Reviews For Stolen Memories
Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 11/02/07 18:13
Chapter: Stolen Memories

Oh, poor Colin! *huggles the poor creature* I've never thought of him liking anyone, really, but it makes since for him to like Ginny. Honestly, who couldn't like her? =)

This was a very nice story. I caught a few typos, such as:

He slid in the photos of a moonlight corridor, slowly making his way through the paths of the castle until he stumbled upon two people he knew.

'Tis supposed to be moonlit. Other than that, good job!~

H_o_I_

Reviewer: KenTuck
Date: 05/14/06 19:36
Chapter: Stolen Memories

Wow. This is amazing and really deep. The whole thing is more of a metaphor and teaching then a story. I feel like I learned something from this story and I really like it.

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 03/21/06 1:03
Chapter: Stolen Memories

after the last review i feel really bad leaving such a short one.... but i can't really think of anything to say except for that this story is great. really great. your writing is excellent; especially the way you portray colin searching so desperately for "life" but actually hiding behind a camera and not even giving himself the chance to live. really intriguing...

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 03/21/06 1:03
Chapter: Stolen Memories

after the last review i feel really bad leaving such a short one.... but i can't really think of anything to say except for that this story is great. really great. your writing is excellent; especially the way you portray colin searching so desperately for "life" but actually hiding behind a camera and not even giving himself the chance to live. really intriguing...

Reviewer: AlexisTaylor
Date: 10/15/05 9:03
Chapter: Stolen Memories

I was lucky to have had the opportunity to run across this fiction while working. The introduction was wonderful. It captures the reader’s attention in a way that is rare in the fan fiction world. I get the impression, in fact, that you normally write original fiction, but have graced us with your presence for a moment. ;)

“The game was in finding a reality, snapping pictures at the outside world between leaps…arms tucked to his body as he poised to take a picture mid-turn, sneak up on life and hope it wouldn’t flee.”

Here, to me, you’ve portrayed an odd image: Colin as both frolicking deer, and the hunter stalking one. There isn’t the stigma of a murder afoot, though. It comes out as a bit of a dance, a manipulation on the powers that be to finally let him feel something.

“Tonight was love, an ebony hand curled around one of satin ivory he knew so well. It sent jolts of yearning pain through his veins, scorching through his innards and stopping only once it had bled through the pores on his skin in a tingling buzz of trapped bees.”

This is so interesting. Most people might feel a bit embarrassed and titillated at once to spot such a thing, but he feels life? Of course, I’m conjuring several sexual images and reactions here, but none would be out of order. I’m almost glad he’s having such an exaggerated reaction to something very simplistic – love and the expression thereof.

I also wanted to point out that I’ve rarely seen an interaction between Ginny and Dean. Most authors seem to be unable to fathom their relationship, or they’re simply not keen on investigating it in all it’s nuances, contradictions and tiny bits of beauty.

“Yeah, but normally your brother doesn’t stir when I’m up out of bed.”

This part confused me because I feel as if I’ve missed out on a scene. Did Ron spot Dean getting out of bed? Leaving the common room? Did he merely toss in his sleep, putting Dean on edge that he might wake up? Was Ron only recently aware of their nighttime excursions? I would have liked a little explanation there.

“In a way he’d become the camera, capturing their every moment and movement, wishing he was inside of it--even stuck in the static air between them; magical wavecurrents in charged energy.”

I love this image. There’s quite a bit more going on between Dean and Ginny than they’re saying. Colin, even, can feel it. He knows life. He’s always felt life, but he feels it through pictures. It’s a different way – a less satisfying way, but a way nonetheless. It’s in that little mouse. It’s in those photos he took of the professors. Well, I suppose that’s an opinion. Either way, that electricity, those shivers, that is the stuff of feeling and life.

‘Colin didn’t understand what was happening when Dean mumbled to her the words, “I love you.”’

Does anyone understand except those who have been in love before?

“What he really regretted was charming the camera to imprint a phrase on every photo. Now he had two photos emblazoned with the words, “I love you”.

And they weren’t meant for him.”

That was simply beautiful. Just gorgeous. You have a unique way with words that flows more like poetry rather than telling a story. Mind you, I don’t care for poetry. But prose-poetry is something I can deal with.

Ok, that was my endless gush for the day. Pardon me. *Gathers semblance of professionalism together*

Reviewer: 1coolmuggle
Date: 10/13/05 21:38
Chapter: Stolen Memories

oh, wait, its a one-shot?!?!?!? NOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this is sooo good!!!! it cant only be 1 chap!!!! *tear*

Reviewer: 1coolmuggle
Date: 10/11/05 19:43
Chapter: Stolen Memories

Wow, that's so cool! I like it! A couple grammatical things, but who cares?! it was flipping sweet, please write more soon!

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