Wow. It was fantastic how you had Sirius sort of struggle between the realization that he wasn't watching James. Well not really struggle, he was oblivious to it. But yeah, you demonstrated all of this very well. Especially when Sirius realized there were dementors and when Harry saw him. I loved those two parts the most.
WOW...............that was AHMAZING! This is the first story from Sirius's pov in POA. I love how he thinks that Harry is James! 10/10
Ooh, this is good. I like the conflict in Sirius' mind about Harry being James. It just seems to fit so well. I've never seen a fic written about this before. Awesome!
That was really, really, really good. 10/10
Author's Response: (Blush) Glad you liked it. Actually came up with the idea at work one day when I was going around in a kind of fog. (Very little sleep the night before!) Wrote the idea down and started working on the story the next day.
Hi. I liked the way your story is written. I don't know if "fluent" is the right word, but it's the one that comes to mind. Perhaps you could enhance a little the climax of the story, it is not very differentiated from the rest. Good job, in general. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, this one was a bit tricky to write. Which climax were you talking about? The part with the dementors or Sirius waking up from his hypothermic half-dream? I've been considering giving this one a rewrite, but so far they've all come out considerably worse than the original! Maybe if I give it some 'composting' time...