Reviews For Transformations
Reviewer: Fading
Date: 09/10/06 14:29
Chapter: Point of View

I like all of it, but I think you do a great job with Remus especially. He would definetely hide his emotions like that, try not to hurt Tonks or their friendship, and I think you've done very well with that. =) More please!

Author's Response: Thank you! More is forthcoming!

Reviewer: siriuslycoco
Date: 09/10/06 13:36
Chapter: Point of View

awww...this story is so adorable...i wish they would tell each other how they felt!!! they are making me crazy!!! lol... but awesome chapter...hope you can update soon!!! great job (as always!)

Author's Response: Well, that comes next chapter :D. Thank you so much for reading my story; I'm very glad you enjoy it!

Reviewer: rubberducky4luck
Date: 09/09/06 17:56
Chapter: Point of View

please kee going i love this story it's one of my favorites i has ALMOST inspired me to write my own story

Author's Response: I'm glad! Inspiring other people to write is a cool thing. This story will keep going for at least two more chapters, don't worry!

Reviewer: nadine29
Date: 09/09/06 14:12
Chapter: Point of View

aww swweeeet story! im sure you're gna drag this thing for a long time tho huh? not that im disappointed..but its that they took too long in noticing lol...anyway..keep going!

Author's Response: Thank you! I actually think this story will be over in about two chapters. I can't be sure, but I am positive it won't go beyond twelve at the most. I'm glad you like it so much!

Reviewer: hogwartswannabe
Date: 09/09/06 13:59
Chapter: Point of View

this story is so good!!! i can't wait to find out what happens in the next chapters!!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm excited about what's to come!

Reviewer: purpleplastisine
Date: 08/31/06 18:12
Chapter: Aftermath

Please update? *puppy-dog eyes*

Author's Response: I'm working on it! I'm sorry it's been so long...I'll really try to hurry!

Reviewer: I_Miss_Sirius
Date: 08/28/06 20:17
Chapter: Aftermath

Good stuff... Good stuff... Gah, I'm addicted! Why you people who write these stories?! Why! Now I'm wasting the last few days of my summer vacation on this when I should be out enjoying the freedom. At least it's raining, that's one excuse. It's a very good type of waste though. For some reason, in the previous one (I think...) I found it amusing when Dumbledore said "...you hear?" Well, keep doing what you're doing, hope you update soon!

Author's Response: Hmm. Perhaps Dumbledore's response was not, perhaps, entirely in-character...but it does work. I'm so glad you liked my story! Update is in the works!

Reviewer: Fading
Date: 08/16/06 16:24
Chapter: Aftermath

Well?...it was amazing! I feel so sorry for the pair of them. You do a great job of bringing the characters to life. The next chapter can't come soon enough. =)

Author's Response: I hope it will come soon; I've got to send it through my betas. But it's on the first "final" draft, so...!

Reviewer: Fading
Date: 08/16/06 16:08
Chapter: The Department of Mysteries

Thanks for another awesome chapter!

Author's Response: You are more than welcome!

Reviewer: Fading
Date: 08/16/06 15:57
Chapter: The Platypus and the Wolf

Another wonderful chapter! I can't think of anything that could improve. =)

Author's Response: I'm flattered!

Reviewer: Fading
Date: 08/16/06 15:47
Chapter: Christmas at Grimmauld Place

Great chapter! And I love Tonks' hair =)

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I was proud that I got something mildly artistic out of myself for this one, outlandish as it is.

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 08/12/06 14:03
Chapter: The Platypus and the Wolf

I like that you began the chapter with the werewolves ranting about wizards. The different perspective is interesting and gives the reader a feel for what Remus has to do when associating with them.

I also really like the shrewd ways Remus gathers information. It's impressive, all he can figure out.

“There’s werewolves at Borgin and Burkes! Kingsley needs to be warned!” 'There's' should be 'There are'.

Nymphadora Tonks yawned hugely, turned on her heel and Disapparated from right outside the Ministry of Magic to a dirty street in London. I love the yawn you added at the beginning of this sentence. It makes Tonks seem both herself and very humanly tired. I love it when you add little details to the story like that: they make it more believable and personal.

With that in mind, she tapped the door, which slid silently open. Did she tap on it with her wand? Before, when she rapped, it didn't open, so I assume it was her wand, but I wasn't quite sure.

The transformation was marvelous. I loved the way you made Remus throw himself at the door through which Tonks could see. The section was entirely believable, and Tonks's fearless worry after the transformation was admirable and another lovely sign of her growing feelings for him.

But this is worse than the time Arthur found me, Remus argued silently. Why should that be? This little bit of confusion is precious. It corresponds both with his feelings for Tonks and with his recent transformation, the combination of which leave him completely lost.

asked in a voice that tried very hard to break away from him I can hear, quite clearly, the voice you describe here. It's a wonderful way to show both how Remus sounded and how his voice felt when he realised what happened.

Tonks thought he was paler than usual and for the first time that she had known him, he stammered. You already mentioned that he was paler than usual, but I like the second part of this sentence,when you say that Tonks notices Remus's stammering. The way Remus said his next words was particularly impressive because Remus never referred to himself as a werewolf. I found this interesting, the mention of a werewolf attacks other people as opposed to relating it back to himself.

Only werewolves is a good connection to the beginning, when the werewolves to whom Remus was speaking said that wizards did't consider them part of society: they were right.

And once again, a lovely chapter! I'm sorry there was so much to commend. Well, I'm not actually sorry, but it is a lot of reading for you. Anwyway, the conclusion was delightfully peaceful and worked well to show how Tonks helped calm the sense of panic Remus had felt earlier in the chapter. Excellent work, dear!

Author's Response: Good heavens, don't ever be sorry! I adore long reviews. They make me happier than a load of caffeine and sugar together. Seriously. Thanks for pointing out those evil mistakes; they will be fixed shortly. Thanks also for stringing together the parts you liked -- I know I liked them there, but I can't always say why, so it's great to find out! Yes, Remus doesn't speak too often of himself -- I know it's movie-canon, but I think of the part when Remus says that the parents will not want "a...a...what I am" or something like that. It's a very real part of him, but at the same time, he tries to disconnect from it. Thank you so much for such a beautiful review! Come any time you please! :D

Reviewer: Helena Valentine
Date: 08/10/06 9:51
Chapter: Aftermath

is that all????

Author's Response: So far, but it's not done yet! Keep watching for new updates!

Reviewer: Helena Valentine
Date: 08/10/06 9:51
Chapter: The Department of Mysteries

i completely love this story!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: kaammini_the_kreacher
Date: 08/05/06 4:20
Chapter: The Department of Mysteries

That was a really great chapter....I could feel myself have the shock of Sirius dispite me havibng read the books. Also, your way of writing Snape was spot on - I really felt dislike towards him. Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I dislike Snape myself, so that part was actually rather fun. He's so snarky (not that I know exactly what that means, but I like it). Thanks lots!

Reviewer: purpleplastisine
Date: 07/29/06 10:47
Chapter: Of Umbrella Stands and Magic Eyes

Wow, I love this! Very well written!

Author's Response: Thank you and thank you!

Reviewer: WunderWitch
Date: 07/21/06 21:21
Chapter: Of Umbrella Stands and Magic Eyes

Haha! I love embarrassed Tonks!

Author's Response: Thank you! That's the first time anyone's given me that particular compliment!

Reviewer: siriuslycoco
Date: 07/17/06 0:54
Chapter: Aftermath

wow great chapter...wonderfully written...i love it...update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you, the next chapter is brewing nicely!

Reviewer: FaunaCaritas
Date: 07/15/06 5:00
Chapter: Aftermath

Bravo, bravo, bravo! I am enjoying this story so much. You write beautifully, and have an original touch. Please keep updating this story frequently.

I have a few 'polishing' suggestions, for lack of a better term. Look back to the chapter when Tonks sees Remus as a transformed werewolfe. You wrote that Sirius put an imperturbable charm on the door and after that point you switch back and forth between this meaning that the people outside can/cannot hear Lupin's growls, ect. Example; Sirius hears his howls of pain, Tonks hears him breathing/smashing furniture... then you say that Tonks is creeped out because she can see Lupin snarling at her but can't hear him doing it. See what I mean? Also there is a place where Lupin is thinking about Tonks and you say, "he wondered idly he wondered how many opponents had underestimated her." Might want to take out the extra 'he wondered.' There are a few more little things like that you might want to check for, but I can't seem to remember any more right now (after all it's three o'clock in the morning... good fan fiction is not a remedy for insomnia, hehe!)

I loved this story, thanks again and again for the entertainment. Plot work, character development, the play of emotions-- all excellent. Please keep writing this one, or I might need to hunt you down and cast the irreversible hex of the hesitant author on you. I don't know if having your fingers stuck to a keyboard is pleasant...

Pax.

Author's Response: Ah, dang it! The problem with getting impatient and posting your own work before a beta sees it is pretty obvious...grr. Okay, thanks, and I'll fix the extra "he wondered". I'll also take a look at and figure out the sound/sight difficulties. Thank you again for your comments. They really do help me keep going!

Reviewer: phoenix_tears13
Date: 06/28/06 10:43
Chapter: Aftermath

Awesome way to do that chapter, i bet it was really hard! Sooo....what happens next? I need to know!!!

ps
loved the whole story, it was so realistic (i bet that was very close to what really happened)

Author's Response: Thank you! This chapter actually came a lot faster than the others because I had written two scenes a long time ago that fit together to make this chapter. I just had to smooth it out and make it consistent. What happens next? I'm figuring that out now!

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