Reviews For Moment of Clarity
Reviewer: Courtney22
Date: 02/11/06 23:22
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

I really enjoy your missing moments series. I think you did an excellent job of capturing Ron and Ginny’s characters and what they might have been thinking at the time. I really like how you portrayed Ron and Ginny’s relationship. I also like how you injected some humor in your story with the suit of armor. It might have been nice to continue the story and see what Ginny and Hermione talked about later.

Reviewer: Starry Sky 44
Date: 11/26/05 21:47
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

I love this Missing Moments series..It's so good. This is something I can totally picture Ginny doing. I also loved the "boys are stupid" line going on throughout. The whole thing was great. Nice job!

Reviewer: scarletti
Date: 10/21/05 10:56
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

This story was really great. I can't imagine Ginny other way. You do a great job of showing both her senstive girly feelings (in particular with how she feels about Harry) as well as her tomboyish toughness. I feel like this fits perfectly in the story, and like someone else said earlier, JK would be proud. I have yet to look at your other stories and i'll review for them as well. Good luck in the future, please write more missing moments! I really have enjoyed this, and I'm sure i'll enjoy the others taht i read. :) 10/10!

Reviewer: Billie Bowtrunckle
Date: 10/21/05 3:14
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

I have to say that the entire time I was reading your story I had the biggest dopiest grin on my face. Your portrayal of Ginny was very natural and her rambling stream of consciousness was...well, just like a teenager (thinking about everything at once and complete with the 'boys are stupid' mantra). Being the only girl with 3 brothers, some of what you wrote had me laughing because it was just so true, especially the part about the soap and shampoo and being short. For me, it's all about the details and I really enjoyed the small bits you took the time to add such as: 'she simply propped the arm up with the hand extended, knowing her classmates wouldn’t be able to resist the urge to give it a high five.' and 'Ron certainly couldn’t talk now, as he’d been seen with Lavender Brown’s tongue in his mouth more often than the cutlery in the Great Hall.' I also enjoyed reading your interpretation of Ron's character. You really seem to have your finger on the Weasley pulse.

Have you ever thought about writing one-shots from a younger Ginny's perspective? For example, what she was thinking about Harry (among other things) during the entire ‘elbow-in-the-butter’ period of her life. I think it would be a challenge to link your 15 year old Ginny with an 11 year old Ginny and show her maturing but at the same time maintain the integrity of her basic personality. Hey, maybe a vignette of select events from Ginny’s perspective through the years would be interesting. Not only could you play with the tone, but you could explore how her views regarding the world, her family, etc. evolve. Also, have you ever considered writing from the first person point of view? I think first person allows you to do more in-depth character exploration, and from this story, at least, it seems like you’d have no trouble moving into that perspective. Anyway, just some random thoughts for you; sometimes I get carried away at 1 am. Thanks for the enjoyable read!

Author's Response: Wow, such a nice long review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I love working with Ginny, she really is one of my favorites. As for writing from the first person, I did attempt it once and it certainly was challenging! I did it for a SIYE challenge last spring. You can find it on SIYE, it's called The Simplest Things. I'd love to hear what you think, even though it is AU now.

Reviewer: strangecity
Date: 10/14/05 5:33
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

I enjoyed the fic, it wa sweet but not overly done. Just like how jk rowling would have written it.

Reviewer: Neli P
Date: 10/01/05 22:17
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

Wow, just WOW! And after all that, "He" still has to split up with "Her" at the end!! Boys really were stupid! :D :D... I absolutely loved your story. The emotions, the reactions and even the humor... everything is perfect! Any other "missing moment" like this one on the way?? Like the "particularly happy moment spent at the lake", perhaps?? *wink* :)

Reviewer: Miss Radcliffe
Date: 09/29/05 17:14
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

gr8 one-shot! it aaall makes sense now! but what else could we expect from you? i'd love 2 see more missing moments! 10/10!

Reviewer: hpgabs
Date: 09/29/05 17:07
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

This is a really awesome story. i like how it is realistic in the world of harry potter. Great Job!!!!!!

Reviewer: Gin Ovia
Date: 09/26/05 21:10
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

Like Ashwinder said, this fits perfectly in canon and is most definately plausible. I've wondered about Ginny's blazened look before their kiss and I really think it mayb have been more than just havin won the match. I thnink she was on to Harry. You show the sides of Ginny very well in this. She's in character and I like that you depict her and Dean's slowly failing reationship. It dfoes make her seem less shallow than just breaking it off with him because of Harry. I don't believe she would do that. Great work! I'll keep and eye out for more of your MMs.

Reviewer: Mudblood428
Date: 09/21/05 9:27
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

*sniff* How incredibly sweet. I love Angry!Ginny almost as much as I love Ginny in Love. Wonderful characterization. What do your kids think of your writing? Do they ever get to read it?

Reviewer: Ashwinder
Date: 09/20/05 20:00
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

You've done it again -- managing to write another missing moment I haven't seen done yet. I couldn't help but notice your note at the end of the story that mentions having a few more of them kicking around in your head, so I'll be sure to keep an eye out for them.

I like how you've portrayed this. It fits seamlessly into canon. Everyone is in character, and you've shed some light on Ginny's character, her relationship with Dean and her changing feelings for Harry. All we know about this scene is what Ron tells Harry after he wakes up (along with Harry's over-the-top fantasy of what he wished had happened), but what you've written is completely plausible. Ginny's noticed that Harry's feelings for her may have changed, and this results in the realisation that her own feelings for him may not be completely dead. You've also shown that Ginny and Dean's relationship was rocky on its own (beyond anything having to do with Harry). I'm glad you showed this, because for Ginny to have eventually broken up with Dean solely because of Harry would have made her seem shallow. You've taken pains to give her a separate motivation.

I also like how you show both the tomboy side to Ginny's personality, as well as the feminine side. In earlier canon, I think we saw more of her feminine side than in the last two books, but I don't think it's completely disappeared, and you've shown this. Nice job!

Reviewer: magic sparkler
Date: 09/20/05 13:06
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

that was written very well. cant wait to read more

Reviewer: Poudlard
Date: 09/20/05 4:36
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

Hi ! Sorry, I'm french, and my English isn't very good, so would you mind excuse my mistakes ? :) I love your story, I'm stuck on this missing moments, too. Ron as a caring brother is good, and Ginny is like I imagined her. The story with the armor make me laugh ;)... You know, if I can suggest you something, could you write missing moments involving Ron and Hermione ? Pleeeeease ! When she visits him in the hospital wing after he get poisoned, or what happened after Lavender saw them coming together from the boys' dormitories ? I would like to see it, and I know you understand the characters and the events, so... Thanks !

Reviewer: RupertsPheonix
Date: 09/19/05 19:22
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

I really like this story. A ten! Great. And I really liked how you kinda made Ron a caring older brother, it was good. And I liked how Ginny started noticing how Harry noticed her. I really liked this one. Great Job!

Reviewer: Blondeshorte88
Date: 09/19/05 17:29
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

great story. was that a one shot by any chance. i'm thinking it was but just to make sure. i think the story would be great if continued but its ur story and only my opinion. it was good anyway, this different from the other missing moments, b/c everyone wants to write about what might have happened after they left the portrait hole. u could write about the great lunch harry said he spent with ginny in book 6?

Reviewer: Wise Owl
Date: 09/19/05 15:44
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

This was amazing. Well done! You reallly captured Ginnys essence and maintained the integrity of the story (no outlandish additions). Your addition of the Ron/Hermione situation was subtle yet was an excellent setup (for book seven)! Excellent writing a definate 10!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It was really fun to do Ginny's POV.

Reviewer: Madam Bones
Date: 09/19/05 14:34
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

Oho ho, another! These are great. Amazing. I loved it. The Harry/Ginny Missing Moments keep me sane in the Potter department. They are just wonderful. Each time I read these I can't help thinking about Harry and Ginny at the lake, when he said that they couldn't be together. (Harrumph...as if they will ever be able to stay apart from each other for more than a week.) I keep thinking about what Ginny or Harry was thinking at the time. Just thought I'd throw that out there, wondering if anyone else was thinking about that. I sincerely doubt that Ginny and Harry will not be a unit, they are made for each other. P-E-R-F-E-C-T!!!! Again, great job on the MM! I'm going to sleep now, as I just got back from a trip to Belgium and, though it's three thirty here it is nine thirty to my body. Sighs with hopeless romantic-ness, ~B.~

Author's Response: I am considering trying one from Ginny's POV on the breakup, since I see it very differently from most. I do think H&G will be apart for most of book 7, despite the fact neither one wants to be. I think it's kind of beautifully romantic how they are breaking their own hearts for the greater good. It shows how perfectly matched they are. That's my take, anyway.

Reviewer: UltimateAuror
Date: 09/19/05 14:23
Chapter: Moment of Clarity

Very nicely done! I enjoyed how you didn't start a story completely from scratch, but simply picked up where JKR left off. And the story itself is not far-fetched in anyway - I think it could have very well happened that way. Good job - I look forward to seeing more from you in the future.

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm havig fun with these missing moments.

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