Reviewer: liljoo1013
Date: 06/13/14 18:03
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

loved it

Reviewer: MadamPince
Date: 07/13/09 4:40
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

OMFG!! This is so perfect and wonderful and marvellous that I really really wish that it had been in the actual book!
Great work!
:)

Reviewer: harry4lif
Date: 08/17/08 20:25
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

I have to say that out of all of the stories on the archives, this is one of my favorites. It shows emotion that not many can express or have the characters feel. You did a great job with it.

In the beginning, you didn’t have a lot of dialogue, but I liked the feeling you had flowing around. Of course Harry would be hurting. He had just seen his Headmaster die basically to save him.

This story probably would have happened, and it was extremely believeable. Even though we didn’t hear of something like this happening, I can actually believe that it did that night. It was an interesting twist on something on the story we saw.

I was a bit worried though when you had Harry think certain things. In Order of the Phoenix, you see that he shows his emotion in another way when he was expelled. He holds it in and seems to get moody and nervous. It seems that all these thoughts about crying seem a bit out of character, but that might just be my opinion of it.

Towards the end, you did have more dialogue, which was good, and I liked it. I like the touch of Dean and Seamus coming in to the dormitory. I think that they would be saying that type of thing. After all, Harry knew what happened when Dumbledore died, though not many others did, and certainly not them. The loss of the Headmaster, so suddenly, would have been a shock to all there.

Other then that, I loved your dialogue. It seemed to flow well in your story, and it worked.

Harry did seem a tad out of character with the crying part, but I think it is all right due to the situation that he was in and such. He did cry over Dumbledore’s body.

The gentle tides of sleep finally washed over him as he held onto Ginny in front of the fire in the common room. He knew things couldn’t stay like this. He knew what he had to do, and a plan was slowly forming and taking shape within his mind, but for now…for tonight…he wanted this. Nothing was going to take him from her side.

I love that paragraph. Harry loves Ginny and I love the way you worded this. Like he could have a night of peace before the hardships begin again and he must leave her side, if only for a little while.

Other then this I just have a few nitpicks.

-- He didn’t know what he wanted and wished he could just find sleep.

Your are contradicting yourself with this sentence. In the previous sentence, you said Harry wanted to be alone, and now you say that he doesn’t know what he want.

-- "Go back to your own dorm, twerp" Seamus replied, disgruntled, and Harry heard the door slam shut.

First off, there would be a comma after twerp. Secondly, I don’t think that Seamus would call Colin that.

-- Harry had to bite his lip to keep from crying out. He was not going to cry.

This seems a bit weird. In Order of the Phoenix we see that Harry takes out his emotion in other ways, not crying. So why would he cry now?

-- I couldn’t move – I couldn’t help.

I think that a semi-colon would be more appropriate in this spot.

Once again, great job with this story!

~Alyssa

Reviewer: Fiffer Haliwell
Date: 07/01/08 23:50
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

Wow this story gets me evey time i read it. it's wonderful and i really think you managed to capture the moment.

Reviewer: GryffindorWitch_HeRo
Date: 03/14/08 23:29
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

wow! i love your one-shots! i like things short and sweet without all the suspense of waiting for another chapter! Oh and by the way, i LOVED that you mentioned the monster in Harry's chest! The monster is my favorite character! I was so pissed at the abscence of the monster in DH! oh well! Cheerio! ~Melissa Hope

Reviewer: love_letters
Date: 02/20/08 15:41
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

wow grat stuff i loved it

Reviewer: love_letters
Date: 02/20/08 15:41
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

wow grat stuff i loved it

Reviewer: loveismagicharry
Date: 10/01/07 16:41
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

You are a truly brilliant writer.You write the best one shots and HBP missing mon=ments!Please write more!

Reviewer: needsomefelixfelicis
Date: 09/08/07 20:40
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

that was great. i really enjoyed it because you wrote the characters very well, so it seemed like it actually happened in the book.

Reviewer: Adelfore Flamell
Date: 08/02/07 0:13
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

that was absolutely beautiful! It was tragic and painful.. but so very realistic. I loved it. I wish there were more stories like this one. Stories that hold so much emotion in every word... I could think of no better way to deal with a loss like that then holding onto the one true person i loved! Absolutely Brilliant.

Reviewer: iAMmissdelaney
Date: 07/29/07 1:39
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

It's great, I'm actually crying, and I hate crying. Especially when it's 1:30 AM.

I loved how you put the Friends reference when Ross and Rachel were on a break, lol, I couldn't help but to crack a smile.

Thumbs up!

Reviewer: FreeRaven
Date: 06/17/07 17:15
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

I just stumbled over this one shot and I just love this missing moment! You did a great job with the characterization and canon references. I especially liked that you included Dean and Seamus-- I often wonder how they feel about Harry, Ron, and Neville's adventures when they share the same space with the 3. Keep writing!

Reviewer: FreeRaven
Date: 06/17/07 17:14
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

I just stumbled over this one shot and I just love this missing moment! You did a great job with the characterization and canon references. I especially liked that you included Dean and Seamus-- I often wonder how they feel about Harry, Ron, and Neville's adventures when they share the same space with the 3. Keep writing!

Reviewer: DODA Sensei
Date: 05/11/07 22:30
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

I've discovered that I'm a true-blue H/G shipper!

"Her smile could light a room for him, and, in turn, her tears were enough to shroud the sun." - That's a phrase that ducks neatly past being a cliche to end up exquisite!! Thanks yet again!

- CB

Reviewer: Alas123623
Date: 05/07/07 6:31
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

Nice Job. Really enjoyed it!!

Reviewer: MagicalMaddie331
Date: 04/03/07 18:22
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

This is going on my favorite's list as well. This story was done so perfectly; feelings, transitions, actions, thoughts, dialogue...Well done.

Reviewer: emmaholloway
Date: 03/18/07 10:10
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

I loved this!!
Her smile could light a room for him, and, in turn, her tears were enough to shroud the sun. Thats such a beautiful thing to say... or think, but same difference. You're a fantastic writer, your style is really good.
Emma x x x

Reviewer: Phoenixis
Date: 03/09/07 23:59
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

Brilliant! HBP missing moments are turning into one of my favorite one-shot topics. I'm sure your others are just as great.

Reviewer: hpfreak101
Date: 02/03/07 16:23
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

This was fanastically sweet and not overly fluffy. Great job!

Reviewer: Fiffer Haliwell
Date: 01/28/07 19:28
Chapter: His Best Source of Comfort

i loved this short story it helps make harry look more mature and human i guess i don't know how to describe it

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