no lie, i loved it. i was addicted from the moment i started reading. i'm a hard person to pull emotions from but no lie...i cried. now that could be due to the fact that i'm on edge and it's 3 in the morning, but it was so good. i'm glad you put in that last paragraph to make more closure it really did help.
thanks for giving me something good to read on a really bad day.
This to me was a sad story I thought that Talitha was going to be with Harry and you would make a squel but I really liked it keep up the good work you are a born writer.
Up until the last part of this chapter, I was enthralled. The ending seemed rushed, and shocking to say the least. Kind of like slamming on the brakes when your car is going 90 and smaking a brick wall. I'll be frank, I don't like the ending. You betrayed your whole plot by making her death happen so sudden and having the last paragraph be brief with Harry and Ginny. I was expecting something more. I loved the building of the story, I really did. I liked the character Talitha, and was hoping for a believeable ending, sadly this wasn't the case. Overall the story was great, except for the ending. I'd have to rate the story as "acceptable"
Its really cute story.....I do wish Talitha could have stayed wiith Harry though.
Booo!!! Bad ending! Down in front!! Sorry but why? It was all good until she died!
Author's Response: Talitha was in a position where she would rather die than live. She had no choice about the direction of her life, and she would have been hunted down like a dog to fulfill Voldemort's wishes until that had happened or he was dead. It was never meant to have a happy ending...as life doesn't always hand us happy endings. Sorry you feel the way you do, but thank you for your review anyway.
I guess I was wrong when I thought this would be overly fluffy-----I loved the twist at the end!
Author's Response: Thank you! I was determined not to make the story too fluffly, as a matter of fact, I had a horribly hard time writing the fluff. I enjoyed writing the action much better. Thank you for the review!
Yay!!! This is the coolest!!!! Great ending!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you...after that last review, I am glad someone enjoyed it. I am glad you liked the ending.
Author's Response: Well, I am sorry you feel that way.
oh my god. i really did not think it was going to happen. I am actually in tears. This is one of the most horrific stories i have read, i am traumatised for life. I mean that in the best way possible, honestly. This was such an incredible story. I dont think i have managed to breath since i started typing this... until just now. I thought everything would end up all happy in the end, i was sure the order would turn up and everything would be happy. Am i really that naive??
I had to read the bit where she got hit like five times to make sure i had interpretted it correctly, you'll find that it cant actually interpret it many other ways. and the bit where malfoy said "you killed her, Potter" kinda took away any last ounce of hope i had.
Such an amazing story, you are a very talented writer. Emma x x x
Author's Response: Well thank you very much. I am glad you liked it. I am sorry I made you cry, but it takes my breath away that you enjoyed it that much! I am going to go back and reread that section now though, thanks for the tip! Thank you very much for your kind words and the lovely review!
I really liked this story, but then the end was abrupt and just sucked.You build up to a great ending then quickly finish it with Harry and Ginny :( just not cool. Oh well great story if you ignore the last like two paragraphs.
Author's Response: Thank you for your opinion. Do you think I should just leave it at Harry's last line to Draco? Thanks for the review!
This was a really good story
Author's Response: Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it. I have an idea bouncing around in my head right now, and hopefully it will be able to take shape. =)
Ohh.. sorry for the second review but I kinda feel like I didn't get what was in my head into writing in that last comment...
When I said I thought Harry should die, it was because Talitha died. The best ending I can think of would have been a cliche style, H/Tal surviving with R/Hr, Voldy dead, Draco killing Bella, Lupin killing Wormtail, and so on... :P But thats my htoughts of this story. I am a huge fan of H/G and think they are the best match, but I got really fond of Tally in this story, and I was a bit choked up in the end when she died... Considering her life to this point, I was hoping to see both her and Harry having a life together and learning how to love and trust..
I'll be reading your other stories, cus I love your writing.. (even thought you kept me up all night reading the whole thing :P)
Author's Response: I am very flattered you read my story in one night! That makes me feel great right now, so thank you! I am also touched you grew so fond of my Tally, I tried very hard not to make her a "Mary-Sue", a real girl with real issues, but a sweetheart in the end. I would love all the cliches to happen, but as I said before, I don't think it will happen. Thank you so much for your second review. You've really brightened my day.
Even thought I love the G/H ship, I don't think it fit in this story... I think I would have been happy with Draco killing Bella, and for the first time I actually think that Harry should have died with Voldemort... And that Hermione and Ron survived and got married...
But hey... this is your story, so what can I say... :P
great writing, and I love your imagination about Talitha being a Lestrange.. And keep writing :D
Author's Response: Have you ever written a review (or in my case today, responded to one) and had to sign back in? ARRRGGGHHHH! I just wrote a response to your review and it kicked me off! I can't count how many times it's happened to me when I've written a lovely long review for one of my favorites and it lost it on me. It's crazy!!!!!!!!! Ahem, anyways, thank you for your review. I do think Harry and Ginny will end up together, but not right away. I think they will each have a couple "test runs" before they realize how perfect they are for each other. And, as much as I hate to say this, I honestly don't think the trio will all make it through the end of Book 7. (Throws hands up in the air in order to protect herself from all the rotten veggies thrown at her) I honestly don't. I hope not, because it will be awful, but I'm more than a little worried. So that's why I wrote what I wrote. But only the divine JKR knows for sure. I am trying to come up with another good original character to write a story about, my last one has been scrapped, it just wasn't coming out the way I wanted it. There are a lot of real life complications that are shaping my views and opinions on things right now, so thank you for your review. It makes me feel a little better.
I read the entire ten chapters in one sitting. I loved it! I cried at the end, but Harry really does belong with Ginny.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, and in some twisted way, I'm glad I made you cry. =) It touches me that my words moved you so. I am a Harry/Ginny shipper, so I do believe that they belong together in the end, but I thought he needed a little practice before he got together with her. (Though I do love how they got together in HBP). I can't believe you read it all in one sitting, but I'm pleased you did! Thank you for your review.
Alright, you already know I like your story and your writing style. Now to pick apart the ending. It was good up until very end, then logic seemed to disappear! Where was she going to run to? Why not have her to continue hiding behind the column, they were safe there, where they not? And what was Harry going to do in a wizard duel without his wand? True he could have taken a fallen Death Eaters wand but we all know that a wand works best only for its sole owner. And why would her mother kill her? Doesn’t Voldemort still need her to carry his child?
With all that said, I still liked it. Her dieing is just wanna those things that happens. Oh and we never really found out when this story takes place. Obviously its after book 4 because of the comment about Sirius, but you might want to go back and add in a small little detail to let us know when it specifically takes place.
And no I don't mean for you to go back and rewrite half a chapter, just giving you something to think about.
Author's Response: Thank you for your constructive review! I am going to try and answer your questions as best as I can. Talitha was not going to run anywhere. My original plan was to have her turn the wand on herself at the last moment when Voldemort was trying to force her to kill Harry (which no, I don't think she could work the killing curse on him, but she could on herself, seeing as she knew what her future had in it) but then I decided against it. As for Harry, I knew the Order would protect him until he was ready for the final battle with Voldemort. As for Bellatrix, as poor of a mother she was, I do believe in mother's intuition, and she knew that Talitha would rather die then do what they were going to force her to do. And lastly, this was set in Talitha's fifth year and Harry's sixth. There, that's that, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your reviews!
The story is written very well. I commend you for it. You have succeeded greatly at a difficult task. OC’s, the Blacks and their extended family, love, and of course the idiot with the lighting shaped scar make it a bit difficult to write especially when you combine them all! The little part about Sirius and James pranks made me laugh out loud, truly it did. But that was because it reminded me about a certain local school yard and how my father is missing a broken toilet! Don’t know why he kept the thing, so I decided to donate it to the school. ::insert evil marauding grin:: they didn’t mind the toilet to much, but they threw a fit about the road cones….something about state property! But alas we returned what wasn’t ours! ; )
Author's Response: Well, thank you very much for the compliment! I'm really glad I made you laugh with Sirius and James, and, as much as I love Talitha, the character I enjoyed writing the most was Ted Tonks. I had a lot of fun with that whole chapter. I'm glad you had fun reading it and thanks again!
well... I loved the story.... the ending was... so-so. Very well writin and constructed. I absolutly loved the story!
Author's Response: Thanks, I might try to reconstruct the ending, I had a hard time getting what was in my head out onto the page. Thanks for your honesty!
nope...Did not like ending. NO NO NO NO. did not, like sappy cliche endings lol...but i loved it. i lo-lo-lo-ved it :D
Author's Response: LOL, you had me worried for a second there! Thank you for your review! I really appreciate it. I'm trying to come up with something original to write about, I was working on a Marauder-Era piece, but I don't know quite how I feel about it now...we'll see though. Thanks again!
What a wonderful story! Very much in the style of JKR (long may she rain). Wonderfully paced, you kept me wondering until the very end. I was sad to see her die but unfortunately there will be more deaths beore the final chapter is done.
Author's Response: Thank you! This being my first fan fic, I'm very flattered at the response I've gotten. I'm glad I didn't make it obvious what was happening...I love JKR, but I don't know what I'm going to do when it all ends...wipes away a tear...
THAT WASN'T SUPPOSED TO HAPPEN!
Author's Response: I'm sorry but she had no choice!