Eeek, this was good! I think you wrote the whole atmosphere of a nightclub really well, as well as Hermione's behaviour in one. Is the mystery man a character we know, or someone new? I want to know! Please update soon!
Oh my God! Kinda strange, but very cool. I wanna know who this guy is! I cracked up laughing picturing Harry and Ron breakdancing. Can't wait for the next chapter!
I agree with most, it's reasonable for them to have a night out. Assuming they really are in the club described they’re all behaving the way each should to the situation. As for the mystery man, the Hispanics near the Texas-Mexico boarder believe that the Devil visits night clubs on Halloween and such times and dances with the most beautiful, most hard-to-get girl in the club. My money’s on an out-of-town vistor.
I could also Ron trying to break dance. That would sure be a sight! I wonder who the mystery guy is? I have a hunch, but I'm not really sure. Please update soon!
Very very good. I mean, it might not seem like hermoine but if you're always uptight and nervous some time you just got to loosen up and make do with what you've got. I love it, you left all the right clues to guessing who the mystery guy is..
I think you did a great job with this chapter. Despite the odd surroundings of a night club..It is still believeable ..I mean why wouldn't they have a night out? Hermione was still IC you described her as hesitant and logical. Harry and Ron Breakdancing was really quite funny I could just picture poor Ron trying to do it as well as Harry. As for the scene with Hermione's 'mystery' partner I think you had excellent description of not only what was going on but also of Hermione's feelings towards this man. I also believe you left just enough clues for us to determine who this mystery man is, as I think I know who it is :) and I for one can't wait to see whats coming in the next chapter.
This is so good! I need to know who da mystery guy is or i shall kill myself. Not. Great job!!!!
it was not really good its just doesn't seem like hermione
o0o, intruiging! Who is it, who is it??? Update soon...I wanna find out who this mystery guy is...