The curse caused my body to feel as if it was burning in the intense fires of hell I don't think though, this is the way Voldemort of all people would describe the pain of being hit by the killing curse. He is one who does not ackowledge a life after death least of all a place that is definitely destined for him after all he's done to humanity.
I thought this was in some ways better than JKR's version in book seven. At least James had his wand and attempted to fight. I alway's wondered why they didn't have an escape plan, just in case, an immediate portkey, a broom to fly out the window, a room they could apparate from, anything. But I suppose they thought they were safe. Trusting people is dangerous. Anyway, thought this was really good. Keep it up.
Wow. I have to say, I thought this was wonderful! I've never even considered something from Voldemort's point of view, and I though that was incredibly interesting. You had a wonderful grip on the idea of what's happening to Lily and James, and how they would react. Again, I think this is fantastic! Great job!
Again another fantastic story from my fave writer, Megan_Lupin. You proud little so-and-so you! *holding my hanky* I hate the bit where poor James and Lily die [Not you're writing, my friend, the actual scene! Do no Avada me for saying I hate your writing 'cause that would be both cruel and humiliating on my part] My praise and delighted, though slightly sad, tissuing to you!
I think this is a very interesting story. I haven't read any stories told from Voldermort's point of view, and this was a nice one to start with. I like how you show the events from the other side; what Voldemort planned, what he thought and how he felt during and in the aftermath of the events.
Though there are a few things that you haven't filled in, and some of them left question marks in my mind. Like, I wonder why James asked him what he had done with Peter. Do you think that Peter's betrayal was a sudden one, because Voldemort says he had come to him the other night? And the ending... actually, it is a bit vague, but I like how you ended it - it is a nice point to finish the story, from where the reader can add his/her own thoughts about what happened afterwards.
All in all, it is a very interesting and nicely written story. Keep on :)
Author's Response: Oh, Ayse, thanks so much for the review. This was my first attempt at a first-person PoV (and Voldemort's mind isn't the best of places to be, either). I'm glad you thought it turned out all right.
The way I see the betrayal as happening is a bit sudden. Also, I think James wouldn't have thought his friend would willingly give him up. He's afraid that Voldemort captured and killed Peter, so the 'betrayal' bit comes as a bit of a shock.
The ending was left vague on purpose, you're right. Whatever idea a reader has on what happened to Voldemort and the other participants that night can all happen with the way I ended it, so it's not like it's stepping on anyone's ideas.
Glad you liked it, and thank you once again for the review.
Sorry. Ignore the last part of my review. Moony911 is you isn't it. In an Idiot *Hits Head*
Author's Response: Don't worry about it. Yes, moony911 is me. ~Megan
Wow. This is really brillient. Its probaly heard it enough, but Voldemorts POV was really intresting.
The whole fic is exactly as I imagined it. I wanted to Check, It you search "A Single Miscalculation" It come up with something simmiler to this. Did the creators get your permission?
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the story, Augrey, and thank you for the review. Anywhere this story is posted SHOULD be by me.
I liked this!
I've never read the "Halloween 1981" story from the POV of Voldemort - very interesting.
I must congratulate you on your imagery, it is very good and descriptive. It definitely captures my imagination and attention.
You definitely captured the personality of Tom Riddle/Voldemort with your fic here - it shows through in his irritation of Wormtail, and the slight sarcastic remarks that make the story dark, yet humorous at all the right moments. Great work!
I can't even point out anything wrong with the story. You did so good!
mugglemathdork ~ Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: Thank you, mugglemathdork. I chose Voldemort's view because the challenge that I originally wrote this for said the night must be told from either Voldemort, Dumbledore, or Sirius, and I chose the Dark Lord himself. He's always interested me, and I also find him far easier to write than, say, Harry. I love descriptions and images, and I'm glad to hear that you didn't think I went overboard with them or anything -- I sometimes fear I'm in danger of that. Again, thank you so much for the review, and I'm glad you liked the story. ~Megan
I thought that it was well written and help explained the story of what happened!
Author's Response: Thanks, Nerd Goddess. I'm glad you liked the story, and thank you for taking the time to review. ~Megan
loved it. so weird reading something from voldemort's point of view. it was very poetic, which was good, because it wasn't just 'oh, i'm evil, mwhahahaha' if you know what i mean. it's like you actually saw what was in voldemort's head. it was good. i liked it. well duh.
Author's Response: Firstly, thanks for reading, as well as leaving a review. I'm really glad you loved it, and yeah, there aren't that many things from Voldemort's point of view. He's always been a fascinating character for me, and I became tired of reading so many stories where he's just so stereotypical (sp?) "Disney villain," if you know what I mean. So, I'm glad you thought this story wasn't like that. That was my main purpose setting out, and it's good to hear I accomplished it. Again, thanks for the comments. ~Megan
I’m back! And I have a review!
It took me a little while to figure out this story was in first person (but you can blame that on my laziness — I hadn’t read the summary too carefully). But once I saw the mood of the story, and who was narrating, I was highly intrigued. Voldemort’s point of view is something I rarely see, and even more rarely do I see it well written. I really have to congratulate you on doing just that.
Darkness was my sanctuary, and I thrived in its embrace. It’s metaphors and phrases like this one that make this one-shot so good. This is one of the many that really made me want to read more. It is one of the things that separates this from some of the more cliché one-shot based on this night. This, and the point of view.
I had ever done before, only to have the bright beam of green light and all of that power shot right back at me. Had this been any other story or point of view, I would have been perfectly fine with this sentence. But you’ve done such a good job setting a mood! The choice of words and phrasing is truly brilliant, and it makes “shot back at me” stand out a bit. It doesn’t’ quite match the rest of the writing style used.
One really has to appreciate the dialogue used throughout this story. Voldemort’s was excellent, not only his words, but the narration. I also really enjoyed James and Lily, and how you showed the from Voldemort’s point of view. I could still see what was happening though; it wasn’t really biased—simply from Voldemort’s point of view. I think that’s one of the things that really makes this work. Voldemort is telling the story, not necessarily his opinion on the situation.
Overall I really enjoyed reading this, and it was really easy to review (and that is a very nice complement, by the way). I hope to see more writing like it by you, as it really is a nice change from the clichés of other writings I’ve seen.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I put plenty of work into this, and I'm glad you thought it turned out great. I've always been fascinated with Voldemort, and I had been wanting to try writing a one-shot in the first-person view point for awhile now. Again, I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I really appreciate the comments. (Plus, I really like the lengthy reviews. They're the best!)
Wow... Can I just way wow? I really liked this one-shot. Intense, accurate... The only thing I would question would be if James would scream immediately when the Crutiatus curse was put on him... I know Harry ends up screaming, and so do all the others, but James seems the hero who would fight even internally against his enemy. But the more i think about it, the more I realize how I can't even pretend to imagine what it would feel like when someone--more specifically the Dark Lord--points his want at you with a desire to torture you... Basically, it's amazing... :-) I'll be looking for more fantastic one-shots! Good Luck on your other story...
Author's Response: Thanks! I had given a lot of thought to whether or not James would scream, but I decided in the end that Voldemort's rage would have been extremely powerful in this instance, and James was not completely braced for the curse on the second time, which would result in him screaming. Again, thanks for your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed it!