Reviewer: HagridsTheMan
Date: 03/01/08 16:24
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

Whoa...Ginny's thoughts are pretty insightful. I'm not really sure what the hair thing was, though... She just tied it around her diary? Well, anyways, it was a great read. You've written some very nice stuff! Keep it up! :)

Author's Response: She did tie it around her diary, as it would most likey fall if anyone tried to open the diary. :-) I'm glad you liked the stuff I've written. :-D

Reviewer: REMi iS AWESOME
Date: 02/24/08 12:52
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

Aw that was so sweet. I totally didnt know how gifted you are! You can write wonderful fics that are both halarious and humourous! God I wish I was you!! Now I must arange a brain transplant I WANT YOUR BRAIN!!!! Love the amazing writing =)

Author's Response: Awww... thank you so much! :-D You're really sweet for saying that. :-) Though, I really would like to keep my brain where it is, lol.

Reviewer: sayiansirius
Date: 12/10/06 19:46
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

This is the most inspiring fic that I’ve read in a while. I read this yesterday but as I didn’t leave a review then, I thought about it all day and decided, finally, to leave one today. This is a wonderful story that you have written. The first line is so powerful and it sets off a tone to the story. It is a great starting line and it easily captures the readers’ attention. Brava!

The frequent images you use of the thunder and lightning illuminating her room sets a also sets a nice feel to the story. I say ‘nice’ because it perfectly describes the emotion felt even though this is an angsty story.

A sudden loud boom of thunder snapped her from these thoughts.

I absolutely love this line, as it also snapped me from thinking of her second year. You’ve made her emotions and thoughts so clear that it’s as if we also go back and think about them. That line immediately snaps a reader back into reality – reminding them that they are just reading a story. Not many fics do that.

Dense white fog hung low to the ground, strangely reminding her of Dumbledore's long white hair.

Great imagery! Your style of writing makes the scenes so real we can see it. :)

But of course with every great story, comes a few nitpicks. There are not many errors in your story but there are a few punctuation errors – commas where they don’t need to be, etc. Something I noticed is your use of ellipses. Occasionally, I would substitute them for a period. It gives better structure to the story as ellipses are mainly used when someone is speaking.

Eg:
But the thoughts and racket outside wouldn't leave her alone ... there would be absolutely no hope for her falling asleep any time soon.

Instead of using an ellipsis there, you could have used a period or a semicolon. The later would be more encouraged.

Your concluding line, Things will look up and there will be a brighter day ... someday ... is one of the better conclusions that I have read. With a story like this, it needs something to sum it all up and that is what this line does. It is a very strong ending and it leaves the readers with a bit of hope for Ginny.

Great, great story!!

~KC

p.s. I was so inspired, I decided to make these:
http://i12.photobucket.com/albums/a244/sayiansirius/Banners%20by%20me/GinnyWeasleysDiary2.jpg
http://i12.photobucket.com/albums/a244/sayiansirius/Banners%20by%20me/GinnyWeasleysDiary.jpg
http://i12.photobucket.com/albums/a244/sayiansirius/Banners%20by%20me/GinnyWeasleysDiary3.jpg
Hope you like them!


Author's Response: OMG! I really don't know how to thank you!! :-D I absolutely *love* the banners you made. I'm going to link them in my bio, if that's okay. :-) I'll make sure to credit you. Also, I'll make the changes to the errors you mentioned. Thank you for such a kind review!

Reviewer: HorcruxHunter14
Date: 09/17/06 0:11
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

You did a great job capturing the mood of your story. The way Ginny was portrayed was very believable in this. Great work!

Author's Response: Thanks for R&Ring! I was worried when I wrote it that I didn't do too good a job on Ginny's character, lol. :-) Thanks again.

Reviewer: HorcruxHunter14
Date: 09/17/06 0:10
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

You did a great job capturing the mood of your story. The way Ginny was portrayed was very believable in this. Great work!

Reviewer: hpfan012
Date: 02/09/06 20:17
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

that was awsome!!! it really goes along with HBP...although i do wish that harry didnt break up with Ginny. i was so excited when i read that part in the sectumsempra chapter!!! i was so happy!! anyway, yeah this was really good!! you're an awsome author...write more stories!!! 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks! :-D I wish Harry didn't break up with Ginny either, but there's still book 7, so maybe he'll come to his senses. lol Thank you for R&Ring!

Reviewer: Cedrics Lover
Date: 01/10/06 15:31
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

I agree with Lunagirl. Exellent! 10/10

Author's Response: Aww.... Thanks! :-D And muchas gracias for the 10!

Reviewer: Cedrics Lover
Date: 01/10/06 15:28
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

I agree with Lunagirl. Exellent! 10/10

Reviewer: lunagirl824
Date: 11/11/05 20:44
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

Really good. You're a great author.

Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment. :-D I'm glad you liked the story.

Reviewer: Dawn Lionheart
Date: 09/29/05 7:32
Chapter: A Day in the Life....

It follows HBP in a good way. It's sad, but I still like it. Harry....why did he have to break up with Ginny????

Author's Response: Yeah, I wish he didn't break up with Ginny either. :-( *sigh* I'm glad you liked it though.

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