This was a very powerful poem and Ginny must be thinking it at a very emotional time. The reason why I liked this so much is because it was straightforward and yet implied as much as it confirmed. *wonders if she is making sense*
The one teeny tiny bit of critique I would have is that the poem flowed too much like prose. In my opinion there is a fine line between poetry and prose and it would have been excellent if you had used this poem to write a one shot like a song fic. *ditto*
Other then that, it was great and if you don't think I'm sane, you're probably right because I stay up at night and make my own notions about what real poetry is *huggles*=Sammy
Author's Response: Always good to get a review from an (in)sane person =D Thank you very much for the critique
I'm not really all that good at understanding the condensed language of poetry, but... squee Blaise Ginny smut!
:D I understood that part, anyway. What I've begun to notice as I do more and more poetry in school (and should be reading more and more poetry on here, by the way Steph) is that there are structured parts to poetry. Not that I can pick them out without a nudge form my teacher, though. One teeny thing I did notice (and correct me if I'm wrong) is the paragraphing.... correct word is stanza, right? Anyway, I liked the simplicity of the separations of the emotions. It's like paragraph by paragraph she becomes more and more undone, which is... perfect. Utterly perfect. It's very realistic, actually, the moods and feelings she has. The more I think about it, the more I like it, actually.
In the first stanza, I actually really like the words you've used for Blaise - superior, haughty - good words, I think. With the limited amount of words that poetry allows, I think you've done well to convey the personalities of the people involved. Like the word "furtive" it says a lot. So, congrats on being able to write something so succinct that you can pick up on it straight away - I for one can't do that - I tend to ramble on like I am in this review right now, actually.
One small thing, though, and I don't really know how applicable this comment is, seeing as I'm a bit of a poetry newbie, but even though you've described Blaise, you haven't really described Ginny. I'd like to see a bit more figurative language expressing the differences between them, just so you can see the two personalities. Not thinking about Blaise, I can tell it's a Slytherin, and that there's a girl with a lot more to her underneath than on the skin, but I don't actually know that it's Blaise with cocoa skin, or Ginny with flaming hair, or something like that. So... I don't know whether that can be taken as serious "I have to fix this straight away" criticism, as I'm a bit of a virgin on the issue myself. But it was a beautiful... slightly smutty poem nonetheless :).
Author's Response: Hee. Thanks Steph. That was a wonderful review. And as for stanzas and such...I'm such a dummie when it comes to that. I just write what comes out of my head :-P
*mouth goes dry*
*blinks and loves*
What a gorgeous poem. The word choice is so appealing and just amazing!
I trembled when your lips caressed my thighs
Adrenalin rushed through me
I became another person with you
My favorite part. *loosens collar* It's getting a bit hot here.
I cannot do anything but squee over this. You represent the girl's feelings very well and you show that perfectly, in each line.
*huggles and walks off mumbling incoherently*
Author's Response: *Loves teh Anna*
What more can I say. This is actually the first HP related poem I've ever written.
I am now officially hooked on Ginny/Blaise. I've been in a dry spell about thinking of rarepairs, which I adore btw, so thank you for turning me on to this ship!
Right, the poem...
I thought that was amazing. You captured Ginny's emotions wonderfully. I love how you expressed her want for him the way you did. That's such a hard emotion to express in writing, but I think that you wrote it perfectly. The whole thing is so captivating; I was hooked on every word. Your descriptions and emotions were so powerful. This was a really, really well written poem. I'll look forward to reading more of your work; you're a very talented writer! I've read 'Friends In Need' and adored it :)
Author's Response: I'm glad somebody else likes my favourite rarepair. Thank you for this very lovely review.
Whoa! I like how you captured Ginny's want for Blaise. Odd pairing but you wrote it well!
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
wow poetry rocks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks :-)
Very good! This was really good! keep it up!
Author's Response: Tusind tak :-)
This is very well written, I like your use of descrpitive language. Interesting pairing- not a stereotypical one. Really good, well done!
Author's Response: I'm glad you find the pairing interesting, and that's what fan fics are for: Expanding your fantasy.
Brilliantly written! It's so simply written but you were still able to portray her feelings with some passion. I don't really agree with the pairing but the poems very nice! *thumbs up*
Author's Response: Thank you ever so much :-)
I would not have thought to pair these two, but your take on this pairing has intrigued me. I adore the poem; the Ginny's heart seems to speak so plainy, much like she would otherwise. The imagery is great, and I love the following verse: "Iím sure you ignored me as I ignored you; Someone said you liked me; I refused to believe them; We exchanged furtive glances..." This reminds me of how my husband and I treated each other before we began dating--lol! This a wonderful poem, so ignore the flaming and keep on writing what YOU like...! :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much and I WILL. I don't let the flaming bother me; I could care less. But I'm glad you liked it ;-)
Not exactly my favourite pairing, but that aside I thought it was very well written. I am particularily fond of the verse, You saved me Your loving sympathy Your soft kiss You rescued my mind The only critisism I can give is that the rhythm faltered a couple of times, but other than that it was good, and keep it up.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it anyway. As for the rythm; I don't strive for any particular rythm, I just write out of spur of the moment thoughts.