

OOOH..... Now this is interesting. I'm wondering if you're going to bring the Heir of Hufflepuff in this somehow- because that would be cool. I know you could pull it off.
It's interesting to knwo how selfish the women are... I wonder how Harry and the others will be able to help THEM??

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/18/06 2:03
Chapter: Chapter 8 - Unfamiliar

I'm glad Ron and Hermione got back together.... And I'm annoyed at Harry for not waiting to figure out what the deal is with the eagle chick from the council. Oh, Harry- why must you be so silly??
Another great chapter!

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/18/06 1:49
Chapter: Chapter 7 - Devil's Arithmetic

Oooh. I can't imagine how this must make Remus feel. The fact that he is also a werewolf... Poor Remus.

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/17/06 1:45
Chapter: Chapter 4 - Sunrise, Sunset

Very interesting.... SO what happened between Rowena and (the original) Lanette to make Lanette come to America??? Hmm...
I like the thought of Slytherin and Ravenclaw being together, but I thought it was stated that Ravenclaw was best friends w/ Hufflepuff and Slytherin with Gryffindor??? G and S WERE friends, so 'Ravenclaw knowing him best' wouldn't really work.
Or did I miss something.... Still- it's brilliant!

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/17/06 1:32
Chapter: Chapter 3 - A Legacy Unknown

Oooh... I really hope Lanette and Hermione meet. I think they could learn a lot from one another. I really like this new character you've introduced, but I find one fault.
WHY, oh WHY aren't you making Lanette into her own book so you can publish it and make money off of her?!?!?!?!?! Because if you haven't thought about it-- please do! You've got such a great imagination and I think it would be great! I dont have the patience to write my own universe, so I give a lot of credit to people who do.

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/17/06 1:20
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Of Labyrinths and Destiny

Woah.... that tapestry is intriguing. And the fact that all the people in this sanctuary seem to be female... well then. I have NO idea. I wonder if Harry is the first male to come here???

Reviewer: the_bartender713
Date: 06/17/06 1:13
Chapter: Prologue

Oh. My. Gosh. I read just the prologue before I left for work today, and seriously, I had to tear myself away or else be late.
Your style is cunningly brilliant and flows extremely well together- I can't wait to get on reading the rest!!!!

Oh- P.S. I left a "want ad" in your live journal (thus how I found out about your fic) because I would love for you to make me a banner!!! Let me know if I missed any needed info- I'd love to hear back from you on it.

Now-- back to the story!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 06/15/06 2:24
Chapter: Chapter 10 - Reflection

ooooh, I like Lanette's sarcasm and bluntness, it gives her flaws but also positives. Well done, I like it. 10/10

Reviewer: Ron205
Date: 06/07/06 15:43
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

dude, i love this fanfic. I havent been on mugglenet in a long time but im glad that i was able to find a gr8 ff like urs to get me hooked on again.

Reviewer: LoneStarVamp
Date: 06/05/06 20:56
Chapter: Prologue

I've found a reference to a ship called the "Falcor" in Star Wars. Am I on the right track? I just began reading this series - it's very well written with rich description. Looking forward to continuing Harry's adventures! LSV

Reviewer: Adrastos
Date: 06/03/06 13:31
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion

Dear Queen,

Another striking, rich chapter. Maybe even the best American centered chapter so far.

Taking odd shapes and changing into strange and unconventional colors.

This is the kind of writing I love. Not strange and weird or strange and odd, no strange and unconventional. Beautiful.

She was at the stage where 'why?' was the response to any refusal.

I know exactly what you mean! I have these two lovely cousins, but… ooohw I feel like silencing them all day! “Why this, why can’t I have that, *gasp* oooewh shiny! What? Why can’t I keep it?” … sorry, I’m ranting. Kids, you’ now…

Magic itself comes from everything– it’s in those rocks, in the wings of the birds, in every ripple of the ocean water, it's even carried upon the torrents of the wind. It doesn't matter. Magic permeates everything–everyone.”

-Yoda couldn’t have said it better himself.

She watched as the trees outside of the dorm whipped around like ocean waves during a storm.

I’ve stopped about half a screen of beautiful sentences ago to name them all, but this one really caught my attention. Such wonderful visualizations really are rare. Simple but striking.

And I must say, your fic makes me especially proud to be a Ravenclaw 

One thing I noticed:

“Strange weather, we're having isn't it?” I believe this should be “Strange weather we’re having, isn’t it?”

Extendable ears! Brilliant addition. It’s these kinds of little things that make this story so … so rich.

And what about –I think- Lucius? The suspense is killing me here! Just when I thought I really wanted Harry back, I can’t wait what will happen to Leanette now.

Hope you update soon,


Reviewer: Blossomlily
Date: 06/02/06 0:52
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Suspicion


I've been reading this fic for the past week, reading three or four chapters each day, owing to the pitifully small time I'm allowed on the computer. :) I must say, I really didn't want to stop reading. This is a fascinating story; one of the best fanfictions I've ever read. If only this wasn't fanfiction... it's good enough to be published!

It has everything - mystery, emotion, adventure, suspense, history... everything, and that's what I love about it. Not a single chapter is complicated or boring. I enjoyed every paragraph from the beginning to the end. My favourite chapter was the eighth one- we got to see the trio there. I adore the way you characterize them - Ron is not too flippant as it is war time, and not too serious or romantic; Hermione feels all the right feelings; Harry, who has the biggest role, is acting with just the right amount of responsibility... *sigh*

Your descriptions are just... awesome. Normally, while reading books, I'd skip over some of the longer, detailed passages and read them the second time, but I simply couldn't do that here. Your are just too good to resist! Forgive me, I have absolutely nothing constructive to say. I'd just like to tell you to carry on the magnificent work as usual; and give us greedy readers something to gobble up soon! And... thanks for giving me a very enjoyable week in an otherwise boring summer. Keep it up, Hal! ;)

P.S. Can I just get in one fangirly squeal, then? *squeeee*

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