Reviews For Alone
Reviewer: A_Pink_lady
Date: 09/16/06 5:52
Chapter: Alone

wow that was amazing, so sad and powerful

Reviewer: A_Pink_lady
Date: 09/16/06 5:52
Chapter: Alone

wow that was amazing, so sad and powerful

Reviewer: LalyW
Date: 07/14/06 10:47
Chapter: Alone

I liked it.No matter how dark Narcissa may be,she is still a loving mother, similar to Lily.I think she will sacrifice her own life to save her son's.

Reviewer: TheVanishingAct
Date: 10/25/05 0:46
Chapter: Alone

There is a time when you find a fic that you have seen done over and over, yet there is something so different and beautiful, that it seems to stand out on its own. This happens to be one of those instances. I have seen Narcissa/Severus done several times, and not always to the best of my expectations. However, this was done with a reason why it would seem these two have a connection. Using Draco was a brilliant idea, and I must commend you for it. Absolutely stunning.

Your use of words leave a stunning imprint upon the reader, and it justs sticks to the mind and wavers on. It can't just be read, but must be understood and thought over. It really wrapped me up into Narcissa's feeling and passion for her son, and the hurt of when he dies. I cannot stress enough on how you played this out very well and have given me the chance to actually read and enjoy, and not nitpick. This is an amazing gift.

Some examples on how you use words in a fabulous pattern: "So she goes to him, cloaked in darkness, her sister by her side to accuse and aggravate. Her heart races in panic at the thought of what she is about to do. Betray the Dark Lord’s confidence? For what? My son. My only son." This shows Narcissa in a very difficult predicament, and is rather an excellent line. "She breathes a sigh of relief, feeling a sense of rest in her soul that she hasn’t felt in a very long time." The traditional "calm before the storm" sequence. Beautifully translated.

I would like to say just a few more bits: I like how you use fear as Narcissa's bindings; I find this very effective in portraying an even deeper meaning with what you have written, and should be used as a reminder that no one was safe during this crisis. It just clicks. One line I found very poetic and a nice touch: "A sob catches in her throat as she imagines his precious face, once so sweet and perfect, now lying still in death’s slumber." I love how the sob doesn't come outward. Very nice!

Thank you for the reading pleasure; it was a great experience.

Reviewer: x2pttrclue32
Date: 10/24/05 23:57
Chapter: Alone

Oooo....nice one. I liked the tone that this story set. A lot. I think it was interesting to see the struggle that she had to go thorugh. However, it was a bit confusing at times. I couldn't tell if you were skipping forward in time, or just moving on to a different thought. I would try to organize them better next time. Also, maybe it would be useful to mention who it was? I know it's a bit obvious (and maybe my brain skipped over it o_O), but it would be helpful to some. Other than that though, the way you portayed it was wonderful. To travel into a person who doesn't show much love like that is difficult to pull off ,but you did it almost to perfection. Great job. :)

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