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Name: hermyOniny94 (Signed) · Date: 10/15/07 5:22 · For: --

aww... make her send that letter... the poor thing... 'She fell asleep with her head in her hands, knowing that she would never send Harry the letter that held all of her feelings and emotions-that held her life. ' that wa sad. your story was great! but then, poor hermione... when did harry actually tells her that he loved her? again? thanks:) love to hear from you again.

from christie, with love

Author's Response: Hey, Christie! Actually, I kind of wanted Hary to get Hermione's letter, but then the ending wouldn't be as powerful. It's beautiful in a sad kind of way, you know? And Hary told Hermione he loved her at the end of their 7th year (this is AU, obviously). Thanks for the review!

Name: dollfaceDISASTER (Signed) · Date: 01/04/07 15:35 · For: --
that was so incredibly sweet.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you!

Name: harmonyobsessed27 (Signed) · Date: 12/23/06 14:29 · For: --
That is really sad. And loving someone who used to love you really is the saddest thing in the world.

Name: harmonyobsessed27 (Signed) · Date: 12/23/06 14:28 · For: --
That is really sad. And loving someone who used to love you really is the saddest thing in the world.

Author's Response: Indeed. Thank you for the review!

Name: lily_evans34 (Signed) · Date: 11/01/06 14:20 · For: --
Oh my goodness, Emma! I told you that I would review one of your stories, and no, I’m not forgetful, I’m generally busy. ;) But I was thinking about it today, and I decided to read this story, as Harry/Hermione is just love. Gosh, I’m glad I did! Where do I begin?

The beginning would probably be a good place. I simply adored your opening paragraphs. They set such a mood and a tone for me—it was very easy for me to get in character with Hermione quickly in this story, meaning that I could very simply feel her pain and put myself in her position. I could just feel her exhaustion from the setting you created with the overflowing wastebasket and the sun showing its last rays. I could tell how she wanted to get the letter over with, but she didn’t want to write something meaningless, and she didn’t know if she would be able to do that.

Finally, long after night had fallen, she reached for another piece of parchment and determinedly placed her quill at the top of it.

I just adore this line. What I love about it is how you use the word ‘determinedly’. To me, that seems so…Hermione. I can see her wanting to complete something just because she started it, or because she felt that she had to. I think that Hermione is an extremely determined character, and I simply love the way that you use that word to describe something that she didn’t want to do, but felt that she needed to.

She kept on going, thinking that whatever she wrote had to be better than this everlasting silence.

This was an interesting passage. The thing that caught my eye about this was comparing a finished letter with silence—the way that she thinks that an action can cover up for a sound, or lack thereof. To me, those are interesting variables to compare, but I like how you wrote this, in that Hermione felt that just completing the letter would make everything alright between her and Harry. From this line I can almost feel her need for Harry to be there with her, and her need for him to answer her letter.

Have you seen or heard from Voldemort at all?

I don’t think that this is the best way to phrase this line. It seems like what you meant was Harry and Voldemort were pals, and they talk to each other. *giggles* I think ‘hears from’ is a sort of line you’d say about someone you were close to. I would say ‘Have you seen or heard anything about Voldemort at all?’ Sorry if you don’t see the difference there, but to me at least it creates quite the different effect!

The thing is that after you left . . . after you left that night, I did a lot of thinking, Harry.

You end the letter momentarily here, so you’d need to close that part with quotes.

Someone once told me: You know what the saddest thing in the word is? To love someone who used to love you.

I just adored this line. That’s such a sad thing to think about; realising that you love someone after you’ve lost your chance. This line really makes me feel for Hermione, and it gives me a good idea about her condition—that Harry once loved her, and that he might not love her now.
She fell asleep with her head in her hands, knowing that she would never send Harry the letter that held all of her feelings and emotions-that held her life.

This story brought me close to tears, helped along by this line. I wanted to yell ‘Nooo! Send the letter!’ to Hermione, but I refrained from doing so. ;) It’s so heartbreaking to think about—Hermione’s life could be changed by sending this one letter, but she won’t even do that. She could have easily sent it, but after that, things would be out of her control. Without sending it, she can dream that Harry feels the same way about her, but once Harry gets it, she might learn that he no longer loves her. Even though us readers can tell that Hermione would rather have Harry there with her, she was afraid that sending the letter would erase that option, so she kept it.

This was a truly moving fic, Emma, darling, and I hope to read more of your work soon!


Author's Response: *looks at review in wonder* Holy! This has got to be the longest, most detailed, bestest review ever! *huggles* Aaaaaahhh, I don't know where to begin! I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed it, being an H/HR shipper and all, and even more happy that you really grasped the main idea of the whole thing! I remember I had so much writing this fic, it was actually for a challenge with the line "You know what the saddest thing in the word is? To love someone who used to love you." I fell in love with it at first sight and thus the fic was born. lol. I really, really appreciate your comments, and yes, I shall change all that sounds ... sketchy. Ummm, yesss.... *stares at review more* Thank you soooooo much Rach! You just totally made my day! And it was such a tiring one, at that. And I can't even write about it on LJ because my stupid server won't let me connect to it. *squishes review and Rach* *and sends love* :D

Name: Natloy_Tee (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 12:42 · For: --
you have to rite more to this, its amazing,

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm thinking of a sequal, but then again I'm thinking of a lot of other fanfics, so I don't really know how long this will take. Thanks for your review!

Name: Velvet Tears (Signed) · Date: 07/17/06 13:09 · For: --
Oh. My. God. You brought tears to my eyes! I loved it! It's a really powerful story. You should make a sequal of the letter Harry wants to write to her but doesn't send it. Almost like the same story from his point of veiw, if that makes any sense, which I doubt it does.
xxx V T xxx

Author's Response: Thank you! That means so much to me! I really like the idea of a sequal actually, and I'm willing to look more into it! Thanks again for your review!

Name: hogwartsduchess (Anonymous) · Date: 05/18/06 14:08 · For: --
Forgive me for the gushing review I'm about to leave. This is incredible. I almost cried sitting here at my desk. It's very moving, touching and sweet.

I'm a bit confused as what Lupin's transformation has to do with the entire thing - I think that could have been expounded upon just a bit.

I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors, so great job there.

You've got a very emotive way of expressing things that makes the reader believe what you write. I can't wait to see other things from you.

Author's Response: *squee* Thanks so much for the wonderful review! I'm so very pleased that you liked it. As for Lupin's transformations, I guess it was just a reminder of the many things that Harry and Hermione have gone through together. It might be a little bit "thrown in there", though. Either way, I might go expand it later. Again thank you gor the heart-warming review!

Name: lunafish (Signed) · Date: 09/17/05 15:27 · For: --
What a touching story! I'm impressed by the way you frame the story with her exhausted restlessness and an awareness of things not right around her to emphasize that she's taking time to pour out her feelings in the midst of war because she has to. And the letter itself conveys so much feeling. When I finished, I wished that she had sent the letter, but perhaps it's more believable that she doesn't. I really enjoyed reading this!

Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I'm very happy you liked liked reading this, because it's a fanfic I enjoyed writing very much. As for the letter, I thought it would be a little bit more touching to have Hermione not send it. She might in time, tell Harry how she really feels. Thank you once more.

Name: deanine (Signed) · Date: 09/17/05 6:57 · For: --
Okay, I'm a totally rabid Harry/Ginny, Hermione/Ron shipper...yet I enjoyed this fic. It has a poignant, viscerally emotional power. Excellent work.

Constructive comment:

"Especially now, in these times, I have realized not to take anything for granted, because you never know when you might lose it."

This sentence just reads a little awkwardly. I tripped over it mentally when reading the fic and had to go back. Could just be my brain, but I thought I'd mention it.

Overall: This is a lovely piece, with great imagry and real emotional pull.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your detailed review. I'm very happy you enjoyed this piece, even more so since you are a R/Hr and H/G shipper. Also thank you for your constructive comments I will certainly look over your suggestion. Thank you again!

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