Excellent.5 out 5 stars
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wow...It's diffrent. Kind of 'Broke Back' but i does take a diffrent look at life in Hogwarts
Author's Response: Confession -- I haven't seen Brokeback Mountain yet. This probably marks me as a total hermit. Thanks for the review! I suspect life at Hogwarts is much like life anywhere else. You can find all sorts of odd stories popping up somewhere...
Aww, how cute.
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aww, how sweet. loved it!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Welcome to the series!
ewwwwwwwwwwwwww! i could never imagine ron and draco doing it! good story all the same
Author's Response: Reviews of this story so often make me giggle... Thanks for the review and favoriting! Especially if you aren't sure of the pairing!
interesting.... I'm not really into slash, but that was... interesting.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I can't say I am either, exactly, but I don't have anything against it, and it was a challenge. "Interesting" also covers writing it!
What in the hell where you thinking!
Author's Response: I was thinking, "All right, the challenge is indeed a challenge." Now I am thinking "There is no such thing as bad publicity." After all, you were shocked by one of my stories and came back for another one. And people look at review counts. See what you've gone and done?
A very well written stories. An extremely unlikely pairing, I LOVE IT!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
hahahaha loved it
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I've never read any ron and draco fanfics before, but this one is sweet.
Author's Response: I think they count as a rarepair. Thanks for reviewing!
Hmmmm . . . iiiiiinteresting . . . . Very unusual pairing, nice fic though, well written, caught the personalities of the characters very well.
Author's Response: Thanks! I had fun throwing these personalities together and seeing what could happen. Unusual pairing is courtesy of Seren, and is growing on me.
Hmmmmmmm....... That is to say...hmmmmmm.... It was just so unexpected an idea initially. I was wondering, do you think Draco was initially attracted to Harry on the Hogwarts Express (whe he offered to help Harry make friends with the right sort of people)? But, of course he was mightily rebuffed and so turned his sights on Ron instead? Just a thought as to the origins of the attraction. And, "scourgify"--I'll never think of it without thinking "kleenexify" instead. Now I need to go read the two sequels, but I'm wondering if one or the other invented a "deep intense pleasure charm" that could be aimed at the other at awkward moments? That would be cool. Enjoyed it, especially the implied parts being so vividly hinted at without actually described (kleenexify). Okay, gonna go read the other two now...
Author's Response: Great minds think alike -- I'd been wondering who had invented that spell and who was using it on whom (though I'm betting on Narcissa Black for chief misuser, somehow.)
Thanks for reviewing! Happy reading!
First off, I'd like to say that I never ever would have clicked on this fic on my own. I'd have read the summary, smiled and kept looking for an AU with lots of Harry, but Mask sent me here, and even after I whined that it was slash Draco/Ron, she wouldn't let me bookmark and move on. So I read.
Now, while you in no way have converted me to a shipper for this pairing, I couldn't help being drawn in. You write very effective dialogue and the story managed to move an unusual pair forward into an intimate scene, and somehow, they never quite felt out of character.
The writing has a witty tongue in cheek feel, and I think that tone allows your timeline to work. Any other tone and this might have felt rushed.
I guess the tone could be a criticism too though. I don't know that the tongue in cheek thing was intentional. I enjoyed the fic, and smiled quite often, but I never really took the pair seriously. It almost felt like you were winky at us, telling us that you didn't take this pair seriously either.
Overall, this was handled brilliantly, with great humor. Thanks for sharing this *interesting* bit of fiction. And go Ravenclaw! :)
Author's Response: Very astute of you -- I don't take this pair a bit seriously. They are fun for a bit of fluff, though, aren't they, the little devils? Thanks for reviewing! Go Ravenclaw!
I can’t help it. I’ve read this story twice now, and both times I burst out laughing when I got to the ending. It’s a good little story anyway, but the ending just ties it into canon so perfectly. And it’s so funny. I love stories that make me stop and reconsider something that happened in canon, and this totally did that. I’ll never hear ‘Weasley is our King’ without laughing again.
Actually, there are many little tidbits of goodness. Draco’s POV is very interesting, because he places emphasis on the strangest things. The Hexing of Hermione was ‘a Potions class,’ and Fred and George are Ron’s ‘terrifying brothers.’ It’s easy to see that you really were inside Draco’s head as you wrote, when you throw in such small details that are still perfect.
The dialog was entirely too amusing. “As I’m the ‘wrong sort,’ and you’re the awful sort, is that really so surprising?” “She’s right. The correct answer was, ‘Who’s Hermione?’” “Oh. Sorry.” Those are just two examples, but I couldn’t resist quoting them.
There’s a lot of character development happening, generally done very well. Ron’s gradual acceptance is shown very subtly, and Draco did a wonderful job winning him over. Even in the beginning Ron seems willing to think about why they hate each other so much, and by the ending he’s admitting that a lot of his hatred was an act, or habit. I like that, because I think a lot of their animosity really is inherited, and there’s no reason they couldn’t let it go. It’s believable that he was questioning a lot of things during that time when he wasn’t speaking to Harry, and you’ve made good use of that window of opportunity.
As a foray into the scary world of rairpairs, this is very nice. As a fluffy, funny little story for a snowy afternoon, it’s one of my favorites.
Author's Response: Thanks, Mask! I'd had this mental picture when rita_skeeter put this up for review tag and the counts went up for two weeks with no response: Ravenclaws clicking on the story, then departing hastily, shaking and white-haired. It rather amused me, actually, but having written a favorite of yours is far better.
And now I have another bunny, too. Hmm, where to cage the little sucker...
*grins* I'd have to say that I enjoyed it! I'm actually a huge fan of Draco/Ginny, so I guess I always enjoy seeing Weasleys and Malfoys together. I'd have to say you did a pretty good job keeping them IC, for the most part. I think Ron might have objected a little more, but I suppose we didn't have to see that since it was from Draco's POV. I really liked your use of Draco's fantasy as the catalyst, you might say. Very nice. And I liked the references to Weasley is our King and the ferret bit. Oh, and you dealt with all the Ron and Hermione angst in that part of their lives very well. And the reference to Lucius about why Draco is an only child was great! I hope you had as much fun writing it as I did reading it!
Author's Response: And at last the Ravenclaw Review Tag is passed along! I have to say this story had a lot of hits before you weighed in... Thanks for reviewing; I did indeed have fun figuring out how to fit this little story into the cracks in canon -- and I'll just NEVER turn down a chance to kick Lucius for anything from hypocracy to general vileness. (He's going to trip on his "pimp cane" on a grand entrance soon, I promise.)
i would have to agree with what profpoksy (?) said on Ron. But i liked the story. this is one of my favorite slash pairings, if you write more i'd be quite happy to read them...
Author's Response: Hmm. If that bunny ever shows a nose again, I'll put it up, maybe from Ron's POV for variety (no promises, though; I seem to like those Slytherin minds...) The seeds of the relationship's destruction are certainly sown already in here, but may yet sprout. Poor Ron -- there's no way he could EVER discuss this with Harry or Hermione, is there? Thanks for the review! (Erk. Down, bunny! Down! Down! "Look at the bones!")
I thought it was generally good, but I found it a little...abrupt. Granted, we are talking about a short short story, but to me there are two issues at work here with Ron- Ron's inclinations, and Draco being Draco. If Ron has really never dealt with this before, you'd think there would be more - thought? Emotion? Confusion? involved... The Draco being Draco part is a little more convincing to me, except I feel I want a clear turning point there. Maybe noone else does, or maybe others find one - could just be me, I suppose. I also wonder if Draco is really so able to escape his conditioning and have so little trouble with being in love with a blood traitor. He has always struck me as a total coward. All of this is nitpicking in a sense - it is basically a satisfying story, for something that I think is really canonically unsupportable, you wrote it as a particular sort of exercise rather than from initial conviction, and I can imagine a million ways it could have been done badly, and very little in the way of how to improve this, other than what I already said. So, I suppose my final judgement is that it is my least favorite of your stories - but I REALLY like your stories, so see it in that context.
Author's Response: Funny, I would have called the "Little Ratty Paws" one abrupt, and this one considerably more time-spanning at the least, but I see what you mean. The biggest limitation was point of view -- Ron may indeed be dealing with a great many issues here, but is Draco likely to care? From inside his head, we won't see much of Ron's thoughts on the matter, which probably saved me five chapters on what would have happened if I'd tried to do both views. As for cowardice and loving a Blood-traitor, well, Draco is talking tough a bit, but he's hardly going to take Ron home with him to meet the parents anytime soon. "Really canonically unsupportable" made me laugh -- it really is, isn't it? But I tried to fit them into the little gaps as best I could, which was a fun little game all by itself.
I've said it before; I'll keep saying it. In some ways I am basically evil. Thanks for the review!
Classic! Perhaps a little more detail... just to make things a little more juicy... hehe
Author's Response: MORE juicy? Yikes! I think I'll let your imagination do the rest...
quite honestly i wanna throw up right now....but thats a compliment... hahaha okay let me explain... i dont like reading these types of things. ron/draco is almost as bad as sirius/lupin. but however, i'm trying to be open minded and so i read it.... now the writing was very good. i really felt like you got the characters right, which is why it got me sick. seeing my two favorite characters (for completely different reasons) falling for eachother just completely grossed me out....but if you had written it poorly i woulnd't have even bothered reviewing...oh well your probably still offended...basically it was good, really really well written
Author's Response: Not at all offended, too busy chortling evilly. The challenge was to write a 'ship we did not support, and my list of supported ships made Seren give me this one. I'm always delighted when someone says I've gotten their favorite characters right, so *takes bow* thanks for the review!
Now, an SSP warning normally makes me rush off in the other direction (Not because of the SSP, just the SSP within the Potterverse), especially when the author places ‘thanks heavens’ next to the One-Shot title. However, as I have been fangirling about your fics all over the place, I thought it was high time I sat down and reviewed one. And being as my mind is slightly unhinged, I thought I’d start with the SSP one.
It was interesting how you took me through a few scenes I would normally find toe-curling, and delivered an interesting little bit of romance, if romance is the right word. Out of necessity, Draco and Ron must be OOC, but I think you kept them as IC as possible given what they were up to. I found it interesting that you referred to Ron as Ron in the narrative and Hermione and Harry as Granger and Potter. Was that a bit of conscious distancing for the other two members of ‘the trio’? I also liked the way you slipped this whole thing in, almost as a missing scene from GoF. I haven’t seen the film yet, but when I do this little one-shot has added an interesting perspective. You write their conversation very well, snappy and confrontational slowly changing to uncertainty on Ron’s part and even, to a degree, on Draco’s
Several lines made me smirk. “Is your Head of House a nosy, micromanaging Legilimens?” and “I prefer tadpoles, thanks. Ever tried them?” are two memorable ones! You have a nice turn of phrase that’s evident throughout the whole piece, and it’s that which keeps the reader reading what would otherwise be an outlandish pairing.
But what have we here? *Holds up a squirming, bedraggled word* Gryffendor? How did that little monster creep in and displace Gryffindor?
And here…“He’d still not care to have a Blood-Traitor Weasley about – assuming, of course, I was about. Which I won’t be.” I don’t know; you might look up Percy.” …I think a naughty, random quotation mark snuck in and joined the party. But that’s all the nitpicking I’m going to do. The ‘thank heavens’ leads me to believe you might not want to revisit this chapter for an edit. *grins* Neat little ficlet, but I’m glad I got the SSP over with first!
Author's Response: Strange spelling of GryffIndor and pesky little quotation mark removed. Also the "thank heavens," as I'm getting oddly fond of this little fic after all. If our stories are our children, this one may be my redheaded stepchild, but I may as well give it some loving all the same. "Outlandish pairing" is an apt term, I'd say, but I thought it was easier to make it work than, say, Harry/Draco. That was indeed conscious distancing, by the way. Thanks for the review! And for the fangirling!