Reviewer: Lillian Potter
Date: 11/27/06 21:12
Chapter: Trouble, Trouble, and More Trouble

UPDATE!

Reviewer: Quiditch fan
Date: 11/28/05 10:12
Chapter: Trouble, Trouble, and More Trouble

that was such a great chapter...very cool..and peeves rocks! anyway, update soon...and yeah

Author's Response: Ahhh!! I know, I love Peeves too--he is such a mayhem--which is absolutely fantastic!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you ever so much for your review, and I shall indeed update as soon as I find time--and I promise that that will be soon (latest by the end of this weekend... which would be somewhere around the 3rd of Dec.--darned homework, I can't stand having such a big gap between updates... I think I'll end up writing a couple chapters this weekend, just incase I get squashed down with yet another load of homework--then there won't be such a long wait... ahaha, ah yes, t'is a plan...)... hmmm... hehe, I'm getting carried away (rambling is the best), and thus I bid thee farewell... farewell...

Author's Response: (latest development: haven't come even near to being able to find enough time to work on next chapter--ahhhhhh, thank goodness Christmas vacation is coming! Last day of school is on the 16th of Dec, so it'll be late, but the chapter after will be early--I hope that will make up for it!!!)

Reviewer: Allie Rae
Date: 11/14/05 18:43
Chapter: Trouble, Trouble, and More Trouble

I love your story! It's great to read a story that's so descriptive! I also really love the way that James and Lily react around each other. You can't stop there! Please keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I'll update as soon as I can I promise--tonnes of homework right now, but I shall try to get the next chapter up... hehehe, I shall find time... writing is such a lovely thing to do *sigh* there is absolutely no way on earth that anything could possibly stop me from doing it (*ponders the many possible words*). Anyhoo, thank you ever so much for reviewing and all such what-not--ciao!

Reviewer: LaaDeeDah
Date: 10/30/05 3:04
Chapter: Trouble, Trouble, and More Trouble

Interesting and amusing story. I don't think it's very clear on what's going on sometimes, but maybe that's just me. Otherwise, great story!

Author's Response: Thanks--could you be more specific about what isn't clear though? I know one person was slightly confused because they didn't know what the prank was--but you aren't supposed to know that detail quite yet--I wanted for you guys to ask that question--it would be way to boring for it to be straight forward. Anyhoo, thank you a whole bunch for your review, and I'm glad you found it both interesting and amusing!!!

Author's Response: I know that a lot of fics are right out there with what is going on, and often a cliff-hanger is the most complicated detail. I didn't want it to be like that though, as I feel a good story should be thought out in advance and have the readers not know certain details so that they will have to keep guessing and there is a lot more room for surprise--but this way the plot will also move more slowly. If there is anything other than that that you find confusing, just write it down--I very much appreciate the input--it's very helpful for me, as obviously it will help me to improve on any flaws I may have in my writing. Thanks again a billion!!

Author's Response: *(well, not necesarilly more slowly, but more carefully)

Author's Response: *necessarily--ahahaha, I can't spell today...

Reviewer: hpforlife
Date: 10/28/05 14:24
Chapter: Trouble, Trouble, and More Trouble

Wondeful, wonderful, wonderful. I love your writing (what's not to love?) and the interaction between James and Lily in particular (though that's not really very particular, I know). 10/10--simply superb.

Author's Response: Thank you ever so much!!!! I must say, I do love to have a review from an author on my fav's list--merci baucoup!!! Hehehe, and to turn the tables, for your review I shall give you a ten out of ten (ahhh, *sigh* if only we could rate reviews! lol, I would most certainly give you a 100%!! They are ever so lovely!!). I must say that I feel, at this precise moment, "simply superb"!! Many thanks again!

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 10/28/05 11:14
Chapter: Trouble, Trouble, and More Trouble

Wow, this chapter is fantastic. I really like the interaction between James and Lily, especially the morning after the prank involving Peeves. Their awkwardness towards each other that quickly gives way to friendly banter is very similar to the way their whole relationship seems to be developing. However, I'm still slightly confused by what exactly happened with the prank. All you mention is that it somehow involved Peeves doing something to Snape because James and Sirius told him to? You really don't give any concrete details about what happened and that left me slightly confused as to why they were in so much trouble if Peeves is the one who actually did it. But, besides that I think the chapter is fantastic and can't wait to see what happens in the next one since this one ends with Lily fading into unconsciousness. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Well, I thank you--thank you a lot--a lot indeed!! Ahaha, anyhoo, you aren't supposed to know what the prank was--it's all a part of my plot, dear songbook99! That, and the little house-elf detail in the chapter before--any detail that only hints to something is generally something that will be worked out in the long run--gotta build the tension and get you asking questions a bit!!!! I'm just starting the next chapter, and I have to say that my mind is simply bubbling!!! There will probably be some answers in the next couple of chapters--but of course some more questions--so that in the long run, it's not just a simple fic, but a complicated story--I always find it much more fun to have to think and work out a problem, and to be kept guessing to some degree--keeps the element of surprise, and just makes a more interesting read. Thank you for your review!!! (PS, the part in this chapter where James throws out random words--these are words you generally wouldn’t associate with the magical society--just a hint, but a hint to keep you guessing. It’s not an important detail, but it relates to some of the questions that have already arisen. Hehehe, what fun!!!)

Reviewer: Padfoot Abby
Date: 10/27/05 7:49
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

I think your story was great! I liked the idea of James knowing where Lily was from his house elf. And your description of the woods was wonderful. Fabulous Job!! 10/10

Author's Response: I thank you from the very bottom of my heart for your ever spendid and fantastical (and yes, that is a word--in my dictionary at least--*chuckles*--how wonderful it is to be easily amused? Quite! ehehe) review, and all such what-not! I really, truly, honestly must say that it was simply lovely to read!! How lovely? Quite lovely!!!!! (spiffing!)

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 10/25/05 16:52
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

I think you have a great beginning for your story. Your prose is absolutely fantastic and really makes me see the surroundings. Adding Vernon in to push Lily out of the house was a fantastic little detail. Lily does seem awfully melancholy, but is slightly jarred out of it with the unexpected appearance of James and Sirius. I loved that fact that his house elf was following her, and I wonder if there's more to that. Anyway, I hope your second chapter gets posted soon as you've already submitted it. I will be interested to see where you take your story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!!! I have the biggest obsession with imagery, and thus I was "all of a flutter!" (*hehehe*) to hear that you can really see the setting--ah, how lovely is life? Quite lovely!! Yeppy!! I must thank you profusely for such a superb review--hearing (or--well--reading to be more accurate) all those wonderful things was absolutely splendid, and has officially made my day--thank you for that!!!

Reviewer: loonymoony8
Date: 10/24/05 15:21
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

I don't know, it seems like you're using a lot of big words. Use simpler words, it may help for an easier read. But other than this, your story great! Keep up the good work and update soon! 10/10

Author's Response: Ah, I know, that's my worst aspect in terms of writing--I like to use big words, or words that are weird (leotard, carbaminohemaglobin, unitard, etc.). Hehe, I ended up changing my original title because my sister didn't even understand what it meant. I'll try to cut back on those--thank you soooooo much for the feedback, I find it very, very, very useful!!!! After all, it's about what others will think when they read it!! (ch 2 is in... I'm going to go and make sure my vocab. is more "normal"... thank you again!!)!

Reviewer: JamesandLilyforever
Date: 10/24/05 9:49
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

omg,great story.LOve the fact that he had his house elf follow her,I find that funny in a way.well anyway keep up the great work on the story and hope to read ch.2 soon.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I had fun with the house elf detail--I'm glad you enjoyed it. Ch.2 is submitted already as well--thanks again for the review!!!

Reviewer: HeRmYgInS
Date: 10/24/05 9:20
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

That was great! Good job! It was really funny in some parts.

Author's Response: Thanks!!! I'm glad you found some parts of it funny--I was aiming to have it, as the first chapter, more serious, but at the same time I was somewhat afraid that it might be a bit "too" serious. The next one I had funner writing--it's more in Jame's point of view. Thank you for your review!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: grape_2010
Date: 10/21/05 23:31
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

call me daft but correct me if im wrong on the jift....james has his house-elf following her right?great story by the way!

Author's Response: Yes, you are indeed correct--it's fun keeping things just on the 'hinted' sid, on the 'low down', 'under cover', 'top secret' got a bit carried away there, but you catch my dirft ay, ahaha! Thanks for the review!!

Author's Response: I personally always love the little details in a story, so I try to have as many as possible (without over-doing it of course). Thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: QuandoGirl
Date: 10/21/05 14:18
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

My my, that was wonderfull ( ha ha ) it was almost like were sisters...(hint hint,) and so sorry i am the second person... wwwwwhhhhhhaaaaa ahaha. i shall review right away next chapter, which means you must update. 100/100 and so i must dash, tah tah

Author's Response: Jor, you crazy person you!! Hahaha, thanks for the review... although I don't think that there's a setting for 100/100... lol, I get the hint though (and it's "we're" not "were", yeeesh you!!! APOSTRAPHE!!! lol). Anyhoo, of course I shall update--these things are the bomb to write!!! (tah tah for now as well... hehehe)*

Reviewer: hpforlife
Date: 10/20/05 19:23
Chapter: Humdrums and Developments

Oh my, I'm the first to review! I was scrolling down, looking for my story to see if I had any more reviews, and I came across your name. And I thought, well, I have to read this story, this author is a devout reader of my story! So I click on the title, expecting an amazing story, and I most definitely got what I expected. I think I will be so daring as to say that this story BLEW ME AWAY! I LOVED IT! You're such a wonderful writer, and I love Lily's thought process. Sirius and James are funny, as they should be, and everything else is just perfect! Continue with this story, PLEASE! Update ASAP! 10/10--wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!

Author's Response: Ahhh *sigh* I'm so happy!! You have officially made my day--at this moment, you are my absolutely favourite person in the entire world!!! Hehehe, simply splendid and all such what-not!!! I must say, reviews have to be at the top of my list for best things in this world--lovely!!!! Thank you for reviewing, and I am most certainly eager to submit another chapter quite soon after such a spiffing review--woot woot!!

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