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Reviews For Wolf's Bane

Name: Cherry and Phoenix Feather (Signed) · Date: 10/30/05 8:55 · For: Rain in Diagon Alley
Thanks so much for the constructive crit, people!! Chapter Two is going through that last beta stage, so it should be in queue shortly!! Thanks to those who wished me well on my Biology practical. NO idea why I was so worried--easier than faking a Divination essay.

Name: Antipodean Opaleye (Signed) · Date: 10/30/05 0:52 · For: Rain in Diagon Alley
Ooh and I love the Cinderella touch at the end! Haha was it meant to be Cinderella? Oh well that's what it reminded me of!

Name: Antipodean Opaleye (Signed) · Date: 10/30/05 0:48 · For: Rain in Diagon Alley
*Gasp* That's so brilliant! I love it! ^_^ But it's kinda strange how Remus could try to make it into a 'friendly' kiss, it sounds a bit more than friendly... Anyway I loved how you described the kiss and everything else. You have a unique style and I like it! Yeah er... Remus getting drunk? Hmm that's... interesting. Haha I agree with the sensible side! That was done very well, by the way, the two sides of the mind. I also like the way Tonks made him cheerful... But... Hmm, everyone seems to make her almost too clumsy and happy-go-lucky, naive, etc. etc. You didn't do that too too much but I'm just saying... Anyway that was really really good keep writing! And good luck with science :P

Author's Response: Just to explain to EVERYBODY about the whole "go get drunk" thing, I didn't actually mean it as a serious suggestion. He was lonely and bored. Desperate, actually. So, just to explain.

Name: Evik (Signed) · Date: 10/28/05 13:03 · For: Rain in Diagon Alley
I absolutely love it. Brilliant description of both Remus and Tonks. Please update soon.

Name: Lupin_n_Tonks102 (Anonymous) · Date: 10/27/05 23:52 · For: Rain in Diagon Alley
Oh my gosh, this is so excellent!! I love it!! Please, please update soon!

Name: Cherry and Phoenix Feather (Signed) · Date: 10/27/05 17:06 · For: Rain in Diagon Alley
Glad you like. I haven't gotten any other comments from my betas on OOCness, but thank you so much for telling me! Now that you mention it... I might have to do some revising. Thank you!

Name: MoonysMistress (Signed) · Date: 10/27/05 13:35 · For: Rain in Diagon Alley
Hmmm. Very nice! Beautifully written, I must say. I especially like the line: "The young Aurorís kindness, compassion, humor, and overwhelming clumsiness had squirmed its way into his heart, curled up by the fireplace, and fallen asleep on the hearthrug." You have an excellent writing style/diction. I'm just wary of a) the AU, and b) I was afraid that Remus is leaning a little on OOC. I've never been able to picture Remus out drinking. Or chasing Tonks. The kiss was a wee bit strange as well. But those are VERY small nitpicks, and if I could give you a 9.5, I would, but I went with a 9 because GADZOOKS! Your summary! It mentions who dies in Book 6! *cries* Granted, anyone who hasn't read HBP yet ought to be exiled to a faraway country, but still. It was a bit of a shock. Eek. And also the thought of Remus getting drunk. Don't like that. Not up my alley. *cries* I sound atrociously dire in this review, but I really REALLY like this story, and I'm going to keep track of it and probably haunt you until this story's end. Keep writing, I'm anxious to see more!

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