Reviewer: ZomgShaylex
Date: 05/04/09 19:37
Chapter: The Story of a Hero

A fantastic look into the last moments of a hero and their effect on another person. Great job!

Reviewer: GreyLady
Date: 02/24/07 16:23
Chapter: The Story of a Hero

Hi, Annie!

Ive been meaning to read your fiction for a while, so this is exciting.

I like you how set up the scene describing Susan writing, because it makes the reader undeniably curious about what shes writing, and why shes writing it. You prolonged it just long enough before actually showing whats shes writing.

The writing itself is very realistic. It never seems like a regular girl wouldnt write it, because it never becomes pretentious, but its still very profound. I loved how she recounted all the small but happy moments that they had experienced together, because that truly is what makes life worth living. The scene that you have her write is real, tragic, and human. Wonderful job.

I loved the imagery of her writing, The End and burying her face in her face in her hands, but I feel like the conclusion could have been better if you had elaborated more on Writing down her story had taken a toll on her both physically and mentally. If you had shown readers this rather than just telling it would have a much better effect. That goes for the whole story, actually.

But you still did very well. It was romantic, it was profound, and it explored a minor character well.

GreyLady
Knight of the Turnip Table

Reviewer: A_Pink_lady
Date: 10/10/06 13:44
Chapter: The Story of a Hero

wow that was brilliant!

Reviewer: koolgirl1993
Date: 02/12/06 0:54
Chapter: The Story of a Hero

wow. i don't know for how many stories of yours i told that already!!! 10/10

Reviewer: SiriuslyInLuvWithSirius
Date: 01/24/06 9:48
Chapter: The Story of a Hero

That was amazing! Wonderful story.

Reviewer: SiriuslyInLuvWithSirius
Date: 01/24/06 9:43
Chapter: The Story of a Hero

That was amazing! Wonderful story.

Reviewer: Theinvisiblechicken
Date: 10/25/05 21:55
Chapter: The Story of a Hero

Damn good stuff!

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