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Reviewer: self named harry potter freak
Date: 08/04/06 22:09
Chapter: one shot

Love it! You wrote Neville very well with this story, and your OC Grace didn't come off as a Mary Sue like most OC's do. Just a few grammar issues I noticed (sorry if this is a bother, but I'm in the Beta Guild)...

'After she had left the room, Neville sighed deeply ' This sentence near the top of the page needs a period at the end.

'“Distraction or not, Neville, you’ve got to tell her how you feel, she went on.' This sentence a little farther down needs quotes after the comman and before she.

I love the ending with all the engagements and weddings, and what Ginny said about Voldemort is very profound. 10/10.

Reviewer: wickedravenclaw13
Date: 03/05/06 23:35
Chapter: one shot

I loved it!!! it was so sweet and the ending made me tear up! You're a great writer.

Reviewer: BlondeHufflepuff22
Date: 11/30/05 11:11
Chapter: one shot

Well, not to be harsh or anything, but it's pretty standard. Has a very "neat" ending without a whole lot of plotline or detail. Not the best.

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