I LOVE IT ILOVEITILOVEITILOVEIT! ITS ONE OF THE FUNNIEST THINGS EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PLEASE WRITE MORE
im sorry i just have to point out. if lily's grand mother was accsepted into hogwarts then lily wouldnt be muggleborn. even if lilys gran had married a muggle lilys mum would be a half blood wisard so that deffies the muggleborn statise.
other than that its very good
WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO FINISH THIS FANFICTION. I WANT TO SEE JAMES POTTER GIVE LILY HER AND BACK!!!!
WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO FINISH THIS FANFICTION. I WANT TO SEE JAMES POTTER GIVE LILY HER AND BACK!!!!
PLZ UPDATE! THIS STORY'S REALLY GOOD!
Yay!!!!! but we need more before we die of no-update fever!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: thanks for your review! I'm writing the third chapter today, but am hoping for more reviews on the second one before I reward everyone who doesn't review! sorry! :(
I loved this chapter! "Well, if it isn't the beea-utiful Evans!" James let out a low whistle. I love that line, and it shows James perfectly. But I think that you need to transition better instead of using those big line things that seperated some of the scenes. Like Lily's flashback for instance, there was no need for that to be inbetween those two lines. And that line thing before Meanwhile... I think you should just use italics. The beginning was kind of throwing me off too, because I thought that it was actually happening. Just use italics and transition from one sentence into the next and then it'll be perfect. Other than that, I'm excited to read more.
Very nice. A few points: First, love the opening. It’s so unrealistic that it’s hilarious.Er, at first I thought Charlie was a guy. You may want to make it a bit clearer earlier that she isn’t.
Good characterization of Sirius: Sirius sighed casually. "Well, you know how it is. I turned on the Black charm and his mother fell in love with me. Now James is like the next-door neighbor, but you can't really blame her." Very amusing.
James, the pre-maturity, pre-understanding-what-Lily-wants-James is quite good. Basically, I liked it. It’s a good start. It’s a bit clichéd in that it’s the Marauders vs. Lily and her best friends, but it’s a well-written one. Keep writing!
the start was so funny! good chapter! update please! :)
MORE MORE MORE MORE MOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRREEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!! need more!!!! does thatr tell you enough? more more more more more more more more more more more!!!!! *seven days later* more!!!!!!!!!
OMGOSH PLZ, PLZ, PLZ WRITE MORE!!!!!!!! I TOTALY LUVVED IT!!!!!!!!!! 10/10
Poor James. This was a very good chapter and I particuarly liked the beginning of it. (you know, with the dream...) Please, Please, Please, update soon........!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: haha yes poor poor James. Things are about to get worse for him before they get better (hint hint) but thanks for your review! I have updated, so hopefully Chapter 2 will get approved and soon.
Awesome, I really like it, especially the beginning. James and his weird dreams, it was hilarious. Update soon!
I really like this story! At the begginning I was like, Wait, Lily would never say anything like that, then I found out it was a dream, so that was good. Update soon!
Haha, I love how you start it off. I was like, huh? And then I thought, oh right, dream. That was really good! I hope your story has appeared at the top of the L/J page because you've submitted the second chapter! Heehehee, Jade
Haha! This story is FANTASTIC. Keep it up!
Your story's great, but I have one problem. Isn't the new course, Divination, supposed to start in third year, not the fifth?
Author's Response: Thanks for catching that! Yes the course Divination starts in 3rd year when Harry is attending Hogwarts. When Lily begins taking the course, they have just introduced that course to Hogwarts for the first time which happens to be her 5th year. The course IS at 3rd year level, but it wasn't available for Lily's year then. Thanks for your review!
Hey... I thought your story was brilliant...especially with James and Lily in quarell and all...it's really good. quote "What, no hug for me?" James pouted through the glass. With a loud sigh, he added, "I guess I'll have to turn to Sirius!" god, i love tht part. Please keep going. Lyn
Author's Response: Thanks for being my 1st review! I've had computer problems and writer's block but I FINALLY updated my story (surprise surprise). It's just sitting in the mod box so hopefully it will get approved soon...keep an eye open. I loved your review- thanks!
