By far the best L/J fic I have ever read!! The Marauders were amazingly in character, and you had me laughing to the last bit.
Wow. I'm blown away. I'd have to say the ending was my favorite part, as it tied the whole thing together nicely. It's an interesting way to think of Lily finally going on a date with James, and it seems like something James would do to get her attention. I like the story from Remus' point of veiw, it adds a lot to the style.
THAT WAS FUNNY AND ROMANTIC AT THE SAME TIME! GRRRRRRRRRRRRRREAT JOB!
The last part was absolutely classic! I can understand why Sirius and Remus were howling with laughter- I would have been too! And it wouldnt have beeneasy to shut me up. I giggle for hours, especislly if my friend was there. Although I would probably be laughing so hard I would go silence- no sound. I get lke that! Nice story.
At first I didn't really understand what was happening (but maybe it's just me) and isn't Remus kinda OOC?
Anyway, it is still a nice oneshot. :D
Superb! *applauds* This is one of my fav L/J fics. We really need a sequel...So please, do consider it.
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I can see why they picked it, it ROCKS!
Its a very cute story!! Not exactly how I would picture James asking Lily out, but somehow this seems better than my ideas of such... 10/10... **adds author to favs**
Good job but i was wondering if u could make sure my story is there for everyone to read? Whats it called? approved or something? plz!!!!!!
That was HILARIOUS! It was so funny!!! I loved it. And the ending was the best thing ever. Definitely.
please this needs a sequel!!!!
you can't let in die now.........
and it was really good, nice job
please this needs a sequel!!!!
you can't let in die now.........
and it was really good, nice job
Sorry, there already is a sequel...
Author's Response: Er...there is?
That was really good! I think the poem was a good idea. But the ending was the thing that made it awesome. You should do a sequel!
Author's Response: Hah, I hate the poem... pure, adolescent drivel...
keep writing. its good.please
Author's Response: ...People. Please. I'm glad you like it, but, really, this is a ONE-SHOT. No sequel. Read the author's notes before putting reviews like this. ... And please, meaningful reviews? More than five words, at least, and a better word than "good". It's all I really ask. "Hilarious" or something relating to the characters suits me just fine.
:D Hilarius, cute and sweet, all in one story. Very uplifting. It put me in a good mood. Good job! :)
I loved it! The characterisation of all of your characters was original and accurate. James's modesty was only briefly swayed, and his devotion to everyone maintaining a certain view of him was well-integrated.
I also liked the easy conversation and clear friendship between the four Marauders. They have everything best friends do. The little hints at this friendship are what makes the story so happy!
“If he actually makes this, I’ll turn into a fluffy puppy next full moon,” I said dryly as I watch James top nineteen feet. This is a very Remus-y line, and entertaining, too.
There was only one thing that didn't quite make sense--you mentioned the feet he was climbing at the beginning and said something about rock, but it was a little difficult for the reader to understand just where James was going. Was he climbing up the face of the castle? That would be incredible! Also, I think you might have meant 'reverently' instead of 'reverentially.' Just a thought...
By far, though, my favourite part was your plot: Lily's opinion is finally swayed by something James was doing mostly for his reputation, but to impress her as well. It makes sense, but it's something I've never seen before. Excellent job, and I can't wait to read more of your writing!
p.s. You might want to add 'successfully' between 'finally' and 'asks' in your summary, to avoid confusion.
LOL!! good one! i love it! this is going to my favorites...james chasing after lily is really cute and sweet...this fanfic is really nice! keep up the good work! ^_^
Amazing story, why didn't I think of that myself??? *bangs head on desk* lol, fantastic and original, the characters were flawlessly portrayed, loved it!
First off, congrats on having this one-shot featured in the chat. It truly was a wonderful read, and one of my definite favorites. I think one of your best things in this story was the POV. Using Remus was a wonderful choice, in my opinion, and I want to congratulate you on pulling everything off realistically and belieavably.
I also think your story has just the right amount of humor, and I really enjoyed reading it. Another of my favorite parts was the ending; it truly was sweet and hilarious at the same time, and I found myself laughing hysterically when I read the last line. It was wonderful!
I definitely look forward to reading more of your work, and again, congratulations on being featured in the chat. (It was also great talking with you in the Mod/Author chat.)
Author's Response: Thanks, I was really honored! It was great talking with you, too. I always seem to articulate my thoughts better in text than in real life, which I suppose is why I'm here right now.
